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I was worried when you suddenly stopped uploading for straight 4 days after uploading everyday and taking down the cover pic. Glad you didn't stop and here is my review so please don't ever stop♥
3.2 1 star on writing: The translator did not even try to edit the chapters well. The words and terminologies are so obviously done in a hurry. 1 star character design: The MC is made by chinese so, he wants more magic power as an 11 yr old obscurus. and he even said allocating stat points is a pressing matter!? Because he could add any more stat points in magic which is already legendary?? hello!??? his physic is 1 (ordinary) why not put it there cuz that will save your freaking life!? stupid MC
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currently loving it, the seamless blending of the different sources is very refreshing
Great Fanfic . The story is intriguing and does go to main lead wanting to control everything. The world development is great giving chances for future plots . The plot movement is somewhat slow but understandable to help in background management at the start. Just hope it doesn't get dropped. All in all one of my favorite fanfics till now.
I honestly don't understand why this story is rated so high? I mean, it reads like a bad translation, the characters are reduced to cheerleaders who worship mc, and sometimes the terms used differ from the original and get used inconsistently. But at least i have the feeling the author is a fan of the series and actually read the books. The explanation about the goldfinger (System) and its actual use are also a bit different, while the rewards appear to be random. The power level also randomly spikes, making the progression quite weird. It is a pretty basic story that orients itself close to the books, and the new parts added to the story and world building appear a bit bland, but it seems the story is slowly diverging from the original, so maybe that will change. Overall, I would give this story barely a 3 out of 5 if we don't consider the update stability, which is good.
This is kind of boring in my opinion. The magic part is good, but the main character is just too perfect. There is no suspense, humor, or original characters. If you want to read about a gender-bent Mary Sue, then this is it, but if you want some exciting wizard battles, I can't recommend this.
So gooood!! And did he just creat Ultron? Lookimg forward to see him become a White Lord so don't drop.
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What a great Fanfic. MC isn't an idiot, he first adds points to his magic and wisdom and then add points to body (don't forget he's a wizard). You may find him idiot when he choses to trust the professors and reveal his obscurus BUT he has seen the future and is doing things 2 steps ahead.
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It’s hard to read this when he’s thinking so stupidly and they’re such obvious answers
Good Work.............................................................................................................................................
I like the story very much. Finally a good Dumbledore lol[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I can be bised as I've only read only another harry potter fanfic and that was about an edge lord but I truly beleave that this fic deserves 5 stars
Amazing characters, backstory, good magic understanding and mc is strong but not big headed or try’s and hide that he has power but is stil careful about what he show until he can trust the people around him.
Great Story so far... Update more!....................................................................................................................
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Easy top 10 HP fics. If you are reading the initial chapters and think there is a lot of info, trust me, you will thank those infos later 'coz in later chapters you'll be able to tell what stat will help at what time♥
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Best. Makes the annoying character of Hermione very adorable. [img=update]..............................................................................
Y'know, I went into this expecting nothing. But damn did I get hooked. This story is one of the few that captivates you and pulls you in. It captures the feel of the Harry Potter books perfectly in how magical everything seems. Although this is a translated work, it does not change that it is a work that needs to be appreciated. The Writing quality, or better yet, translation quality is impeccable. you can't even tell its a translated work unless something really particular pops up. The story development is great. although hard to stick to in the first 10 chapters, when it gets rolling, oh it gets rolling. I couldn't even tell how fast I read through this and when I reached the end it left me craving for more. The Characters are very nicely interpreted. all of them capture the Essence of the originals and even the side characters feel like they're alive. although sometimes it may feel like the side characters glaze the Mc too much, that's just part of the fun and is framed as being perfectly logical. The updating stability is good. not much to say about it. There is a chapter every day. As for the World Background, this is literally the only Harry Potter fanfic I've read that takes many elements from the books too. Everyone else just watches the movies and calls it a day in terms of research. this is very well fletched out and the gaps in knowledge are allowed to be filled in by the author. all in all, 5/5. One of the best, if not the best fanfics, I've read on the platform. It simply draws you in and doesn't let go. would recommended.
So i was just minding my own business until i saw Hermione's cover so I thought? How about myself some time to relax instead i only got hooked by an interesting plot😅
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This Harry Potter fic is very well written and has a cool premise. Chapter 66 as I write this and I thought it was very good. Some characters from the canon may have their personalities changed a little, other than that everything is fine. Author, I hope to have sauce in the scenes that should have sauce in the future, for those who don't like it just skip the sauce chapter hehe.
The chapters either consist of info dump, mc showing off, or very dry exploration of magical theory that can sometimes even leave plot holes, mc will most likely be showing off while doing so. Put simply, it's boring.
The writing is suffering in its flow with wierd phrases, maybe because of translation or something but it tends to make the story lifeless. Hopefully it Will improve
bro there's a lot of theory here, it's very tiring to read dozens of chapters just about theory and no action, this book broke the record and made me sleep a lot while reading
I was worried when you suddenly stopped uploading for straight 4 days after uploading everyday and taking down the cover pic. Glad you didn't stop and here is my review so please don't ever stop♥
3.2 1 star on writing: The translator did not even try to edit the chapters well. The words and terminologies are so obviously done in a hurry. 1 star character design: The MC is made by chinese so, he wants more magic power as an 11 yr old obscurus. and he even said allocating stat points is a pressing matter!? Because he could add any more stat points in magic which is already legendary?? hello!??? his physic is 1 (ordinary) why not put it there cuz that will save your freaking life!? stupid MC
Spoiler de révélation currently loving it, the seamless blending of the different sources is very refreshing
Great Fanfic . The story is intriguing and does go to main lead wanting to control everything. The world development is great giving chances for future plots . The plot movement is somewhat slow but understandable to help in background management at the start. Just hope it doesn't get dropped. All in all one of my favorite fanfics till now.
I honestly don't understand why this story is rated so high? I mean, it reads like a bad translation, the characters are reduced to cheerleaders who worship mc, and sometimes the terms used differ from the original and get used inconsistently. But at least i have the feeling the author is a fan of the series and actually read the books. The explanation about the goldfinger (System) and its actual use are also a bit different, while the rewards appear to be random. The power level also randomly spikes, making the progression quite weird. It is a pretty basic story that orients itself close to the books, and the new parts added to the story and world building appear a bit bland, but it seems the story is slowly diverging from the original, so maybe that will change. Overall, I would give this story barely a 3 out of 5 if we don't consider the update stability, which is good.
This is kind of boring in my opinion. The magic part is good, but the main character is just too perfect. There is no suspense, humor, or original characters. If you want to read about a gender-bent Mary Sue, then this is it, but if you want some exciting wizard battles, I can't recommend this.
So gooood!! And did he just creat Ultron? Lookimg forward to see him become a White Lord so don't drop.
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What a great Fanfic. MC isn't an idiot, he first adds points to his magic and wisdom and then add points to body (don't forget he's a wizard). You may find him idiot when he choses to trust the professors and reveal his obscurus BUT he has seen the future and is doing things 2 steps ahead.
Spoiler de révélation It’s hard to read this when he’s thinking so stupidly and they’re such obvious answers
Good Work.............................................................................................................................................
I like the story very much. Finally a good Dumbledore lol[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I can be bised as I've only read only another harry potter fanfic and that was about an edge lord but I truly beleave that this fic deserves 5 stars
Amazing characters, backstory, good magic understanding and mc is strong but not big headed or try’s and hide that he has power but is stil careful about what he show until he can trust the people around him.
Great Story so far... Update more!....................................................................................................................
......................................................................................Great..................................................
Easy top 10 HP fics. If you are reading the initial chapters and think there is a lot of info, trust me, you will thank those infos later 'coz in later chapters you'll be able to tell what stat will help at what time♥
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Spoiler de révélation Best. Makes the annoying character of Hermione very adorable. [img=update]..............................................................................
Y'know, I went into this expecting nothing. But damn did I get hooked. This story is one of the few that captivates you and pulls you in. It captures the feel of the Harry Potter books perfectly in how magical everything seems. Although this is a translated work, it does not change that it is a work that needs to be appreciated. The Writing quality, or better yet, translation quality is impeccable. you can't even tell its a translated work unless something really particular pops up. The story development is great. although hard to stick to in the first 10 chapters, when it gets rolling, oh it gets rolling. I couldn't even tell how fast I read through this and when I reached the end it left me craving for more. The Characters are very nicely interpreted. all of them capture the Essence of the originals and even the side characters feel like they're alive. although sometimes it may feel like the side characters glaze the Mc too much, that's just part of the fun and is framed as being perfectly logical. The updating stability is good. not much to say about it. There is a chapter every day. As for the World Background, this is literally the only Harry Potter fanfic I've read that takes many elements from the books too. Everyone else just watches the movies and calls it a day in terms of research. this is very well fletched out and the gaps in knowledge are allowed to be filled in by the author. all in all, 5/5. One of the best, if not the best fanfics, I've read on the platform. It simply draws you in and doesn't let go. would recommended.
So i was just minding my own business until i saw Hermione's cover so I thought? How about myself some time to relax instead i only got hooked by an interesting plot😅
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This Harry Potter fic is very well written and has a cool premise. Chapter 66 as I write this and I thought it was very good. Some characters from the canon may have their personalities changed a little, other than that everything is fine. Author, I hope to have sauce in the scenes that should have sauce in the future, for those who don't like it just skip the sauce chapter hehe.
The chapters either consist of info dump, mc showing off, or very dry exploration of magical theory that can sometimes even leave plot holes, mc will most likely be showing off while doing so. Put simply, it's boring.
The writing is suffering in its flow with wierd phrases, maybe because of translation or something but it tends to make the story lifeless. Hopefully it Will improve
bro there's a lot of theory here, it's very tiring to read dozens of chapters just about theory and no action, this book broke the record and made me sleep a lot while reading