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So I will use this to answer any questions people ask me about, like "Y NO HAREM?" Sorry, but I did state I was writing a story I would want to read. Most harem stories just don't make any sense and would never actually work if you think about it for more then a few minutes. I think I have only read one story out of 100+ that had a small harem that actually made sense and worked well for the story. I didn't think I could pull that off as a writer, so if I decide to make one, it won't be for the MC because I would have to actually make it believable for myself and I don't think my writing chops are that great. I will write reply's to this when I get other questions I feel need to be answered. Or you could even ask here and I might reply if it is something I feel people should know about.
*Sigh* My first review in Webnovel and it's for a story that eventually disappointed me. And very terribly at that. Shame, I was really hoping my first review would be a perfect 5 star. I guess we don't get what we always want. Anyways, on to the review. First of all, Great story. The grammars great, plot very slow (According to some readers) but not slow enough to bore me. Comedy is really great in this story and it doesn't take away the serious factor away from it so I guess that's good. (Trust me, it's really funny sometimes. Made me even laugh sometimes.) We also see small, yet noticeable progress in the MC's powers and even though they're quite weak compared to some people out there and the gods (Eternity, Death, Living Tribunal etc), they're still powerful. I guess it's my fault for still pushing myself to read the story despite seeing this red flag. I tend to dislike it when the MC doesnt have power that could possibly make him the strongest person in the world or universe but i somehow went past that and kept reading the story. The well-written part of the story must have been the cause but I suppose it doesn't really matter. What really ruined the story for me and the main cause for my low review is simply because, like many readers out there, I ABSOLUTELY h*te it when the MC reveals his reincarnated status to others. I don't care if it's to family, love interest that he's eventually gonna marry or enemies but if the MC reveals his Past Life to others and tells them about how they lived their life or whatnot, i instantly drop. I'm sorry but I can't stand that. It rubs me the wrong way. (There really should be a tag or warning for this to save readers like me the trouble.) It's a mystery how I was able to continue reading this story and still enjoy it despite seeing the clues the author was leaving that all pointed out to the fact that the author was eventually gonna do something that would irritate me to no end. For one, the possibility of other reincarnators joining him in his world (It's not confirmed but the author certainly doesn't seem to be against it. If I'm wrong, so be it.) That should have automatically stopped me right there and then and made me just throw the book away from my library but I still kept on reading, enjoying the story despite that shortcoming. The weak power of Naruto in the world was the second flag but I somehow still read past that. And the final flag was when the MC admitted that he might just tell someone that he's reincarnated. Again, like before, I still read. (Some magic was definitely going on here.) But I think what finally snapped me out of my trance was revealing to others that he was reincarnated and giving a thorough yet sad explanation of his past life to the Ancient One. (This meeting with the Ancient One so early in the story was actually pretty cliche now that I think about it.) I'm sorry but that ends things for me there. So if you're someone who can't stand authors that break one of the sacred rules of reincarnation, then don't read this. You'll only end up p*ssed like I was. Anyways, it's still an amazing story despite these frustrations. As long as you can move past them, I'm sure you will enjoy the story. Great story author, I expected more since I thought we had the same thought process when you said you had a list of things you don't like to see in fanfics but it seems I was wrong. I would love to give this story a higher review considering the quality of writing and grammar but unfortunately, that telling everyone about his reincarnation just ruined it for me. Wish you luck author.
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Its a Good story ngl, but the story is to slow, i am already in chapter 94 and the mc i like what still at 5 or 6 years old. The only reason I'm still reading is because it is still a good story you just need a whole lot of patience to read it.
I really liked that this is going so slow, since most fanfics starts with iron man and goes haywire and overused since most of their plot usually just has something to do with the og timeline and get worse, but this one took it slow and build it one by one, keep it up author!!
Este fic logro hacer algo que ninguna novela china de 3000 capitulo logro, hacer que me quedara dormido con los primeros 2 capítulos, no se si sea bueno o malo (pero por las reseñas parece ser lo segundo) pero no lo voy a leer nose que tiene pero solo con leer las primeras líneas hace que mede sueño, si hay algien que mede su sincera opinión y/o un pequeño resumen de él fanfic se lo agradecería
very creative and enjoyable to read, this is a work of art Congratulations on the writing
this fanfic is one of the good marvel fanfiction on my list, hope it will continue until the end.
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it’s just not for me, there’s not much power building more plot building, the mc being a kid lasts practically the whole story .
I really like the slow story progression and also have little problem with the Mc being a toddler for a long part of the story. It’s a nice split between him leading the organization and him beefing a child although a bit more slice of life could be added.
Thank you for your work. I was pleased to meet this work of art and thank you for your work. This is a rather extensive story of the main character of the work, including a description of the characters from an outsider's point of view. The story of what is happening in this world is very captivating.
I personally like the fact that the story does not give mc a harem and the author was willing to consider a different type harem idea instead. Readers on this app review bomb works by authors that don’t conform to the same stupid mold of op main characters with harems. I am writing this review in the hopes the author sees this and it helps him to keep trying new ideas even if they aren’t what the mainstream Webnovel readers want.
Tu escritura es buena las actualizaciones son un poco lentas pero no me gustó el desarrollo de la historia el diseño de personaje en si es bueno pero tener varias personalidades que está ligadas a su mente y que puedan tener relaciones emocionales o físicas con otros personajes me parece demasiado raro estrellas 4/3/1/1/5
The worldbuilding part takes time i get that but we need more chapters if its going to take long other than that its been magnificent a good marvel fanfic without a harem meens two things either its going to have a really good romance or this fanfic going to skip the romance part both of which i am okay with and from the writing style it shows this is going to be one of the best marvel novels out there. I suggest the writer shouldnt mind bad comments (if theres any) in the future and continue to write. Best of luck !!!!
dont worry author there are alot of people including me who appreciate those who bother making a strong foundation, even if it is abit to slow thats just part of the story and without those parts the future chapters wouldnt be as good as they are now, i really like your work and dedication to make that many chapters just for the MC's beginning, anyways although i would have prefered it to be only about 20 chapters long atmost but since this fanfic is really good i really have nothing to complain about here oh and uhh keep up the good work. over-all the fanfic is great and i really appreciate the foundational work for his beginning
La novela me fascina. La única queja que tengo, que es más un capricho mío. Es que son pocos capítulos semanales. Pero para la calidad de los capítulos, me parece bien. Realmente todo está muy bien. Aunque todavía estoy confundido hacerca del interés amoroso, y el harem, si es que el autor se siente cómodo escribiendo harem. El que veo más probable que pase sería con Tao. Ellos ya parecen una pareja. Aunque hay que resolver el problema de su cuerpo con la dimensión oscura. Pero bueno... Realmente es de mis fanfiction favoritos de Marvel. Por no decir mi favorito.
I really wanted to enjoy this story but it's not for me. First and foremost, let's cut to the chase: the writing quality is excellent. The comedy is spot-on, with jokes that hit their mark most of the time. What's impressive is that the humor doesn't take away from the seriousness of the story, and vice versa. The main character is intriguing and boasts a well-developed personality, adding depth to the narrative. Now comes the issues with the story 1) "The story's pace leans towards the slower side. (personally, it didn't bother me too much.) Nevertheless the first 30 chapters, the narrative is told from a baby's or child's perspective. To the extent that you could almost label the first half of the story as a slice-of-life tale. While this deliberate focus on early life experiences might appeal to some readers, it did contribute to a slower progression in the overall plot, which, for me, was acceptable but may be a point of consideration for others. 2) The portrayal of other characters' personalities is a notable issue. The author seems to have difficulty maintaining consistency in how characters behave. This inconsistency is especially noticeable with characters like Hank Pym, The Ancient One, and Nick Fury, although it's a recurring problem throughout the narrative. Some character interactions defy logic, while others seem to undergo drastic shifts in their traits simply to fit the storyline. This inconsistency in character portrayal made it challenging for me to fully connect with the story, as it often felt like the characters were not staying true to themselves. 3) Logistical errors (This is the one that really bothered me). The story is riddled with unrealistic and absurd logic. Most of the time, the characters' plans, theories, and actions are poorly explained and clearly not well thought out, which made it hard for me to fully immerse myself in the story. It felt like there were gaps in the storytelling that left me questioning the characters' decisions and the overall plot.
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Its verrrrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyy slllllooooooooow pace, It took 20 chapters for prologue and its been 30 chapters and the mc is still in baby phase. Wow. Even if the story is like diamond readers like me loose interest in it if it drags on way to much. At first there was anticipation then slowly i started loosing interest in what will happen next then i had to drop it completely. I guess it might interest few people but this fanfic is not for me.
I absolutely love it, even though most people don't like the start i think it was needed and frankly well thought and it shows the characters without rushing them like most fanfics do. The only thing that scares me is the tragedy tag, if any family member dies i might lose it
everything was going well till chapter 36 when he said about making clones of himself even when he has multi shadow clone jutsu and those clone already have different personality from mc coz they are characters from naruto but no author still wants mc to have more clones of mc . I think that would mess up the story more and frankly I'm not a fan of the idea. so I'll drop it here. anyway the writing quality is good and story development is good as well, so you can give it a go.( if you are OK with the clone idea.)
It's a great Marvel fanfiction!! I like it!! 😁👍👍 It have a good plot and translate.. I know that a few first chapter is his pov when he's a baby and toddler, but that important to show reader his interaction with his family, and how he train his power (I especially like his interaction with his family).. I like that you don't make MC/Theo strong from start, but he must train to use his powers.. I also like how his clone work (they him, but they have another personality too, so they more like a real person) Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good job author sama 😁😁👍👍😍😍
The story, writing, and plot is great. The prologue is the issue, it’s too long. 20ish chapters of a baby and he tells people he’s reincarnated. Is too much for me to keep my interest for a story where everyone knows he’s reincarnated. Thats like one of the rules of isekai, not to tell people you reincarnated
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man, darn... I love this plot of your story.. I don't care if some people said otherwise but I found this more unique . With that world and character building style you have makes me more exited about the plot.. keep it and more chapters dude
I am truly loving this story! It keeps me interested and entertained. It even made me emotional quite a few times. I highly recommend reading this Fanfic. The only thing I could wish for is daily updates, but I understand not all Authors are capable of updating daily. Please keep working hard on your story and I’ll keep supporting you! Thank you!
first 30 some chapters and mc is ligit still a baby so freaking boring. love the idea and the premise but wayyyyy to much baby arc just makes me wana drop the book as I can't get into the story.
Ignore the cool cover, the first 17 chapters are largely babyfic, then toddler fic once the exceedingly long prologue is over. Its well enough written, the paragraphs could be smaller to be more phone friendly, but it's honestly the long childhood that doesn't work for me. It feels like the story is stuck in mud with how slowly it progresses.
So I will use this to answer any questions people ask me about, like "Y NO HAREM?" Sorry, but I did state I was writing a story I would want to read. Most harem stories just don't make any sense and would never actually work if you think about it for more then a few minutes. I think I have only read one story out of 100+ that had a small harem that actually made sense and worked well for the story. I didn't think I could pull that off as a writer, so if I decide to make one, it won't be for the MC because I would have to actually make it believable for myself and I don't think my writing chops are that great. I will write reply's to this when I get other questions I feel need to be answered. Or you could even ask here and I might reply if it is something I feel people should know about.
*Sigh* My first review in Webnovel and it's for a story that eventually disappointed me. And very terribly at that. Shame, I was really hoping my first review would be a perfect 5 star. I guess we don't get what we always want. Anyways, on to the review. First of all, Great story. The grammars great, plot very slow (According to some readers) but not slow enough to bore me. Comedy is really great in this story and it doesn't take away the serious factor away from it so I guess that's good. (Trust me, it's really funny sometimes. Made me even laugh sometimes.) We also see small, yet noticeable progress in the MC's powers and even though they're quite weak compared to some people out there and the gods (Eternity, Death, Living Tribunal etc), they're still powerful. I guess it's my fault for still pushing myself to read the story despite seeing this red flag. I tend to dislike it when the MC doesnt have power that could possibly make him the strongest person in the world or universe but i somehow went past that and kept reading the story. The well-written part of the story must have been the cause but I suppose it doesn't really matter. What really ruined the story for me and the main cause for my low review is simply because, like many readers out there, I ABSOLUTELY h*te it when the MC reveals his reincarnated status to others. I don't care if it's to family, love interest that he's eventually gonna marry or enemies but if the MC reveals his Past Life to others and tells them about how they lived their life or whatnot, i instantly drop. I'm sorry but I can't stand that. It rubs me the wrong way. (There really should be a tag or warning for this to save readers like me the trouble.) It's a mystery how I was able to continue reading this story and still enjoy it despite seeing the clues the author was leaving that all pointed out to the fact that the author was eventually gonna do something that would irritate me to no end. For one, the possibility of other reincarnators joining him in his world (It's not confirmed but the author certainly doesn't seem to be against it. If I'm wrong, so be it.) That should have automatically stopped me right there and then and made me just throw the book away from my library but I still kept on reading, enjoying the story despite that shortcoming. The weak power of Naruto in the world was the second flag but I somehow still read past that. And the final flag was when the MC admitted that he might just tell someone that he's reincarnated. Again, like before, I still read. (Some magic was definitely going on here.) But I think what finally snapped me out of my trance was revealing to others that he was reincarnated and giving a thorough yet sad explanation of his past life to the Ancient One. (This meeting with the Ancient One so early in the story was actually pretty cliche now that I think about it.) I'm sorry but that ends things for me there. So if you're someone who can't stand authors that break one of the sacred rules of reincarnation, then don't read this. You'll only end up p*ssed like I was. Anyways, it's still an amazing story despite these frustrations. As long as you can move past them, I'm sure you will enjoy the story. Great story author, I expected more since I thought we had the same thought process when you said you had a list of things you don't like to see in fanfics but it seems I was wrong. I would love to give this story a higher review considering the quality of writing and grammar but unfortunately, that telling everyone about his reincarnation just ruined it for me. Wish you luck author.
Spoiler de révélation Its a Good story ngl, but the story is to slow, i am already in chapter 94 and the mc i like what still at 5 or 6 years old. The only reason I'm still reading is because it is still a good story you just need a whole lot of patience to read it.
I really liked that this is going so slow, since most fanfics starts with iron man and goes haywire and overused since most of their plot usually just has something to do with the og timeline and get worse, but this one took it slow and build it one by one, keep it up author!!
Este fic logro hacer algo que ninguna novela china de 3000 capitulo logro, hacer que me quedara dormido con los primeros 2 capítulos, no se si sea bueno o malo (pero por las reseñas parece ser lo segundo) pero no lo voy a leer nose que tiene pero solo con leer las primeras líneas hace que mede sueño, si hay algien que mede su sincera opinión y/o un pequeño resumen de él fanfic se lo agradecería
very creative and enjoyable to read, this is a work of art Congratulations on the writing
this fanfic is one of the good marvel fanfiction on my list, hope it will continue until the end.
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it’s just not for me, there’s not much power building more plot building, the mc being a kid lasts practically the whole story .
I really like the slow story progression and also have little problem with the Mc being a toddler for a long part of the story. It’s a nice split between him leading the organization and him beefing a child although a bit more slice of life could be added.
Thank you for your work. I was pleased to meet this work of art and thank you for your work. This is a rather extensive story of the main character of the work, including a description of the characters from an outsider's point of view. The story of what is happening in this world is very captivating.
I personally like the fact that the story does not give mc a harem and the author was willing to consider a different type harem idea instead. Readers on this app review bomb works by authors that don’t conform to the same stupid mold of op main characters with harems. I am writing this review in the hopes the author sees this and it helps him to keep trying new ideas even if they aren’t what the mainstream Webnovel readers want.
Tu escritura es buena las actualizaciones son un poco lentas pero no me gustó el desarrollo de la historia el diseño de personaje en si es bueno pero tener varias personalidades que está ligadas a su mente y que puedan tener relaciones emocionales o físicas con otros personajes me parece demasiado raro estrellas 4/3/1/1/5
The worldbuilding part takes time i get that but we need more chapters if its going to take long other than that its been magnificent a good marvel fanfic without a harem meens two things either its going to have a really good romance or this fanfic going to skip the romance part both of which i am okay with and from the writing style it shows this is going to be one of the best marvel novels out there. I suggest the writer shouldnt mind bad comments (if theres any) in the future and continue to write. Best of luck !!!!
dont worry author there are alot of people including me who appreciate those who bother making a strong foundation, even if it is abit to slow thats just part of the story and without those parts the future chapters wouldnt be as good as they are now, i really like your work and dedication to make that many chapters just for the MC's beginning, anyways although i would have prefered it to be only about 20 chapters long atmost but since this fanfic is really good i really have nothing to complain about here oh and uhh keep up the good work. over-all the fanfic is great and i really appreciate the foundational work for his beginning
La novela me fascina. La única queja que tengo, que es más un capricho mío. Es que son pocos capítulos semanales. Pero para la calidad de los capítulos, me parece bien. Realmente todo está muy bien. Aunque todavía estoy confundido hacerca del interés amoroso, y el harem, si es que el autor se siente cómodo escribiendo harem. El que veo más probable que pase sería con Tao. Ellos ya parecen una pareja. Aunque hay que resolver el problema de su cuerpo con la dimensión oscura. Pero bueno... Realmente es de mis fanfiction favoritos de Marvel. Por no decir mi favorito.
I really wanted to enjoy this story but it's not for me. First and foremost, let's cut to the chase: the writing quality is excellent. The comedy is spot-on, with jokes that hit their mark most of the time. What's impressive is that the humor doesn't take away from the seriousness of the story, and vice versa. The main character is intriguing and boasts a well-developed personality, adding depth to the narrative. Now comes the issues with the story 1) "The story's pace leans towards the slower side. (personally, it didn't bother me too much.) Nevertheless the first 30 chapters, the narrative is told from a baby's or child's perspective. To the extent that you could almost label the first half of the story as a slice-of-life tale. While this deliberate focus on early life experiences might appeal to some readers, it did contribute to a slower progression in the overall plot, which, for me, was acceptable but may be a point of consideration for others. 2) The portrayal of other characters' personalities is a notable issue. The author seems to have difficulty maintaining consistency in how characters behave. This inconsistency is especially noticeable with characters like Hank Pym, The Ancient One, and Nick Fury, although it's a recurring problem throughout the narrative. Some character interactions defy logic, while others seem to undergo drastic shifts in their traits simply to fit the storyline. This inconsistency in character portrayal made it challenging for me to fully connect with the story, as it often felt like the characters were not staying true to themselves. 3) Logistical errors (This is the one that really bothered me). The story is riddled with unrealistic and absurd logic. Most of the time, the characters' plans, theories, and actions are poorly explained and clearly not well thought out, which made it hard for me to fully immerse myself in the story. It felt like there were gaps in the storytelling that left me questioning the characters' decisions and the overall plot.
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Its verrrrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyy slllllooooooooow pace, It took 20 chapters for prologue and its been 30 chapters and the mc is still in baby phase. Wow. Even if the story is like diamond readers like me loose interest in it if it drags on way to much. At first there was anticipation then slowly i started loosing interest in what will happen next then i had to drop it completely. I guess it might interest few people but this fanfic is not for me.
I absolutely love it, even though most people don't like the start i think it was needed and frankly well thought and it shows the characters without rushing them like most fanfics do. The only thing that scares me is the tragedy tag, if any family member dies i might lose it
everything was going well till chapter 36 when he said about making clones of himself even when he has multi shadow clone jutsu and those clone already have different personality from mc coz they are characters from naruto but no author still wants mc to have more clones of mc . I think that would mess up the story more and frankly I'm not a fan of the idea. so I'll drop it here. anyway the writing quality is good and story development is good as well, so you can give it a go.( if you are OK with the clone idea.)
It's a great Marvel fanfiction!! I like it!! 😁👍👍 It have a good plot and translate.. I know that a few first chapter is his pov when he's a baby and toddler, but that important to show reader his interaction with his family, and how he train his power (I especially like his interaction with his family).. I like that you don't make MC/Theo strong from start, but he must train to use his powers.. I also like how his clone work (they him, but they have another personality too, so they more like a real person) Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good job author sama 😁😁👍👍😍😍
The story, writing, and plot is great. The prologue is the issue, it’s too long. 20ish chapters of a baby and he tells people he’s reincarnated. Is too much for me to keep my interest for a story where everyone knows he’s reincarnated. Thats like one of the rules of isekai, not to tell people you reincarnated
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man, darn... I love this plot of your story.. I don't care if some people said otherwise but I found this more unique . With that world and character building style you have makes me more exited about the plot.. keep it and more chapters dude
I am truly loving this story! It keeps me interested and entertained. It even made me emotional quite a few times. I highly recommend reading this Fanfic. The only thing I could wish for is daily updates, but I understand not all Authors are capable of updating daily. Please keep working hard on your story and I’ll keep supporting you! Thank you!
first 30 some chapters and mc is ligit still a baby so freaking boring. love the idea and the premise but wayyyyy to much baby arc just makes me wana drop the book as I can't get into the story.
Ignore the cool cover, the first 17 chapters are largely babyfic, then toddler fic once the exceedingly long prologue is over. Its well enough written, the paragraphs could be smaller to be more phone friendly, but it's honestly the long childhood that doesn't work for me. It feels like the story is stuck in mud with how slowly it progresses.