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Écrire un avisWriting quality is amazing, no serious grammar or word choice issues. The plot is nice and fresh. Starting point isn’t one of the 5 major villages. All in all, pretty good. Where the author loses me is that he states this is a 3rd party in Naruto, using garp’s body. But in practice, it’s literally just after death garp reincarnated. Nothing about his reactions says he’s not just garp. Only proof we have is his knowledge of who the sannin and Hanzo are, as well as root. Somehow he also turns into a hypocrite, stating he hates the child soldier part of the village system and he convinces Hanzo to fight against it (all in 2 paragraphs, might I add). But when Hanzo asks him to help him achieve this, his reply is “wait 5 years while I train my grandkids to fight”. Like what bro? (He adopts Yahiko, Konan and Nagato). Just said that he doesn’t like child soldiers, but not only is he not going to fight for that ideal, he’s also going to train 3 child soldiers. Those kids are 5, and in 5 years they’re going to be 10. Someone else pointed that out and in comment author said he aged them up 5 years. But that is nowhere in the story, and their physical body sizes don’t match either, so I’m saying they’re 5, like in Naruto canon for this time period. Root immediately shows up within less than a day of his arrival, somehow having gotten the info from the sannin and ran all the way back to Ame, and found his house in an abandoned village. They try to take him back to Konoha by force for interrogation. Garp plays around with them, as Garp does. Then his future sight warns him that one of them will blow up his new house with the adopted grandkids inside, he goes “no more playing around”, and uses his NAMED ATTACKS on the root members. Somehow NONE of them die??? These are root ANBU, at the current time, they should at BEST be high chūnin-low jōnin. Even a non-named attack from Garp, as long as he was serious about it, should completely splatter them all over the woods. He used conqueror’s entanglement and only knocked them out. But somehow author is so delusional he says that base level Garp is on part with Hashirama, and this Garp with chakra and de-aged to 40 should best everyone below 6-paths. But Hashirama with any level of serious attack would obliterate all 3 of these ninja at once, even more actually. Garp using conqueror’s and a named attack only knocks them out. F that and F you author.
Эта история невероятно крутая. Один из любимейших персонажей, Гарп, теперь и в Наруто.) У вас получилось очень четко передать характер Монки) Большое вам спасибо, автор)
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I like this story and you can use Wood-wood Davil Fruit for MC because it can give user Eternal Youth and Infinite Lifespan by Absorption anything and Everything and Gain powers also though it like Sage Body by Absorb of Sanju blood or fist cell or Death body
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a lot of these stories change the characters to fit their morals and beliefs but you kept it on point for garp so thanks cant wait for more
simply fantastic Garp being a playful and loving grandfather taking care of and remodeling the most dangerous trio in naruto into good people, just this trait already makes this story perfect now putting the theme of war never changing and trying to solve problems with true justice through peaceful means without killing It's something incredible, this story has great potential to be one of the best, I hope Garp helps change the story to a better example, saving the good-hearted people of the Uchiha clan, preventing Sasuke from losing his family and even saving Minato and Kushina, preventing Naruto from suffering childhood.
First off this is a great idea I like the story and how this is going second my only problem is the plot holes like why does donso already have the bandages even though it’s before the massacre and what is up with power scaling I can tell from a single glance author is a heavy one piece fan with how the power scaling is going I understand that garp is powerful but peak madara ”might cause him some trouble like what. To be short this has potential but author really needs to watch out for plot holes it really ruins the immersion. And I like how the story is going with the rain village.
Spoiler de révélationSo far I love it and I do hope you update more often as your a great writer...................................................................................
This is a wholesome fanfic to read, it does good to the heart and we see Garp with a new personality and a new family, plus the story is incredibly well written and phrased, the one who wrote it is a guy who could very well be a college graduate given how well his mind works being the creator of this great fanfic.
More please, haven't seen a fanfic with garp in naruto world,, moree!!!!!! more!!! more more!!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!!
great story, please don’t quit this job, and this rating is only for chapter 2, I’m looking forward to the continuation💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯
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THE AUTHOR LOVES THIS NOVEL BUT NOT WHY BIG DADDY WHITEBEARD THE NARUTO COULD USE A LOVING FATHER LIKE WHITEBEARD BECAUSE THE ADULTS IN NARUTO ABUSE AND BRAINWASH KIDS IN THE NARUTO WORLD NEED OF A FATHER LIKE WHITEBEARD., AFTER THE WAR WHITEBEARD APPEARED IN NARUTO WORLD.
Writing quality is amazing, no serious grammar or word choice issues. The plot is nice and fresh. Starting point isn’t one of the 5 major villages. All in all, pretty good. Where the author loses me is that he states this is a 3rd party in Naruto, using garp’s body. But in practice, it’s literally just after death garp reincarnated. Nothing about his reactions says he’s not just garp. Only proof we have is his knowledge of who the sannin and Hanzo are, as well as root. Somehow he also turns into a hypocrite, stating he hates the child soldier part of the village system and he convinces Hanzo to fight against it (all in 2 paragraphs, might I add). But when Hanzo asks him to help him achieve this, his reply is “wait 5 years while I train my grandkids to fight”. Like what bro? (He adopts Yahiko, Konan and Nagato). Just said that he doesn’t like child soldiers, but not only is he not going to fight for that ideal, he’s also going to train 3 child soldiers. Those kids are 5, and in 5 years they’re going to be 10. Someone else pointed that out and in comment author said he aged them up 5 years. But that is nowhere in the story, and their physical body sizes don’t match either, so I’m saying they’re 5, like in Naruto canon for this time period. Root immediately shows up within less than a day of his arrival, somehow having gotten the info from the sannin and ran all the way back to Ame, and found his house in an abandoned village. They try to take him back to Konoha by force for interrogation. Garp plays around with them, as Garp does. Then his future sight warns him that one of them will blow up his new house with the adopted grandkids inside, he goes “no more playing around”, and uses his NAMED ATTACKS on the root members. Somehow NONE of them die??? These are root ANBU, at the current time, they should at BEST be high chūnin-low jōnin. Even a non-named attack from Garp, as long as he was serious about it, should completely splatter them all over the woods. He used conqueror’s entanglement and only knocked them out. But somehow author is so delusional he says that base level Garp is on part with Hashirama, and this Garp with chakra and de-aged to 40 should best everyone below 6-paths. But Hashirama with any level of serious attack would obliterate all 3 of these ninja at once, even more actually. Garp using conqueror’s and a named attack only knocks them out. F that and F you author.
Эта история невероятно крутая. Один из любимейших персонажей, Гарп, теперь и в Наруто.) У вас получилось очень четко передать характер Монки) Большое вам спасибо, автор)
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I like this story and you can use Wood-wood Davil Fruit for MC because it can give user Eternal Youth and Infinite Lifespan by Absorption anything and Everything and Gain powers also though it like Sage Body by Absorb of Sanju blood or fist cell or Death body
Hhhhjjjhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjsndnbddjeiejbdhwvvdvsbjsvxvhebf Irene we’ve nekejebsbhsbs djjddjdjdns jdndndnd djdjdjd djsjdjdjdn jdndnd hdjdjd jsjdjd jsjdjd jdjdjd jsjdjdh jsjdjd dhsjdjsjs hdjdjdns jsjdjd hsjsjwb jsjsjsbs jsjsjsjs hahahaha
a lot of these stories change the characters to fit their morals and beliefs but you kept it on point for garp so thanks cant wait for more
simply fantastic Garp being a playful and loving grandfather taking care of and remodeling the most dangerous trio in naruto into good people, just this trait already makes this story perfect now putting the theme of war never changing and trying to solve problems with true justice through peaceful means without killing It's something incredible, this story has great potential to be one of the best, I hope Garp helps change the story to a better example, saving the good-hearted people of the Uchiha clan, preventing Sasuke from losing his family and even saving Minato and Kushina, preventing Naruto from suffering childhood.
First off this is a great idea I like the story and how this is going second my only problem is the plot holes like why does donso already have the bandages even though it’s before the massacre and what is up with power scaling I can tell from a single glance author is a heavy one piece fan with how the power scaling is going I understand that garp is powerful but peak madara ”might cause him some trouble like what. To be short this has potential but author really needs to watch out for plot holes it really ruins the immersion. And I like how the story is going with the rain village.
Spoiler de révélationSo far I love it and I do hope you update more often as your a great writer...................................................................................
This is a wholesome fanfic to read, it does good to the heart and we see Garp with a new personality and a new family, plus the story is incredibly well written and phrased, the one who wrote it is a guy who could very well be a college graduate given how well his mind works being the creator of this great fanfic.
More please, haven't seen a fanfic with garp in naruto world,, moree!!!!!! more!!! more more!!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!! more!!!
great story, please don’t quit this job, and this rating is only for chapter 2, I’m looking forward to the continuation💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯
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THE AUTHOR LOVES THIS NOVEL BUT NOT WHY BIG DADDY WHITEBEARD THE NARUTO COULD USE A LOVING FATHER LIKE WHITEBEARD BECAUSE THE ADULTS IN NARUTO ABUSE AND BRAINWASH KIDS IN THE NARUTO WORLD NEED OF A FATHER LIKE WHITEBEARD., AFTER THE WAR WHITEBEARD APPEARED IN NARUTO WORLD.
dont stop this story man. its great and got huge potential