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Bad. Don't even waste your time. Rather read one of the author's newer fics... Gacha is bad Civilization is good, just needs more chapters. But honestly, skip this, it is very very bad.
I honestly f****** wonder whether you ever read Worm or not. And 'just' Worm as I couldn't even finish that part of the story and honestly don't know if I want to check the rest of it.This story seems rushed and not thought through properly. You seem to take 'stupid route' for everything that happens to your MC, like you think of the scene and write it not caring about whether it makes sense for the plot or not. Characters are very OOC and don't feel like themselves, but that may be just your interpretation of them instead of bad writing by taking shortcuts and fitting characters to whatever situations you imagined instead of weaving situations based on characters themselves and how would they behave.Overall? Wouldn't recommend.
Not my cup of tea haha.for some reason I don't like monologe/pov style writing................................................... ....................................
Well let's be honest, the fact that the story begins in an anime world that no one knows like Worm takes away quite a few points since the beginning of the story is the most important thing for readers to stay, in addition to being a generic Japanese protagonist makes it even more boring, the story has the premise of finding its "Purpose" but for someone without purpose who is very clear about being a hero is a contradiction, Read it and draw your own conclusions, for me it's very boring.
So i wanted to ask about Harem. How many are there and how many will join. Btw i saw that its going to have fate arc i wanted to ask is artoria gonna join his harem(i hope not :) )
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honestly this fanfic is pretty good author is doing all research required to make good job author (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*.✧
How's the eye surgery dude? You doing okay? Also, any update to the Essenced of Unwanted Adventure?
Author I have to ask, this story wouldn't have any NTR right?. I have readed 2 fics that had good romance but ended up with NTR so please answer me because I want a good fic with good romance.. Yours seems like it
The beginning, in this case, the volume (worm) was a bit overwhelming, because not only is I a fan or I know the worm line, but after it goes to the other world it becomes much more interesting and I say that the fanfic so far is very good. I hope you continue until the end, your fanfic is really good, I'll definitely be following the development of this story!
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good story, the mc is not stupid, even if we don't yet know all his powers the first ones are already incredible, the story is interesting, no nerves for the mc go read [img=update]
The story to me seems to be pretty fleshed out, you used essences in the story which Is beautiful to me, and the pacing isn’t to fast or too slow which is perfect as you can bring out a characters development. I love the novel
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The MC is smart. I like his powers very much, they are very interesting. Definitely recommend reading this story.
Hey everyone, I'm excited to share my second fan fiction with you all. In this one, the main character's power is based on technology and creation magic, so it'll take a bit more time for them to become overpowered. I'm looking forward to hearing your constructive feedback and support!
yo i been seeing if someone can right a story about air gear and add heram its a good show and the mc is serion white photo down below or vland saga
I read chapter 27 and wanted to puke. I'm not against villains, but what's depicted there is just "ugh". Cauldron, Alexandria and Contessa acted within the framework of the information, resources and forces given to them, in order to save the world, and then Marty Sue comes with powers and capabilities superior to the cauldron, and begins to judge them with arrogance as if he were an infallible saint. Ridiculous. Let him put himself in their place. Yes, children's morality, to see the world in black and white. Committing crimes is bad - these primitive messages are given to us by the author; apparently, the pinnacle of his intellectual abilities is to read morals about how bad is bad and good is good. But he ignores complex questions, because he is no longer smart enough to answer them. Again, if he were in the place of the Cauldron, if he had their strength, knowledge and resources, then what actions would he take? It is the end of the world that forces them to take cruel measures. And the Protagonist himself is not better than them, he simply has more power, which allows him to play cleanly. If you judge, then suggest what actions should have been taken in their place? What would be more effective? It is easy to judge, but difficult to think, but the author is not capable of this. He still had to come to the PRT and tell them about the danger the police are in, like, why don’t you use androids? Here I have Connor, why don’t you use androids, because in this case you wouldn’t risk human lives, are you idiots? Why are you fighting the Endbringers and not strengthening your capes with platinum kryptonite? In my opinion, they should be condemned (sarcasm) This is if an ordinary person shot five thugs who wanted to rob him, and then a two-meter, bulletproof martial artist weighing 150 kg comes up to him and begins to judge him: You have exceeded the limits of self-defense! You should have disarmed them without lethal measures! Because he is too stupid (like the protagonist of this story) to understand that he is an ordinary person and does not have such opportunities.
Bad. Don't even waste your time. Rather read one of the author's newer fics... Gacha is bad Civilization is good, just needs more chapters. But honestly, skip this, it is very very bad.
I honestly f****** wonder whether you ever read Worm or not. And 'just' Worm as I couldn't even finish that part of the story and honestly don't know if I want to check the rest of it.This story seems rushed and not thought through properly. You seem to take 'stupid route' for everything that happens to your MC, like you think of the scene and write it not caring about whether it makes sense for the plot or not. Characters are very OOC and don't feel like themselves, but that may be just your interpretation of them instead of bad writing by taking shortcuts and fitting characters to whatever situations you imagined instead of weaving situations based on characters themselves and how would they behave.Overall? Wouldn't recommend.
Not my cup of tea haha.for some reason I don't like monologe/pov style writing................................................... ....................................
Well let's be honest, the fact that the story begins in an anime world that no one knows like Worm takes away quite a few points since the beginning of the story is the most important thing for readers to stay, in addition to being a generic Japanese protagonist makes it even more boring, the story has the premise of finding its "Purpose" but for someone without purpose who is very clear about being a hero is a contradiction, Read it and draw your own conclusions, for me it's very boring.
So i wanted to ask about Harem. How many are there and how many will join. Btw i saw that its going to have fate arc i wanted to ask is artoria gonna join his harem(i hope not :) )
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honestly this fanfic is pretty good author is doing all research required to make good job author (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*.✧
How's the eye surgery dude? You doing okay? Also, any update to the Essenced of Unwanted Adventure?
Author I have to ask, this story wouldn't have any NTR right?. I have readed 2 fics that had good romance but ended up with NTR so please answer me because I want a good fic with good romance.. Yours seems like it
The beginning, in this case, the volume (worm) was a bit overwhelming, because not only is I a fan or I know the worm line, but after it goes to the other world it becomes much more interesting and I say that the fanfic so far is very good. I hope you continue until the end, your fanfic is really good, I'll definitely be following the development of this story!
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Lol loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo0oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooL.
Spoiler de révélation good story, the mc is not stupid, even if we don't yet know all his powers the first ones are already incredible, the story is interesting, no nerves for the mc go read [img=update]
The story to me seems to be pretty fleshed out, you used essences in the story which Is beautiful to me, and the pacing isn’t to fast or too slow which is perfect as you can bring out a characters development. I love the novel
Spoiler de révélation The MC is smart. I like his powers very much, they are very interesting. Definitely recommend reading this story.
Hey everyone, I'm excited to share my second fan fiction with you all. In this one, the main character's power is based on technology and creation magic, so it'll take a bit more time for them to become overpowered. I'm looking forward to hearing your constructive feedback and support!
yo i been seeing if someone can right a story about air gear and add heram its a good show and the mc is serion white photo down below or vland saga
I read chapter 27 and wanted to puke. I'm not against villains, but what's depicted there is just "ugh". Cauldron, Alexandria and Contessa acted within the framework of the information, resources and forces given to them, in order to save the world, and then Marty Sue comes with powers and capabilities superior to the cauldron, and begins to judge them with arrogance as if he were an infallible saint. Ridiculous. Let him put himself in their place. Yes, children's morality, to see the world in black and white. Committing crimes is bad - these primitive messages are given to us by the author; apparently, the pinnacle of his intellectual abilities is to read morals about how bad is bad and good is good. But he ignores complex questions, because he is no longer smart enough to answer them. Again, if he were in the place of the Cauldron, if he had their strength, knowledge and resources, then what actions would he take? It is the end of the world that forces them to take cruel measures. And the Protagonist himself is not better than them, he simply has more power, which allows him to play cleanly. If you judge, then suggest what actions should have been taken in their place? What would be more effective? It is easy to judge, but difficult to think, but the author is not capable of this. He still had to come to the PRT and tell them about the danger the police are in, like, why don’t you use androids? Here I have Connor, why don’t you use androids, because in this case you wouldn’t risk human lives, are you idiots? Why are you fighting the Endbringers and not strengthening your capes with platinum kryptonite? In my opinion, they should be condemned (sarcasm) This is if an ordinary person shot five thugs who wanted to rob him, and then a two-meter, bulletproof martial artist weighing 150 kg comes up to him and begins to judge him: You have exceeded the limits of self-defense! You should have disarmed them without lethal measures! Because he is too stupid (like the protagonist of this story) to understand that he is an ordinary person and does not have such opportunities.