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hey was checking up on your fanfic today and saw zero chapters along with your other stories. Everything is ok I hope you are and thank you for the fun stories and great ideas
Pros. 1. interesting plot. 2. good character development. 3. gradual development Cons. 1. too much unnecessary information. no one needs to know what clothes are the character wearing in detail. 2. a bit slow in some plot or too drawn out
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I like it. Nicely fleshed out, I can tell you worked hard. (Great job btw) Keep up the great work, and please, stay strong. Hope you like cats, because this is for you! 👇🏻
I read until I dropped it at chapter 10. The author kept making Naruto (or other characters) somehow know things that he shouldn't have known at those points out of no where. It broke immersion for me a lot, so I stopped reading. Otherwise it was an alright read.
pliz continue until the end, this fic is better and the gender bend is more acceptable than your OP fic
Está historia es grande, debo decir que es una de las mejores que he leído, espero con ansias los siguientes capítulos... Los más que me llama la atención son la ideas innovadoras acerca de las habilidades de Naruto y compañía...
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I support some_writer storys for long time now,and if it happens so thare will be no updates for some time he would inform about it from the start,and that's why i find this worring.
its not bad fanfic, but wiki info dump basically every other sentence and author randomly adding his opinion while making it part of info dump makes it kinda boring. And i get its AU world, but there's 0 explanation about changes in characters that are there
I think that all in all, this is a good book, there are occasional misspellings and a few times the sentences didn't flow completely right, but other than those I'm really enjoying this story, I think it's definitely worth reading.
I really enjoy this fanfic I read the whole thing today that’s how good it was I just couldn’t stop reading. The only downsides so far is the very minor spelling errors but they are few and far between so its fine for the most part on that front. I can only hope that you would use the filler arcs and movies at some point but that is just my personal preference.
I like this version of Naruto, and all the development characters are great too. Keep it up Author, don't you dare to drop this amazing fic!!!
Pretty good if I have to say. Only problem for me is the almost always girls falling inlove with him and some other things
i really like the romance part i just wish there was a tiny bit more with satsuki and sakura like the kiss or the butt teasing
For me, this story takes away everything that bothers me about Naruto, I'm loving the development of the characters, the interaction between them, the training of ALL of them to become stronger The plot of some different things makes me want to read more and I'm loving each chapter, I hope it continues for a long time I loved the story
Fam this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
I love Naruto and I love this guy's stories. This will be good. Also Tsunade best girl. .....................................................
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I really wanted to like it after how obvious it was in the first chapter that the author had Naruto's personality down pat, but this story commits the unforgivable sin of being boring, and this aggravation is multiplied by the many 'AU' inclusions that read more like source errors. Finally, the story is padded heavily with lengthy character descriptions that feel like they were yanked out of a wiki. Overall experience: disappointment.
An advice for you would be better if you reduce the description of the characters too much, as it is annoying. Well, this is my opinion, I do not know about others, but for me, this is my problem with your stories and I hope that it will continue, and also please update the story of One Piece.
Obligatory Review. No Toxicity In Your Criticism Please, it'll give Webnovel a bad image.
The whole Naruto lore revolves around Sage of 6 paths' sons, and their reincarnations. Genderbend Sasuke just doesn't make sense. The characters interactions felt forced. We're 1 chapter in and author wrote Guy on a home invasion scene. Why tf would a Jonin break in someone else's home, and why would he volunteer in training Naruto? It's basically like this every time so I can't really immerse myself when everything don't make sense. The updates are good and the writing structures are on point.
Plot hole galore, trauma dumping every 2 seconds, and let's not forget every "good person" knows the difference between a sheathe and a Kunai. This is the most basic OP story. There is nothing different compared to the other 1000 out there.
Well, I have nothing to say. The author writes all of his work in almost similar plots. This one is even worse than the previous ones. There are many plot holes in the story. In short, the author's writing quality had decreased.
great book, but why might guy? should have used gyatso as a spirit stuck with 9tail as a teach.anyway, still a good book
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Author, you know I was with you from your Bleach fanfic. I read every single one of them and they were very good. But recently you have been making us readers very sad. You have stopped writing two fanfic and both of them were making good progress- I know that they were also lacking in some cases and I am not complaining. No one is perfect- but you just have to stop them without any notice. Now I am beginning to think you are doing this just to make us suffer. I just hope that you will not do the same in this one. Because, if you do then I will not only give you bad reviews but also write bad things about your book in every one of your writing. Also, don't take this as a threat this is just the frustration of a fan of your work.
hey was checking up on your fanfic today and saw zero chapters along with your other stories. Everything is ok I hope you are and thank you for the fun stories and great ideas
Pros. 1. interesting plot. 2. good character development. 3. gradual development Cons. 1. too much unnecessary information. no one needs to know what clothes are the character wearing in detail. 2. a bit slow in some plot or too drawn out
Sevmedim.... ................................................. .............. ..... ..... ... ...👎🏻👎🏻👎👎🏼👎 Asdsfssfjrjdjshvdjdiskwhshdhfjsjsjdhfjrjrjdhfhrhdhdhfjfjjdhrhfjfjdhdhhrhrhrhrhrhrhrhr
I like it. Nicely fleshed out, I can tell you worked hard. (Great job btw) Keep up the great work, and please, stay strong. Hope you like cats, because this is for you! 👇🏻
I read until I dropped it at chapter 10. The author kept making Naruto (or other characters) somehow know things that he shouldn't have known at those points out of no where. It broke immersion for me a lot, so I stopped reading. Otherwise it was an alright read.
pliz continue until the end, this fic is better and the gender bend is more acceptable than your OP fic
Está historia es grande, debo decir que es una de las mejores que he leído, espero con ansias los siguientes capítulos... Los más que me llama la atención son la ideas innovadoras acerca de las habilidades de Naruto y compañía...
Spoiler de révélation I support some_writer storys for long time now,and if it happens so thare will be no updates for some time he would inform about it from the start,and that's why i find this worring.
its not bad fanfic, but wiki info dump basically every other sentence and author randomly adding his opinion while making it part of info dump makes it kinda boring. And i get its AU world, but there's 0 explanation about changes in characters that are there
I think that all in all, this is a good book, there are occasional misspellings and a few times the sentences didn't flow completely right, but other than those I'm really enjoying this story, I think it's definitely worth reading.
I really enjoy this fanfic I read the whole thing today that’s how good it was I just couldn’t stop reading. The only downsides so far is the very minor spelling errors but they are few and far between so its fine for the most part on that front. I can only hope that you would use the filler arcs and movies at some point but that is just my personal preference.
I like this version of Naruto, and all the development characters are great too. Keep it up Author, don't you dare to drop this amazing fic!!!
Pretty good if I have to say. Only problem for me is the almost always girls falling inlove with him and some other things
i really like the romance part i just wish there was a tiny bit more with satsuki and sakura like the kiss or the butt teasing
For me, this story takes away everything that bothers me about Naruto, I'm loving the development of the characters, the interaction between them, the training of ALL of them to become stronger The plot of some different things makes me want to read more and I'm loving each chapter, I hope it continues for a long time I loved the story
Fam this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
I love Naruto and I love this guy's stories. This will be good. Also Tsunade best girl. .....................................................
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I really wanted to like it after how obvious it was in the first chapter that the author had Naruto's personality down pat, but this story commits the unforgivable sin of being boring, and this aggravation is multiplied by the many 'AU' inclusions that read more like source errors. Finally, the story is padded heavily with lengthy character descriptions that feel like they were yanked out of a wiki. Overall experience: disappointment.
An advice for you would be better if you reduce the description of the characters too much, as it is annoying. Well, this is my opinion, I do not know about others, but for me, this is my problem with your stories and I hope that it will continue, and also please update the story of One Piece.
Obligatory Review. No Toxicity In Your Criticism Please, it'll give Webnovel a bad image.
The whole Naruto lore revolves around Sage of 6 paths' sons, and their reincarnations. Genderbend Sasuke just doesn't make sense. The characters interactions felt forced. We're 1 chapter in and author wrote Guy on a home invasion scene. Why tf would a Jonin break in someone else's home, and why would he volunteer in training Naruto? It's basically like this every time so I can't really immerse myself when everything don't make sense. The updates are good and the writing structures are on point.
Plot hole galore, trauma dumping every 2 seconds, and let's not forget every "good person" knows the difference between a sheathe and a Kunai. This is the most basic OP story. There is nothing different compared to the other 1000 out there.
Well, I have nothing to say. The author writes all of his work in almost similar plots. This one is even worse than the previous ones. There are many plot holes in the story. In short, the author's writing quality had decreased.
great book, but why might guy? should have used gyatso as a spirit stuck with 9tail as a teach.anyway, still a good book
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Author, you know I was with you from your Bleach fanfic. I read every single one of them and they were very good. But recently you have been making us readers very sad. You have stopped writing two fanfic and both of them were making good progress- I know that they were also lacking in some cases and I am not complaining. No one is perfect- but you just have to stop them without any notice. Now I am beginning to think you are doing this just to make us suffer. I just hope that you will not do the same in this one. Because, if you do then I will not only give you bad reviews but also write bad things about your book in every one of your writing. Also, don't take this as a threat this is just the frustration of a fan of your work.
Man this was so good where all the chapters