Synopsis
Harry Potter was a child who was not meant to be. Running away from home, he lived between the streets of muggle world and the wizarding world. Disappointed by the lack of magic he vowed to improve it. But can he really do it when he is caught by someone who may change his life forever.
[I have combined the chapters to make them longer. I have also proofread them and removed the grammatical mistakes and a few minor plot holes.
Reviews are appreciated as I would like to know how my story is and if I have to correct something with my writing style. The image does not belong to me and neither does Harry Potter or Marvel.
Hope you have a good time reading this book.]
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The story is okay and I enjoyed it but the main plot seemed to jump around in the first few chapters before deciding on where the story was about to go.
I start very cliche, it wouldn't be a problem, but it's very cliche: -.05 stars (I can't say what bothered me the most at the beginning but I felt cringe in some parts) too rushed: you don't understand anything, before you start liking a character he dies : - 2 stars like the potter family sucks worse than malfoy just because, yeah : -0,5 stars you can't like the protagonist, and everything you look at is disgusted by the rest of the people. I give 2.5 stars and I'm being generous