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a wonderful novel you got here author it has a great potential to grow more even though it has only 3 chapters for now I give you 5⭐ this one is added to my library even though I'm a free reader your story is great👌😊👍 hoping for more to read I wish you good health 🙏
Legal Olha que coisa mais linda mais cheia de graça É ela menina que vem e que passa Num doce balanço, a caminho do mar Moça do corpo dourado Do sol de Ipanema O seu balançado é mais que um poema É a coisa mais linda que eu já vi passar Ah, porque sou tão sozinho Ah, porque tudo é tão triste Ah, a beleza que existe A beleza que não é só minha Que também passa sozinha Ah, se ela soubesse Que quando ela passa O mundo sorrindo se enche de graça E fica mais lindo por causa do amor Tall and tan and young and lovely The girl from Ipanema Goes walking and when she passes Each one she passes Goes ahh When she walks she's like a samba That swings so cool and sways so gently That when she passes, each one she passes Goes ahh Oh, but he watches her so sadly How can he tell her I love her Yes, he would give his heart gladly But each day when she walks to the sea She looks straight ahead, not at him Tall and tan and young and lovely The girl from Ipanema goes walking And when she passes, he smiles But she doesn't see Oh, but he sees her so sadly How can he tell her I love her Yes, he would give his heart gladly But each day when she walks to the sea She looks straight ahead, not at him Tall and tan and young and lovely The girl from Ipanema goes walking And when she passes, he smiles But she doesn't see She just doesn't see No, she doesn't see But she doesn't see She doesn't see No, she doesn't see
did not like it a bit... he just interferes everywhere and forcefully so... doesn't look natural progression
this story is amazing and amazingly well written and continues on fanfiction.net it is titled the mountains range by the passionate admiral.
The writing is ok. The character is ok a bit slow idk y he wants to save the world but meh. the one thing I don’t like is how this is moving he shouldn’ just add people to his crew and trust them. This man prolly has the most spies in his house than anyone else it’s so stupid he can be basically insided by any major house. Mc is not smart
this is my favourite male mc I've read and I rarely ever like fanfics pls keep going 🙏
the protagonist is dumber and pretentiously good than Ned stark, very ridiculous ...........................................................................
The story idea has so much potential. The execution is lacking. The MC seems to be someone with a hero complex and no depth. Many judgements seemed to be made out of pure emotion and logic, even when the mc has no emotional stake on the table. The MC character development and background development is seriously lacking. And at some points you might even wonder whether the mc was actually a CIA agent in his past life of just a teenager with serious hero syndrome. This is more like a wish fulfilment than anything else.
There are 2 things that I hate in this story: -The fact that all things go according to the mc's plan. -And how he wants to be part of literally everyone's life, how he wants to 'fix' everything.
pretty decent story but that's all, there's a lot of plot holes, stupidity and all but pretty decent with pretty consistent updates. so why the low star? because this is a story about some hero wannabe in a GOT, you like that? good for you if not, then this fic is pretty annoying and boring for you
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It was a decent read, up until the author had the viper bang the mountain.. that got me to drop it real quick
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This Ser Gregor Clegane is more of a dog than the original one. The only difference is that he is 'Good' and everything about this story is a fantasy 'good' ending. Admit it, the only reason people loved GOT was because it was dark, gory, and somewhat realistic to the medieval ages. I hate only good doing MCs, so it's upto you if you like this story or not. Writing Quality: 4 Update: 3 All else: 1
good, although the author is not neutral and likes to turn ordinary characters into saints of goodness and wisdom, but it is very good and I read it all in one go, 5 stars easy, but I mean I can change the grade depending on how he handles it the Frey house, the Freys are a house that doesn't bother anyone and just stays on their property charging minding their own business, I know they charge a high tax from the people but it's still their noble freedom, if the author wants to make walder frey a super villain I'm going to give a low score, after all walder is one of the best administrators in the kingdom
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Well, honestly? Too stupid fantasies. Completely stupid actions, and if your story was even a little like the original, he would be punished 10 times. And your intelligence agent looks more like a stupid schoolboy
I'll give this a 5star review, I don't remember giving many, but here I find no reason to shave some off it. Well written, good character design, absolutely great pace, the story doesn't feel fast but is quite quick paced. As it is a fic it doesn't linger on things already explained extensively in the original books but rather expands on the additions and modifications brought by the author. I quite like it honestly. Now if you'll excuse me, I'm gonna go check if author-san has other works :)
It’s an okay story. Not great, not terrible. For me personally, it’s too much of a “white knight” type of story. When I saw “Gregor clegane” in the title, this is not what I was expecting. MC loves the sound of his own voice, and projecting his world views of right and wrong. He saves anyone and anything he deems good. Just not my cup of tea, but it’s worth checking out.
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Of the 8 chapters that have come out I like what has been written. The MC was reincarnated into the Mountain and now we get to see Gregor Clegane as a good guy. Author has his MC already change things in the Rebellion and I look forward to the butterfly affect of those decisions. The only reason I have stuff at 4 stars instead of 5 is simply because to me 8 chapters isn’t enough to determine if it is 5 star worthy yet but I have great anticipation.
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its pretty good. ive seen no spelling or grammar mistakes so far. although i feel like it would be better if you followed the "show not tell" technique.
bro I'm only asking you for one thing,pls don't drop this fic 🙏 the idea of the plot is very interesting for sure 👍. An mc with the body of the Gregor Clegane and a mind from the modern times would mix pretty well for sure, only other mc who had that advantage would be those who got a super soldier serum wish cliche from other fics. Only other ff that got my full attention like this would be Twins " the Ladder" ff with Petyr Baelish as mc with a balanced gaming system
a wonderful novel you got here author it has a great potential to grow more even though it has only 3 chapters for now I give you 5⭐ this one is added to my library even though I'm a free reader your story is great👌😊👍 hoping for more to read I wish you good health 🙏
Legal Olha que coisa mais linda mais cheia de graça É ela menina que vem e que passa Num doce balanço, a caminho do mar Moça do corpo dourado Do sol de Ipanema O seu balançado é mais que um poema É a coisa mais linda que eu já vi passar Ah, porque sou tão sozinho Ah, porque tudo é tão triste Ah, a beleza que existe A beleza que não é só minha Que também passa sozinha Ah, se ela soubesse Que quando ela passa O mundo sorrindo se enche de graça E fica mais lindo por causa do amor Tall and tan and young and lovely The girl from Ipanema Goes walking and when she passes Each one she passes Goes ahh When she walks she's like a samba That swings so cool and sways so gently That when she passes, each one she passes Goes ahh Oh, but he watches her so sadly How can he tell her I love her Yes, he would give his heart gladly But each day when she walks to the sea She looks straight ahead, not at him Tall and tan and young and lovely The girl from Ipanema goes walking And when she passes, he smiles But she doesn't see Oh, but he sees her so sadly How can he tell her I love her Yes, he would give his heart gladly But each day when she walks to the sea She looks straight ahead, not at him Tall and tan and young and lovely The girl from Ipanema goes walking And when she passes, he smiles But she doesn't see She just doesn't see No, she doesn't see But she doesn't see She doesn't see No, she doesn't see
did not like it a bit... he just interferes everywhere and forcefully so... doesn't look natural progression
this story is amazing and amazingly well written and continues on fanfiction.net it is titled the mountains range by the passionate admiral.
The writing is ok. The character is ok a bit slow idk y he wants to save the world but meh. the one thing I don’t like is how this is moving he shouldn’ just add people to his crew and trust them. This man prolly has the most spies in his house than anyone else it’s so stupid he can be basically insided by any major house. Mc is not smart
this is my favourite male mc I've read and I rarely ever like fanfics pls keep going 🙏
the protagonist is dumber and pretentiously good than Ned stark, very ridiculous ...........................................................................
The story idea has so much potential. The execution is lacking. The MC seems to be someone with a hero complex and no depth. Many judgements seemed to be made out of pure emotion and logic, even when the mc has no emotional stake on the table. The MC character development and background development is seriously lacking. And at some points you might even wonder whether the mc was actually a CIA agent in his past life of just a teenager with serious hero syndrome. This is more like a wish fulfilment than anything else.
There are 2 things that I hate in this story: -The fact that all things go according to the mc's plan. -And how he wants to be part of literally everyone's life, how he wants to 'fix' everything.
pretty decent story but that's all, there's a lot of plot holes, stupidity and all but pretty decent with pretty consistent updates. so why the low star? because this is a story about some hero wannabe in a GOT, you like that? good for you if not, then this fic is pretty annoying and boring for you
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It was a decent read, up until the author had the viper bang the mountain.. that got me to drop it real quick
Spoiler de révélation This Ser Gregor Clegane is more of a dog than the original one. The only difference is that he is 'Good' and everything about this story is a fantasy 'good' ending. Admit it, the only reason people loved GOT was because it was dark, gory, and somewhat realistic to the medieval ages. I hate only good doing MCs, so it's upto you if you like this story or not. Writing Quality: 4 Update: 3 All else: 1
good, although the author is not neutral and likes to turn ordinary characters into saints of goodness and wisdom, but it is very good and I read it all in one go, 5 stars easy, but I mean I can change the grade depending on how he handles it the Frey house, the Freys are a house that doesn't bother anyone and just stays on their property charging minding their own business, I know they charge a high tax from the people but it's still their noble freedom, if the author wants to make walder frey a super villain I'm going to give a low score, after all walder is one of the best administrators in the kingdom
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Well, honestly? Too stupid fantasies. Completely stupid actions, and if your story was even a little like the original, he would be punished 10 times. And your intelligence agent looks more like a stupid schoolboy
I'll give this a 5star review, I don't remember giving many, but here I find no reason to shave some off it. Well written, good character design, absolutely great pace, the story doesn't feel fast but is quite quick paced. As it is a fic it doesn't linger on things already explained extensively in the original books but rather expands on the additions and modifications brought by the author. I quite like it honestly. Now if you'll excuse me, I'm gonna go check if author-san has other works :)
It’s an okay story. Not great, not terrible. For me personally, it’s too much of a “white knight” type of story. When I saw “Gregor clegane” in the title, this is not what I was expecting. MC loves the sound of his own voice, and projecting his world views of right and wrong. He saves anyone and anything he deems good. Just not my cup of tea, but it’s worth checking out.
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Of the 8 chapters that have come out I like what has been written. The MC was reincarnated into the Mountain and now we get to see Gregor Clegane as a good guy. Author has his MC already change things in the Rebellion and I look forward to the butterfly affect of those decisions. The only reason I have stuff at 4 stars instead of 5 is simply because to me 8 chapters isn’t enough to determine if it is 5 star worthy yet but I have great anticipation.
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its pretty good. ive seen no spelling or grammar mistakes so far. although i feel like it would be better if you followed the "show not tell" technique.
bro I'm only asking you for one thing,pls don't drop this fic 🙏 the idea of the plot is very interesting for sure 👍. An mc with the body of the Gregor Clegane and a mind from the modern times would mix pretty well for sure, only other mc who had that advantage would be those who got a super soldier serum wish cliche from other fics. Only other ff that got my full attention like this would be Twins " the Ladder" ff with Petyr Baelish as mc with a balanced gaming system