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All you need to know is he gives away his tech to pretty much everyone, basically tells someone about his system, ect...
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it's not a bad story, still upset that there isn't any harem, but the most that I'm upset about is that you decide to get this over and done with seeing how much you rushed the War that the Mc would have with the superhero society because you couldn't put in the work to keep the story going strong, even if you had a terrible beginning, I still think you could have done a better job with the plot because as soon as I saw that his system allows him to buy cybernetics from 2077 I keep that he would be creating his own little organization which would either be neutral or against the hero's.
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Pretty good with a great command of grammar for webnovel. I don't really understand all the others raving about power sharing...
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I feel like someone is trolling u giving bad reviews u should check and not let some rubbish reviews get to u, Ur work is really good, I hope u finish it, i don't really want to see an author who drops his fic cuz of trolls, it happens to plenty dc fanfics
Weak beta MC. Who again reveals his powers. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
first few chapters were good but it went downhill so fast. powersharing as well as stupid decisions, simp for girls, pushover. But he has no reason to be a villian and he has no problem killing for the first time. Mc's character is all messed up(not in cool way just stupid)
You'll have to turn off critical thinking, but once you do that it is mostly enjoyable. MC isn't a solo robot which is a win, but the timing of certain things are just baffling. Either the author has ADD or he's done a brilliant job making a MC with it. It's almost like he thinks the MC can't just sit around waiting for his updates to download and he's got to get in the game right now.
had the potential to be a good story but the author decided to go down a bad path to say the least.[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
It great you put details into character building world building and writing quality is honest one of the better ones on Webnovel keep up the great work and I’ll keep reading
From what I can tell, he told Talia Al Ghul that he has a system. That’s all you need to know to not read this fanfiction.
Started off a bit iffy but the main problems I had with it was that the mc really had no reason to become a villain, we don’t even know his reasons why but the one that annoyed me The most was he told talia al ghul who he recently met about his system and was giving upgardes out like candy
The MC's choices are very weird, even taking into account out the villain like story development. Like going for a melee like build when having tech way beyond the times. The cyberpunk system just seems kinda mismatched with the MC's choices and underutilized. And then there is giving his tech away to others, that's where I drew the line and dropped
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Very entertaining. I've gone to the most recent chapter and enjoyed all of it. The writing quality is top-notch compared to many stories on this website, and even then, the grammar and sentence structure is excellent. Nothing like reading a formal paper, but definitely has higher quality than most novels I have read. Stability I can't say much, but I would say for the length of the chapters, it has a reasonable update schedule. Story development is also worthy of a 5/5. It's not too fast, or too slow. And finally, the last two can be combined for a 5/5. The designs and feelings of both the world and the characters don't feel 'robotic' or 'bland', and also do not follow any of the super-common tropes. Overall, the story is worthy of a 5/5, and hopefully, the author keeps up the good work!
honestly the story had a lot of potential but for some reason the author decided to follow a path at least bad since let's be honest being a villain in the dc universe is one of the worst choices and even with his system he will never be as strong as the heroes but strong but other than that the story is average there is nothing very good apart from the idea of the story but there is also nothing too bad
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have him use the qiant sandevistan with the 4 sec cd reducing mods and also the 30% cd-reducing cyberware. It's op since its 2 seconds of cooldown for 12 seconds of 25% slowed down time. Also, get him mantis blades or smth cool like that
a story that started well despite having some problems with the main character as he seems to have no goals and the decisions the author made in the story were meaningless to say the least.
the story had a lot of potential but i really didn't understand the mc's choices first he decides to become a criminal in the world of dc that in itself has no problem but he has no reason he just decides to be a villain and then he just decides to join to one of the most dangerous organizations in the dc world not to mention he still reveals his power for no reason
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Man reading this got me feeling type of way. In a long time did not read a story with good pace and vocabulary. Keep it going bub
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All you need to know is he gives away his tech to pretty much everyone, basically tells someone about his system, ect...
Encore une fic dc merdique [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
it's not a bad story, still upset that there isn't any harem, but the most that I'm upset about is that you decide to get this over and done with seeing how much you rushed the War that the Mc would have with the superhero society because you couldn't put in the work to keep the story going strong, even if you had a terrible beginning, I still think you could have done a better job with the plot because as soon as I saw that his system allows him to buy cybernetics from 2077 I keep that he would be creating his own little organization which would either be neutral or against the hero's.
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Spoiler de révélation Pretty good with a great command of grammar for webnovel. I don't really understand all the others raving about power sharing...
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I feel like someone is trolling u giving bad reviews u should check and not let some rubbish reviews get to u, Ur work is really good, I hope u finish it, i don't really want to see an author who drops his fic cuz of trolls, it happens to plenty dc fanfics
Weak beta MC. Who again reveals his powers. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
first few chapters were good but it went downhill so fast. powersharing as well as stupid decisions, simp for girls, pushover. But he has no reason to be a villian and he has no problem killing for the first time. Mc's character is all messed up(not in cool way just stupid)
You'll have to turn off critical thinking, but once you do that it is mostly enjoyable. MC isn't a solo robot which is a win, but the timing of certain things are just baffling. Either the author has ADD or he's done a brilliant job making a MC with it. It's almost like he thinks the MC can't just sit around waiting for his updates to download and he's got to get in the game right now.
had the potential to be a good story but the author decided to go down a bad path to say the least.[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
It great you put details into character building world building and writing quality is honest one of the better ones on Webnovel keep up the great work and I’ll keep reading
From what I can tell, he told Talia Al Ghul that he has a system. That’s all you need to know to not read this fanfiction.
Started off a bit iffy but the main problems I had with it was that the mc really had no reason to become a villain, we don’t even know his reasons why but the one that annoyed me The most was he told talia al ghul who he recently met about his system and was giving upgardes out like candy
The MC's choices are very weird, even taking into account out the villain like story development. Like going for a melee like build when having tech way beyond the times. The cyberpunk system just seems kinda mismatched with the MC's choices and underutilized. And then there is giving his tech away to others, that's where I drew the line and dropped
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Very entertaining. I've gone to the most recent chapter and enjoyed all of it. The writing quality is top-notch compared to many stories on this website, and even then, the grammar and sentence structure is excellent. Nothing like reading a formal paper, but definitely has higher quality than most novels I have read. Stability I can't say much, but I would say for the length of the chapters, it has a reasonable update schedule. Story development is also worthy of a 5/5. It's not too fast, or too slow. And finally, the last two can be combined for a 5/5. The designs and feelings of both the world and the characters don't feel 'robotic' or 'bland', and also do not follow any of the super-common tropes. Overall, the story is worthy of a 5/5, and hopefully, the author keeps up the good work!
honestly the story had a lot of potential but for some reason the author decided to follow a path at least bad since let's be honest being a villain in the dc universe is one of the worst choices and even with his system he will never be as strong as the heroes but strong but other than that the story is average there is nothing very good apart from the idea of the story but there is also nothing too bad
Spoiler de révélation have him use the qiant sandevistan with the 4 sec cd reducing mods and also the 30% cd-reducing cyberware. It's op since its 2 seconds of cooldown for 12 seconds of 25% slowed down time. Also, get him mantis blades or smth cool like that
a story that started well despite having some problems with the main character as he seems to have no goals and the decisions the author made in the story were meaningless to say the least.
the story had a lot of potential but i really didn't understand the mc's choices first he decides to become a criminal in the world of dc that in itself has no problem but he has no reason he just decides to be a villain and then he just decides to join to one of the most dangerous organizations in the dc world not to mention he still reveals his power for no reason
Spoiler de révélation Man reading this got me feeling type of way. In a long time did not read a story with good pace and vocabulary. Keep it going bub
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