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forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot
i wanna ask....and please answer me... who is the romance partner for mc.... please answer me
Beyond OP fruit that the author doesn’t understand and needs him by having him think he would lose to a 6 year old tsunade lol dude is literally the strongest int he World when in his zone lol awful writing don’t waste your time
try again author, when you get some experience or a better thinking device, the head that you used for this novel was not enough. the dates of ninja world and all jonin and teams acting so jolly when a war is ongoing, or tsunade being so young but using her techniques of late self. even that dumb and unrealistic situation of jiraiya pulling mc into trouble with tsunade....i can do it whole day, so many mistakes and dellusional choices, but its not worth our time, gonna blame fake votes for such irritation
It's a decent fic but there is a lot of useless clutter that can be trimmed down. The fight scenes are so boring yet take so many chapters. MC also has a huge family in the ninja world so the author is just waiting to put the tragedy tag on this fic.
The story is normal, but its development is practically not moving. All the decisions that are made by the author are guessed and look unoriginal, they can be seen in almost every fanfiction. The writing style and the size of the chapters gives off notes of Chinese novels, but not much (if you do not consider the volume of the chapters). The design of the characters is lackluster, they don't feel alive, they don't feel personal. The main character is dry / raw, it seems not to have been finalized yet, there is no highlight in him yet except for his strength and then he does not really show up (at this rate it would be possible not to give it at all, it would be more interesting). In this story, you can see all the worn-out / hackneyed solutions that have ever been used in writing fanfiction / short stories, the plot is not yet traceable, at the moment it looks like a collection of different events. There is no sense of originality in the writing at the moment. The update speed is excellent, the quality of the letter (for me) is normal. In general, you can read, but if you find something more interesting, then feel free to scrap it.
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It's a great Naruto fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a good plot/storyline and great english/translation.. The grammar is good too.. I like the idea of Ope-ope fruit in Naruto.. It's a perfect fruit for a doctor/medic, an luckily MC/Naoki want to be a medic nin too.. Can't wait to see ope-ope fruit in action.. Keep up the great job author san 😁👍😍😍
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Enfim, uma fanfic onde o ninja de 6 anos não sai por aí batendo em kages e dominando o mundo! Comecei a ler, aguardando mais capítulos (são um pouco curtos, mas bem feitos), até agora tudo maravilhoso. Reavaliarei de acordo com a leitura futura.
Not immersive enough, continuity errors with characters ages, dates, and just general info being wrong, idk about spelling I don't even pay it any mind anymore. SI which I like. I'd rate it a 3.5 for killing my immersion, still gonna give it 5 tho cause I'd feel bad if I didn't.
Spoiler de révélation
I read a couple of chapters. I like the story so far. I'm glad that the MC background isn't the typical orphan trope. There isn't much to comment on all the characters, but they're likable. The story itself feels more like a slice of life, and I like that. What I don't like is the writing, but it'll improve over time the more you do it. Dialogue is another issue I saw, whether to add quotation marks or italicize. I also saw a bit of filler and redundancy issues in writing. Overall, I would rate this a 3.8/5.
A transmigrated MC with wide knowledge of NarutoVerse (Anime/Manga) with OP OP devil fruit ability.A highly functioning individual as he trained both his physical, mental & chakra since being aware of his new world.Several grammatical errors which can be improved on & it doesn't affect the story or MC progression.Lack of his previous life knowledge &or NarutoVerse utilization and a bit naive for my tastes as he is aware of what dangers lurks in the shadow but still moved with the flow.The exploration of his DF ability isn't being utilize or/isn't being discussed.Word count is too little as well as upload of each chapters which doesn't match the potential of the FF (Above Average), mayhaps, a tactic author-san uses to encourage Patreon (Please be advised that having an established route or known works first is a must before going exclusive which you lack unfortunately).
Buena hitoria[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Only 12 chapters updated though the story till now is quite solid, no cringe point yet, hopeful for this story
Not gonna lie ope ope seems broken when ppl don’t have haki in this world so u can just cut them directly in half but who knows maybe u’re gonna make it so that someone with more chakra than u can’t be cut or some other stuffs
five stars author for the description i do like it and for ff being non-harem thank god😁😁keep working author san💪💪💪💪
forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot forced plot
i wanna ask....and please answer me... who is the romance partner for mc.... please answer me
Beyond OP fruit that the author doesn’t understand and needs him by having him think he would lose to a 6 year old tsunade lol dude is literally the strongest int he World when in his zone lol awful writing don’t waste your time
try again author, when you get some experience or a better thinking device, the head that you used for this novel was not enough. the dates of ninja world and all jonin and teams acting so jolly when a war is ongoing, or tsunade being so young but using her techniques of late self. even that dumb and unrealistic situation of jiraiya pulling mc into trouble with tsunade....i can do it whole day, so many mistakes and dellusional choices, but its not worth our time, gonna blame fake votes for such irritation
It's a decent fic but there is a lot of useless clutter that can be trimmed down. The fight scenes are so boring yet take so many chapters. MC also has a huge family in the ninja world so the author is just waiting to put the tragedy tag on this fic.
The story is normal, but its development is practically not moving. All the decisions that are made by the author are guessed and look unoriginal, they can be seen in almost every fanfiction. The writing style and the size of the chapters gives off notes of Chinese novels, but not much (if you do not consider the volume of the chapters). The design of the characters is lackluster, they don't feel alive, they don't feel personal. The main character is dry / raw, it seems not to have been finalized yet, there is no highlight in him yet except for his strength and then he does not really show up (at this rate it would be possible not to give it at all, it would be more interesting). In this story, you can see all the worn-out / hackneyed solutions that have ever been used in writing fanfiction / short stories, the plot is not yet traceable, at the moment it looks like a collection of different events. There is no sense of originality in the writing at the moment. The update speed is excellent, the quality of the letter (for me) is normal. In general, you can read, but if you find something more interesting, then feel free to scrap it.
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It's a great Naruto fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a good plot/storyline and great english/translation.. The grammar is good too.. I like the idea of Ope-ope fruit in Naruto.. It's a perfect fruit for a doctor/medic, an luckily MC/Naoki want to be a medic nin too.. Can't wait to see ope-ope fruit in action.. Keep up the great job author san 😁👍😍😍
Que genial, me gusto muchísimo 🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩😍🤩🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩🤩😍🤩😍😍🤩🤩😍😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍🤩😍
Enfim, uma fanfic onde o ninja de 6 anos não sai por aí batendo em kages e dominando o mundo! Comecei a ler, aguardando mais capítulos (são um pouco curtos, mas bem feitos), até agora tudo maravilhoso. Reavaliarei de acordo com a leitura futura.
Not immersive enough, continuity errors with characters ages, dates, and just general info being wrong, idk about spelling I don't even pay it any mind anymore. SI which I like. I'd rate it a 3.5 for killing my immersion, still gonna give it 5 tho cause I'd feel bad if I didn't.
Spoiler de révélation I read a couple of chapters. I like the story so far. I'm glad that the MC background isn't the typical orphan trope. There isn't much to comment on all the characters, but they're likable. The story itself feels more like a slice of life, and I like that. What I don't like is the writing, but it'll improve over time the more you do it. Dialogue is another issue I saw, whether to add quotation marks or italicize. I also saw a bit of filler and redundancy issues in writing. Overall, I would rate this a 3.8/5.
A transmigrated MC with wide knowledge of NarutoVerse (Anime/Manga) with OP OP devil fruit ability.A highly functioning individual as he trained both his physical, mental & chakra since being aware of his new world.Several grammatical errors which can be improved on & it doesn't affect the story or MC progression.Lack of his previous life knowledge &or NarutoVerse utilization and a bit naive for my tastes as he is aware of what dangers lurks in the shadow but still moved with the flow.The exploration of his DF ability isn't being utilize or/isn't being discussed.Word count is too little as well as upload of each chapters which doesn't match the potential of the FF (Above Average), mayhaps, a tactic author-san uses to encourage Patreon (Please be advised that having an established route or known works first is a must before going exclusive which you lack unfortunately).
Buena hitoria[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Only 12 chapters updated though the story till now is quite solid, no cringe point yet, hopeful for this story
Not gonna lie ope ope seems broken when ppl don’t have haki in this world so u can just cut them directly in half but who knows maybe u’re gonna make it so that someone with more chakra than u can’t be cut or some other stuffs
five stars author for the description i do like it and for ff being non-harem thank god😁😁keep working author san💪💪💪💪