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The story is very good, there were some errors, but nothing that hinders the understanding of the story, I think it would be interesting if he gave some gifts from the frog to improve Hermione's strength, I hope she doesn't get left out of the story after they stay together, it would also be interesting to put some of her points of view
Alright, here's my review after reading the first 26 chapters. Writing quality is okay. There are some weird spelling mistakes at first, but it gets better a few chapters in. Those fanfic's gimmick is that the MC has a golden finger which brings him OP power ups from other literary worlds. There are a few plotholes, but the author usually ends up justifying them a few chapters later, so it's not that bad in retrospect. Now, the only real problem with this story are the characters. They have little to no personality. Hermione, for instance, is the worst offender. She's reduced from a brilliant witch with her own personality and ideals to literal arm candy for the MC. All she does is react to what he does. As for the MC, all he does is act cool with the powers he got for free and flirt with Hermione. He's also instantly good at whatever he tries to do. All in all, your classic wish fulfillment fanfic. I'd give it a 4 if the characters actually had some personality.
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great for a start. I hope you won't get hung up on Hermione. a little more description of magic and its interaction with the outside world (well, my quibbles). waiting for an update
I want to ask about a novel for those who know it? It's about someone reincarnated as a brother to Harry Potter. And he must not change canon.
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The story is very good, there were some errors, but nothing that hinders the understanding of the story, I think it would be interesting if he gave some gifts from the frog to improve Hermione's strength, I hope she doesn't get left out of the story after they stay together, it would also be interesting to put some of her points of view
Alright, here's my review after reading the first 26 chapters. Writing quality is okay. There are some weird spelling mistakes at first, but it gets better a few chapters in. Those fanfic's gimmick is that the MC has a golden finger which brings him OP power ups from other literary worlds. There are a few plotholes, but the author usually ends up justifying them a few chapters later, so it's not that bad in retrospect. Now, the only real problem with this story are the characters. They have little to no personality. Hermione, for instance, is the worst offender. She's reduced from a brilliant witch with her own personality and ideals to literal arm candy for the MC. All she does is react to what he does. As for the MC, all he does is act cool with the powers he got for free and flirt with Hermione. He's also instantly good at whatever he tries to do. All in all, your classic wish fulfillment fanfic. I'd give it a 4 if the characters actually had some personality.
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great for a start. I hope you won't get hung up on Hermione. a little more description of magic and its interaction with the outside world (well, my quibbles). waiting for an update
I want to ask about a novel for those who know it? It's about someone reincarnated as a brother to Harry Potter. And he must not change canon.
Please 🙏🏻 update 🩷💙🖤🧡🧡🩶💜💛💚🩵🤍❤️🤎 Please 🙏🏻 update 🩷💙🖤🧡🧡🩶💜💛💚🩵🤍❤️🤎 Please 🙏🏻 update 🩷💙🖤🧡🧡🩶💜💛💚🩵🤍❤️🤎 Please 🙏🏻 update 🩷💙🖤🧡🧡🩶💜💛💚🩵🤍❤️🤎 Please 🙏🏻 update 🩷💙🖤🧡🧡🩶💜💛💚🩵🤍❤️🤎 Please 🙏🏻 update 🩷💙🖤🧡🧡🩶💜💛💚🩵🤍❤️🤎 Please 🙏🏻 update 🩷💙🖤🧡🧡🩶💜💛💚🩵🤍❤️🤎