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Based on reading 133 chapters, the idea is great, a lot of interesting ideas and possibilities are seen, but: 1. The story lacks a driving force, it doesn't attract me to read the next chapter 2. progression is slow, nothing much happens in most chapters. I dare say a lot of these chapters can be deleted without lowering the quality of writing. 3. The main character, even though been through 2 wars and understand the power of preparation and gathering allies, does not pursue gaining favors and allies at all. He could at least increase his magical knowledge or anything that resembles a war veteran who understands that you don't waste time in anything war related. Generally an OK story, but not my cup of tea. I'll drop at ch133. thank you author
one of the best stories on the web novel but I Want to know is there going to be romance between lyra and harry?
Loved it so far. I binged the last 50 chapters. Love it. Will now wait for 50 more chapters before reading. No. Loved it so far. I binged the last 50 chapters. Love it. Will now wait for 50 more chapters before reading.
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WQ: 4/5 US: 5/5 SD: 4/5 CD: 4/5 WB: 4/5 Overall: 4.2/5 I expected to drop this fic in 5 chapters but was mildly surprised when it turned out to be a banger. Read all 263 chapters in the span of 2 days.
It's a decent enough read. Can't give it more stars because: 1) It nerfs other characters to make MC seem great. 2) Nerfed transfiguration to oblivion. In this fic no one can transfigure something without direct physical contact. 3) Many many illogical points.
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Ignore all the people saying it's bad because he hides all of his abilities. He only does that for a bit. Overall, it was pretty good. The story and plot developments were pretty interesting, although I admit the latest arc hasn't been my absolute favorite. Overall, I would recommend.
its vary good. the characters are well written and the premise is vary unique and interesting. i am not to far in to the book so far but so far so good :)
Good Story if anybody likes OP harry Potter type stuff. Hi personally MC decision to keep his powers. A secret is a good way to drive to plot and is reasonable when licking of that not everybody is as capable as him.
such good writing and updates regularly, I hope this will continue until the ending. thank you for the gift author
Hasta el momento es una buena historia, lo único que podría mejorar el autor sería que dejara que el MC fuera tan cauteloso, ya que él mismo en ese AU no es el niño de la profecía y no le afectaría que destacara tanto, al mismo tiempo siendo tan cauteloso afecte el desarrollo de la historia siendo un poco más lento y con momentos que no son tan redundantes
a good story, few plotholes, passable grammar and spelling, generally a very interesting story.
A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design.
Generally a really good read, but sometimes people seem to act out of character. e.g Why does Harry agree to the duel with Draco when it is said that he doesnt care about hhis reputation ad the only gain is "maybe he will stop bothering me", or why is ron in his circle of friends if mc is mature and the only thing ron does is beeing stupid and annoying everyone, he doesnt even tell ron when he is (W)ron(g).
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Excelent work. Not many authors created REAL alternative timeline. I have Hope that novel don't go to harem. Its be very dissapointed. ,...............,..................
Well written and Intriguing. Felt like too much at times, but those instances are few and ignorable.
Overall it is a very interesting AU HP story with its own twist. The English within is top notch regarding spelling grammer and the research into the fandom is also very consistent. Overall I would recommend it except that it has extremely short chapters and after 145 chapter he is still within his second year.
I have really enjoyed the twists the author has brought without completely altering the story. I look forward to to see what changes ilmm on enjoy and what ones I’ll dislike. As always when I find a good fanfic I want more chapters but quality of quantity.
It awesome for potter head fans give it a try. You won't be disappointed.😌 At first I was very sceptical about reading this fan-fiction but boy was I wrong and I'm glad I was wrong. The plot is unpredictable, the characters are so loveable and the way the author give Harry a new side I wasn't expecting was totally worth reading.
MC é uma beta, não recomendo, pra quem gosta de flores e finais felizes pode até ser bom, achei desagradável, era pra ele ser um soldado depois de uma guerra, não uma criança buscando aceitação
It’s not a bad read honestly, but the Mc annoys the h*ll out of me. Imagine a typical chinese Mc that regresses and wants to hide how skilled/powerful he truly is. Now put said regressor within Harry Potter universe and this is story is what you would get.
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who is the love interest??????? ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Based on reading 133 chapters, the idea is great, a lot of interesting ideas and possibilities are seen, but: 1. The story lacks a driving force, it doesn't attract me to read the next chapter 2. progression is slow, nothing much happens in most chapters. I dare say a lot of these chapters can be deleted without lowering the quality of writing. 3. The main character, even though been through 2 wars and understand the power of preparation and gathering allies, does not pursue gaining favors and allies at all. He could at least increase his magical knowledge or anything that resembles a war veteran who understands that you don't waste time in anything war related. Generally an OK story, but not my cup of tea. I'll drop at ch133. thank you author
one of the best stories on the web novel but I Want to know is there going to be romance between lyra and harry?
Loved it so far. I binged the last 50 chapters. Love it. Will now wait for 50 more chapters before reading. No. Loved it so far. I binged the last 50 chapters. Love it. Will now wait for 50 more chapters before reading.
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WQ: 4/5 US: 5/5 SD: 4/5 CD: 4/5 WB: 4/5 Overall: 4.2/5 I expected to drop this fic in 5 chapters but was mildly surprised when it turned out to be a banger. Read all 263 chapters in the span of 2 days.
It's a decent enough read. Can't give it more stars because: 1) It nerfs other characters to make MC seem great. 2) Nerfed transfiguration to oblivion. In this fic no one can transfigure something without direct physical contact. 3) Many many illogical points.
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Ignore all the people saying it's bad because he hides all of his abilities. He only does that for a bit. Overall, it was pretty good. The story and plot developments were pretty interesting, although I admit the latest arc hasn't been my absolute favorite. Overall, I would recommend.
its vary good. the characters are well written and the premise is vary unique and interesting. i am not to far in to the book so far but so far so good :)
Good Story if anybody likes OP harry Potter type stuff. Hi personally MC decision to keep his powers. A secret is a good way to drive to plot and is reasonable when licking of that not everybody is as capable as him.
such good writing and updates regularly, I hope this will continue until the ending. thank you for the gift author
Hasta el momento es una buena historia, lo único que podría mejorar el autor sería que dejara que el MC fuera tan cauteloso, ya que él mismo en ese AU no es el niño de la profecía y no le afectaría que destacara tanto, al mismo tiempo siendo tan cauteloso afecte el desarrollo de la historia siendo un poco más lento y con momentos que no son tan redundantes
a good story, few plotholes, passable grammar and spelling, generally a very interesting story.
A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design. A unique hp story with a good Background and Character Design.
Generally a really good read, but sometimes people seem to act out of character. e.g Why does Harry agree to the duel with Draco when it is said that he doesnt care about hhis reputation ad the only gain is "maybe he will stop bothering me", or why is ron in his circle of friends if mc is mature and the only thing ron does is beeing stupid and annoying everyone, he doesnt even tell ron when he is (W)ron(g).
Spoiler de révélation CNN coooooo9ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
Excelent work. Not many authors created REAL alternative timeline. I have Hope that novel don't go to harem. Its be very dissapointed. ,...............,..................
Well written and Intriguing. Felt like too much at times, but those instances are few and ignorable.
Overall it is a very interesting AU HP story with its own twist. The English within is top notch regarding spelling grammer and the research into the fandom is also very consistent. Overall I would recommend it except that it has extremely short chapters and after 145 chapter he is still within his second year.
I have really enjoyed the twists the author has brought without completely altering the story. I look forward to to see what changes ilmm on enjoy and what ones I’ll dislike. As always when I find a good fanfic I want more chapters but quality of quantity.
It awesome for potter head fans give it a try. You won't be disappointed.😌 At first I was very sceptical about reading this fan-fiction but boy was I wrong and I'm glad I was wrong. The plot is unpredictable, the characters are so loveable and the way the author give Harry a new side I wasn't expecting was totally worth reading.
MC é uma beta, não recomendo, pra quem gosta de flores e finais felizes pode até ser bom, achei desagradável, era pra ele ser um soldado depois de uma guerra, não uma criança buscando aceitação
It’s not a bad read honestly, but the Mc annoys the h*ll out of me. Imagine a typical chinese Mc that regresses and wants to hide how skilled/powerful he truly is. Now put said regressor within Harry Potter universe and this is story is what you would get.
shhsbsbsbsbsbbsbsbs hahaha Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips. Use the edit icon to pin, add or delete clips.
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who is the love interest??????? ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------