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Kuro Shizumatta died. He was reborn in the Naruto World with a System. One very similar to the Gamer System.
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** Justification of errors: I write using a smartphone. English is not my first language and this is my first novel. **
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No harem pls ................................................................................ ------------------------------------------------- ................................................................................ -------------------------------------------------
Shameless author here. If you have any suggestions, let me know! Also, ask what you want! If you're going to insult me, please be gentle! Mhmm... hm.. hmmm...
Seeing a Good Book turn boring and into a literal info dump but hey let's go to the review. 1-Writing Quality: The book is written well and has only a few spelling and grammar mistakes. So that's already a good thing for me since some love google translation. [4 Stars Here] 2-Story Development: In the beginning it was great, we saw Kuro(MC) Developing nice and interacting more with other people. Since he was learning about his system there was a more "natural" flow of things like getting skills and all. But after he leaves the village... I think even while still in the village his goals turn to become more powerful and that's okay, what ruined the book for me story wise was the fact that things just happened, it became a literal info dump with the MC barely even talking or doing anything. [3 Stars because of the start of the book, the lack of the rest are because of the plot progression] 3-Character Design: Again... Start good, things where detailed and personalities where shown but later most characters become numb or even irrelevant. The MC becomes "OP" but he still is boring because of the plot progression. [3 Stars here shouldn't be a surprise] 4-Updating Stability: We get updates every week, sometimes it was daily, sometimes it was a few times a week and recently I think it lowered. [4 Stars Here... I haven't really been paying attention to this book in a while but I've still read the chapters] 5-World Background: We get details about the background but due to most chapters being info dumps I don't really pay attention to it too much anymore and don't "imagine" it like I usually do on other books, what I mean is mental visualisation. [4 Stars here] Overall:3.6 The story was good, great actually but later it became boring due to lack of decent character interactions, build up to events, lack of hard work or quests that's make it interesting or anything like that. I really used to wait excitedly for new chapters of this book but it died down till I became numb to new chapter releases.
The Mc has a solo leveling vibe to him that I love while the author still makes it entertaining Even with an OP character. Plus no harem. So A+
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
I don't get the story, at first it was okay but after the storyline where danzo death it get's worse. The time skip is bad the explanation for the timeskip and why he did it is also bad. Everything is bad. Seriously i didn't get the story even until the ending why he did it and how the story got progressed so fast.
It was going very well in the beginning, but after itachi fight, everything went bad, he started to rush too much............................................
I loved the story, great character design, not like i know what that is but my point its i loved the main character, Writing quality was ok. Updates? the story is done, while i prefer longer stories it ended on a sweet note. development is there for sure but it was a bit fast for my taste. Background, disappointed me there was little to no info on who the main character was interested in romantically. Granted there was a few times the story didn't just hover of the MC. Over all good, but for your next story, work on that background, thank you for the story.
One of the more well written fanfiction stories on this site. The pace and writing quality were great. The only problem truly with the story is the abrupt ending.
I really want Kuro to be with Ino. I like the ship I also like the idea of making him look like Yato. Hope he relates more with the Naruto characters. Hope this doesn’t become harem
The story is decent. It's a bit cliche, taking place in Konoha in the same era as Konoha 12. Thankfully, there are no Sharingans or Hashirama cells so far. He is busy with other means of power. Such as basic attributes and elemental merging.
Por favor no lo dejes caer esta muy buena la historia y muy entretenida con todo y que el prota esta OP sabes mantener la historia muy interesante
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The story is great pls don't drop it in the near future 🙏. I am going to start giving 2 power stones each day from tomorrow so pls don't drop it.
Man, this was a better read than expected. I saw some reviews about the ending, so I actually thought it would be worse. There sure is some stuff I don't like, but at least there is an ending. It was relaxing, kind of. Considering I could easily binge read it. Peace.
Literally will not stop showing up for "recently updated" hhhhhhhhhhhhjdstugdtihd to dtifyydyyhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
as the story progresses I was not even able to understand what is happening. It can be that I am an idiot, or the story is getting a little confusing.
This was amazing and thanks for writing it anyways… Just thought you should know... So thanks author-chan!!!!! Your awsome!!!
advantages - original story, good mc, easy to understand. and then the cons are - too short a story (you can ignore it), little interaction with other characters, too little a non-canonical story (like a normal life) and hmmm ... how to say ... well I can't tell but as if somehow missing, i can say that the story is good but not the best and somehow missing like other fanfics ... this fanfic mc gained strength but it seems to have been gained for nothing. (it's like pottery without clay)
i'm telling you don't make it harem, it will ruin everything you're trying to do. .......................................................................