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How I,Vandal Savage's brother, became a pirate king too early
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A One piece fan gets the chance to reincarnate into One Piece World with no extra power or into DC world of his choosing with a few perks. Now what will he choose?
MC: "I am a 100% OP fan so there is not even a moment of doubt... I choose option 2."
ROB1: HUH?! But you could meet Luffy, Roger and even find the ONE PIECE. Why did you not choose that option.
MC: If I don't have any extra power I'm as good as dead with the Yonko, admiral or even if a Celestial Cunt finds me while i'm still weak and there is no guarante that I would become stronger I migth be just a random character"
ROB2: "HAHAHAHAHAHA. HE got you there. Well Done mortal as a thanks for showing me the sight of him losing you will have extra perks at his expenses!"
All other ROBs: Agreed!!
It's my first writing so don't expect some 10th level literature as Oda.
I don't own any DC or One Piece or there respective Characters
Edit: I added the "Too early" cuz I forgot to put it there
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Not that good, not that bad either, I would say it's pretty good for a first time writting. This is, of course, my opinion but here it goes things I would like to change if I could: Too many wishes, and too OP as well, the first wish for his family was great, I like that, sounds more grounding than the usual psycopath orphan or something like that that we usually see. His use of background to be immortal was pretty smart, but honestly Vultrimite stuff should be a wish, but when he asks for the Gamer System the balances tips off completely, Gamer System + Immortality = Infinity Grind, instead of showing him slowly leveling up, author chose another solution... time skips, I don't think it is that good to have more time off "screen" than on "screen", there are exceptions, but I would advise avoiding it. So yeah, the coolest part about systems is that feeling of progression, I can see people choosing system over omnipotence just for the fun of it, but what's the point if he get's the system, time skips a lot of years, and now suddenly he's super strong, if you're going to do that you might as well give him the instant strenght. It felt ultra rushed, and I get why, you wanted him to win against Kronos, but in my opinion the mistake started there, like since the beggining of the story his first opponent is probably the strongest one that he'll have to worry about? That doesn't sound like good stroy telling in most cases. Manly what I wanted to say to author is trying not to worry too much on *being* a good writter, trying to writte myself you go to a path where you try doing something great just for it to fail, fooling the gods, the plot twists, message from his past self, all the post-reincarnation with the ROBs honestly, the locked memories, all of those try to create a more deep understanding of the story, or trying to surprise the reader, trying too much to estlabish that MC is a smart guy, they all fell flat, at the end of the day this is a fanfic, trying to do something complex sometimes to more harm than good, no one is really questioning, "Why was he chosen?", "Who are the ROBs?", you could've ended with that original story of his friend or whatever and nobody would've batted an eye. Overall I liked MC personality, even though sometimes he was annoying, like becoming a pirate after already being a god... but I'm a sucker for easy going, loud laughter, mischiveous MCs, saddly dropped at chapter 21 I think, when he starts to pretend to be weaker and a young hero and stuff, don't like that type of stuff, that's it.
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I dont get it he chose dc because it is safer? There are literally beings who can destroy anything even the creator of all is alive their What about one piece you can just go to a save island like the one where luffy grow up
Hmm, it looks more like wish fulfillment with moments of humor, this fan fic is more for a moment of relaxation did not take it too seriously.. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
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Honestly I have to congratulate the author, it's a very pleasant story, it's easy and light, right And despite the theme with some external Gods and the dc world, this kind of thing that normally makes the story darker and heavier but the author put some of the concepts of a play, it was very calm it's a fun story, and the parts we want to see about the development, it's being well done, the power of the MC doesn't increase too quickly either, we know that Mc will probably be one of the most powerful beings in this reality, but for now he's controlling himself well, right, as long as he's not one of those Mc's who only think with his head down, the story can develop well, I hope it stays that way, congratulations author.
I like it very much. It has consistent updates. It’s very fun to read. It is also very exciting and interesting. I don’t understand why people hate. It might be a little weird but it’s pretty good. Even though I make a lot of negative reviews, I will give this book a 5/5.
Story is as cra ppy as a sh i t fic is but then again it isnt that bad. Power progression though fast was legit and a kinda legally earned part but it kinda ruins the whole young justice and dc plot. And Vandal savage is not even shown once I'd like to know why.
ZEHAHAHAHA I LIKE THIS.. keep it man/woman[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Trash. The system forcefully sends him through time to fight Kronos as well as the fact that mc has an annoying personality and all of his wishes were completely useless
hellow author thanks for the great read! the interactions between characters are always fun to read!! though sometimes it can get confusing hope you can explain things clearly in the future chaps anyways thanks and have a good night/day/afternoon!!! oh and for those wandering wether to read this or not i recommend you to try!😁
there is a few red flags here for me one he makes just insanely op wishes two the grammar ain't the best it's not the worst I've seen however you have some how made me like or I'm just bored
We need a girl for our mc dude An immortal and not useless one ........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
a lot of the earlier chapter are filled with stats and nonsense for a big chunk of it, also some things happen in the story without any explanation, some things are built up and then nothing happens or it happens off screen with little explanation, also the grammar sucks.
I liked it up to the point where he took a part of himself and made it into a separate person. without it knowing what it was and then adding romance to it. stupid
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Más capitulos por favor, jajajajajjaja me mate de la risa de cómo te burlas de todos ajjajajajajajajjajaja, muy única tus risas que tienes. Porfa no le dejes así , continua lo porfavor
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No offense but... After reading this fanfic in my mind I'm imagining the author writing with thier hair in proper prim place with a spec on thier nose. Typing out regally on some kinda typing apparatus but suddenly after some chapters- They just throw Everything Outta way n take out a bag of coke, smash it with thier head, crush up the spec for added taste, and just started snorting up till kingdom come. Then with thier hair going crazy, just continued from there, typing out whatever thing thier coke-delirium induced brain of theirs' keep sending out everytime it jumps about n hits a corner of thier skull, but it's not much as the skull is not square or cubed...it's round n doens't have corners.
Kinda my first writing so... I'm opened cronstructive critisism and english ian't my first language. I'm giving this a 5 cuz i'm optismistic about this one