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Authority Fought For -- A Simple VRMMO Story
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Synopsis
Raid and his friends finally have the capital to buy full-dive virtual reality capsules and play a VRMMO together. In researching how to play their chosen game--Authority Fought For--Raid discovers that he may have the opportunity to blaze a new trail to power using the least popular Class. Will he succeed?
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Obviously.
Anyway, this story is a collaboration project between me and...Raidishier, whom I'm introducing to the world of fantasy fiction writing and named the MC after.
This story, as described by the title, is just something simple he and I cooked up in our free time.
If you like the story be sure to comment and follow it, because I want this to be his encouragement to get into writing!
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Hey! I finished reading the 7 chapters out and well, it is what I came from: a simple vrmmo story. Still, the "overlooked class being crazy overpowered" and "everyone looking down on the mc because of his class and skill choices" is a bit overused at this point, but the novelty of your concept drew me in. But, I would recommend reducing your exposition, long explanations tend to be tedious...you can make them work better if you show us with action and in a dynamic way. There were some awkward fight scenes, but I've seen worse, yours are not that bad. And finally, the MC is kind of generic. I would love to see a more fleshed-out character and interesting settings. As a personal recommendation, do things your own way, if you copy others your product will just be another drop in the ocean, be creative, be wild, surprise us :)