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A very original setting for a dc story with some awesome dialogue. Don’t be fooled by the number of chapters, these are long ones. 10/10 would read again !
as many stories I've read on wn (and it's been a LOT), this is still my favorite. an excellent, fun, and relaxing piece of entertainment. can't wait for the continuation.
(Shortened, basic review) I really love how this story has gone so far. It's very different from any other DC fic I've read - thus, hard to compare - but I definitely think it to be one of my favourite of all time, and certainly one of, if not, the best written one. *****MINOR / SOME MAJOR SPOILERS AHEAD, YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED***** (The spoilers get increasingly more spoiler-y, so I recommended if you haven't already read the Fanfic, you do so first, or only read a little at the start) (Lengthy, overexplained review) It's the most unique take I've ever seen in DC and blends aspects of other worlds very well in the occasional 'visitors', and the stories told are done in such an intriguing way that even for ones I haven't watched the anime, or played the game for are very entertaining. The relationship between Sean and Didi is one of my favourite parts of the story, and the other relationships are also very well written - with many of Sean's other ones being either more casual in terms of DC girls, or made interesting and like another integral part of the story for Simmy, as opposed to just another girl as many other fanfics would do. There's not an overabundance of love interests, and it's not too focused on that - while still having a little focus here and there which is a nice change that keeps things from getting boring. There's not a lot 'fights' and what fights there are, are done in a very well written way for such an overpowered MC with satisfying conclusions. I believe the story is ' Overpowered done right' in how the MC's great power is not a focal point of the story - it's shown off here and there with people that push their luck a little too far, but that's far and few between - he isn't constantly trying to prove how he's so much stronger and better than others, but rather humble, while also not letting others walk all over him. I like how this is written more as a story of The Dead End bar itself, and not as the main character. What I mean by this is that, while the story does focus on the MC, Sean. a good amount, it also shows a lot about the interactions between the other patrons of the bar, both inside and out - as well as some impacts it has on the major players as a whole. It is done in such a way that it doesn't feel like a separated part of the story or filler, but rather, an important part of it and much more in line with the fanfic's feel as a whole than what others that do similar things can pull off. It keeps things interesting and makes the story seem more real, with actual people - not 2D individuals that focus solely on the Main Character while neglecting everything else. I also like how in character everyone in the story is. It doesn't use cliques in the fanfic community like Batman being an enemy to anyone powerful out of his control, but rather focuses on their actual personality - Batman is more reasonable and easy-going like is portrayed in the official versions, being kind to even his villains when the time calls for it. The heroes and villains have personalities outside of their work - they don't constantly act like they do when working (ordering subordinates, planning, and fighting their moral counterparts), they act like real people and can separate their persona from who they actually are in more relaxed, neutral circumstances (for lack of a better term). There are lemons, and I think they were done well. Very rarely appearing and with people who it'd make sense to happen with. Only appears a few times throughout the story, which I feel is for the best in a story of this type. Overall, a long and very enjoyable read. Would definitely recommend. Ps: I crave more wholesome moments with Didi (and the family).
I started reading this masterpiece on another platform and I liked It so much I downloaded webnobel. I LOVE it
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Gave it a try but this is familiar to me. It's the kind of stuff you expect from wattpad or tumblr when that was still a thing. They used some of the worst stuff from the comics to build this story like basically everyone being gay, but with that even worse writing. Not that it's much better, but you know. They don't have the entire bat family chatting on a forum openly for the world to see and dropping actual personal details or several of them doing things like '*He sharpens his batarang' mid-conversation and worse.
i love this fic, but author, where did u go?? u said only 2 weeks even a month is all god, but please let us know if this is dropped or if u still gonna keep going, anyways 5stars
worth rereading every three months or so i highly recommend reading this for those who just want to giggle or relax, chapters are a decent length some have cliffhangers i hope the author expand the lore of MC and maybe marvel next time?
I love this entire story, I do not have a single complaint only compliments for the structure and proper wording with witty yet comical while also impactful in many ways. Seriously I love what you're doing please don't stop here with this story, I fully support everything in it. Forget about the riff-raff since you're not here to cater to them if they have a problem with your story, they have no right to direct your creative flow. Opinions are suggestive and not crucial to every decision you make, a complaint or "Criticism" isn't something you should take to heart because everyone has a preference. Anywho, I for one hope to see more of this amazing Epic of yours soon I hope. Thanks for laughs
Sometimes u just have to shutoff your brain and enjoy a story. Don’t over think or try to anylize this one just enjoy.
It's an enjoyable read. Sure there are couple parts where i might not like it or something but that's probably just my own likes/dislikes and it all comes down to specific readers. I really enjoyed the work and laughed like hell in some parts. It's not a super serious read as it's mostly comedy but who's to say we don't need a good laugh from time to time. I rate it 5 stars as i don't have any seriuos faults and the ever rare minor one come down to preferences. Also the book is ( at least temporarily) already finished as i write this review.
This is the highest honor I can give Love the story and really live up to expectations can’t wait for the day you come back to this and the future work you decided to do Ps seeing as your coming back to your goth girls story what are the chances you go back to the 40k story
One of the best fan fics you’ll ever read. Definitely will make it into your top 3 at best or top 5 at worst. My only problem was that it was short, only 60+ chapters. Definitely worth the read.
Amazing, top to bottom. An adventurer that has no END, just a lot of twists and turns. Batman may just die from an aneurysm… Jokes that have a proper end. Either the author is mad, (Not sane myself.) Or he’s on a very fun “spiritual” trip! (That I will be following the whole way!
a great read in my personal opinion.the world mashes perfectly with MC and characters interaction flow fantastic.
Thank you, this is just the stuff I need and I am really surprised that some ppl saying NTR? Like seriously, could not find anything like that at all.. Laid-back, comfortably OP like hell MC which I really like and an all-around good atmosphere. Well done
It is a good fanfic. Thats all I will say. But is do have any plans about the The Grind fanfic?
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Excellent work! I kind of understand people screaming like rabid animals about the cuck stuff but... he kind of holds all the cards in the whole polyamory setup. The girls can have fun without him there but if he leaves everything would fall apart. What I really want to see is Sean in Worm. Similar concept but maybe running a shoe store in partnership with Parian, or a coffee shop, etc. The premise of Dead End Bar really lends itself to spinoffs.
A very original setting for a dc story with some awesome dialogue. Don’t be fooled by the number of chapters, these are long ones. 10/10 would read again !
as many stories I've read on wn (and it's been a LOT), this is still my favorite. an excellent, fun, and relaxing piece of entertainment. can't wait for the continuation.
(Shortened, basic review) I really love how this story has gone so far. It's very different from any other DC fic I've read - thus, hard to compare - but I definitely think it to be one of my favourite of all time, and certainly one of, if not, the best written one. *****MINOR / SOME MAJOR SPOILERS AHEAD, YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED***** (The spoilers get increasingly more spoiler-y, so I recommended if you haven't already read the Fanfic, you do so first, or only read a little at the start) (Lengthy, overexplained review) It's the most unique take I've ever seen in DC and blends aspects of other worlds very well in the occasional 'visitors', and the stories told are done in such an intriguing way that even for ones I haven't watched the anime, or played the game for are very entertaining. The relationship between Sean and Didi is one of my favourite parts of the story, and the other relationships are also very well written - with many of Sean's other ones being either more casual in terms of DC girls, or made interesting and like another integral part of the story for Simmy, as opposed to just another girl as many other fanfics would do. There's not an overabundance of love interests, and it's not too focused on that - while still having a little focus here and there which is a nice change that keeps things from getting boring. There's not a lot 'fights' and what fights there are, are done in a very well written way for such an overpowered MC with satisfying conclusions. I believe the story is ' Overpowered done right' in how the MC's great power is not a focal point of the story - it's shown off here and there with people that push their luck a little too far, but that's far and few between - he isn't constantly trying to prove how he's so much stronger and better than others, but rather humble, while also not letting others walk all over him. I like how this is written more as a story of The Dead End bar itself, and not as the main character. What I mean by this is that, while the story does focus on the MC, Sean. a good amount, it also shows a lot about the interactions between the other patrons of the bar, both inside and out - as well as some impacts it has on the major players as a whole. It is done in such a way that it doesn't feel like a separated part of the story or filler, but rather, an important part of it and much more in line with the fanfic's feel as a whole than what others that do similar things can pull off. It keeps things interesting and makes the story seem more real, with actual people - not 2D individuals that focus solely on the Main Character while neglecting everything else. I also like how in character everyone in the story is. It doesn't use cliques in the fanfic community like Batman being an enemy to anyone powerful out of his control, but rather focuses on their actual personality - Batman is more reasonable and easy-going like is portrayed in the official versions, being kind to even his villains when the time calls for it. The heroes and villains have personalities outside of their work - they don't constantly act like they do when working (ordering subordinates, planning, and fighting their moral counterparts), they act like real people and can separate their persona from who they actually are in more relaxed, neutral circumstances (for lack of a better term). There are lemons, and I think they were done well. Very rarely appearing and with people who it'd make sense to happen with. Only appears a few times throughout the story, which I feel is for the best in a story of this type. Overall, a long and very enjoyable read. Would definitely recommend. Ps: I crave more wholesome moments with Didi (and the family).
I started reading this masterpiece on another platform and I liked It so much I downloaded webnobel. I LOVE it
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Gave it a try but this is familiar to me. It's the kind of stuff you expect from wattpad or tumblr when that was still a thing. They used some of the worst stuff from the comics to build this story like basically everyone being gay, but with that even worse writing. Not that it's much better, but you know. They don't have the entire bat family chatting on a forum openly for the world to see and dropping actual personal details or several of them doing things like '*He sharpens his batarang' mid-conversation and worse.
i love this fic, but author, where did u go?? u said only 2 weeks even a month is all god, but please let us know if this is dropped or if u still gonna keep going, anyways 5stars
worth rereading every three months or so i highly recommend reading this for those who just want to giggle or relax, chapters are a decent length some have cliffhangers i hope the author expand the lore of MC and maybe marvel next time?
I love this entire story, I do not have a single complaint only compliments for the structure and proper wording with witty yet comical while also impactful in many ways. Seriously I love what you're doing please don't stop here with this story, I fully support everything in it. Forget about the riff-raff since you're not here to cater to them if they have a problem with your story, they have no right to direct your creative flow. Opinions are suggestive and not crucial to every decision you make, a complaint or "Criticism" isn't something you should take to heart because everyone has a preference. Anywho, I for one hope to see more of this amazing Epic of yours soon I hope. Thanks for laughs
Sometimes u just have to shutoff your brain and enjoy a story. Don’t over think or try to anylize this one just enjoy.
It's an enjoyable read. Sure there are couple parts where i might not like it or something but that's probably just my own likes/dislikes and it all comes down to specific readers. I really enjoyed the work and laughed like hell in some parts. It's not a super serious read as it's mostly comedy but who's to say we don't need a good laugh from time to time. I rate it 5 stars as i don't have any seriuos faults and the ever rare minor one come down to preferences. Also the book is ( at least temporarily) already finished as i write this review.
This is the highest honor I can give Love the story and really live up to expectations can’t wait for the day you come back to this and the future work you decided to do Ps seeing as your coming back to your goth girls story what are the chances you go back to the 40k story
One of the best fan fics you’ll ever read. Definitely will make it into your top 3 at best or top 5 at worst. My only problem was that it was short, only 60+ chapters. Definitely worth the read.
Amazing, top to bottom. An adventurer that has no END, just a lot of twists and turns. Batman may just die from an aneurysm… Jokes that have a proper end. Either the author is mad, (Not sane myself.) Or he’s on a very fun “spiritual” trip! (That I will be following the whole way!
a great read in my personal opinion.the world mashes perfectly with MC and characters interaction flow fantastic.
Thank you, this is just the stuff I need and I am really surprised that some ppl saying NTR? Like seriously, could not find anything like that at all.. Laid-back, comfortably OP like hell MC which I really like and an all-around good atmosphere. Well done
It is a good fanfic. Thats all I will say. But is do have any plans about the The Grind fanfic?
Nice ,.................,.............................. .....god.......,.....................................jdhdjdkshsbdldjxbdkxkufbfbelelwkdjdndnbdbdkwksjsvdldldjfbfbfkdjhddjdkdkdu de mi dnndbfndudhd jdjdudvdk dndbvddk
Excellent work! I kind of understand people screaming like rabid animals about the cuck stuff but... he kind of holds all the cards in the whole polyamory setup. The girls can have fun without him there but if he leaves everything would fall apart. What I really want to see is Sean in Worm. Similar concept but maybe running a shoe store in partnership with Parian, or a coffee shop, etc. The premise of Dead End Bar really lends itself to spinoffs.
come back to this book!!!! we need more of it!!!