WHAT IF I BECOME THE ENEMY

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ArgaNov01

As a writer, I recommend this story. I hope readers will like the story I wrote wholeheartedly. Give an honest assessment. Thank you for following this story.

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ArgaNov01

For readers who have tried to guess the storyline, thank you. But, you haven't managed to guess anything

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Mickaelle09

I think i can't continue this book. While the first chapter was interesting and seemed to promise many good things , i'm finally left disappointed. Don't get me wrong. The story isn't bad. It's just that i can't get into it. - The pros : . Transmigration is well done( we saw a glimpse of mc's original life and he doesn't adapts directly ro his new environment , nor does he realise quickly that he is in a novel.) . The writing( although with some fruits here and there) is really of too quality, for a novel of this platform . . The Mc's life is not smooth sailing since the start. . The first chapter is one of the best introductory chapters i saw on this platform( simple yet effective). . The author is dedicated - The cons : First, the Mc. I pity him but he is honestly sooooo irritating . He is afraid of what might happen to him but he always let the flow of the story drive him, as if he can't think of a plan for himself. Plus, he is always frustrated , not calcalutive at all( which he should be a minimum), and "frank" in a dumb way ( who would show their boss that they despise him or do not want to do their assignated task? Your life DEPENDS on the crown prince so you ought to at least pretend and behave in front of him. But the Mc doesn't even do that. ) . I can accept a Mc with an average brain. But if this one isn't hard working enough to compensate for his/ her weaknesses , if he/she is frustrated by his/her situation but doesn't lift a finger to get out of it and only goes with the flow, then he/she is not worth it. Plus, what is even his personality? Even after reading 17 chapters , i get the feeling that i don't know him. A part from not being a "light" , being frustrated about his situation, being the Mc ... (i don't even know what to say about him besides this three points , which proves even more that i don't know him) ...What defines him? And if one tells me to wait for more chapters before giving my opinion i will disagree with him/her, because the early chapters of a book are supposed to be the appetizers. If i find them this bad, how much longer should i hang on for good chapters to come, while i can invest my time in seaching for better works? Second, The atmosphere in the book. This point is personal. I don't like the atmosphere in the book. I like it better when a book switches between different tones. In this one however , i get the feeling that everything is always serious, which is a bummer for me . The author could have added comedy ( although he/she tried often but failed at it) , and some lighthearted moments( The author could have given him at least one friend). Or any other thing that wouldn’t make it so hard to digest. Third, the pace and the writing. I can understand that this type of plots needs time to unfurl. However, i get the feeling that nothing really important happens( it is too slow or too uneventful). When i read the title of the book, i prepare myself for a good dive in conspiracy and scheming. But there isn't much( if any), where i'm at. Then how about action? The same! I didn’t witness that much action and when it happened it didn’t drew me in. Like i said above, the first chapters are supposed to draw one to a book's story . However this book's 2 to 17 chapters failed at keeping the interest the first chapter earned it. Overall it's not a bad book. It's maybe that it is too low for the expectations that i had .

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OhmsOfDaoism

As a reader, I recommend this story. I think readers will like the story, because it was penned wholeheartedly. That is my honest assessment. Thank you for following this story.

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Abigail_Okoi_Obuli

This story is good and I like the idea of ML waking up in a book that he trash talked. I believe there's room for improvement in the writing quality. It's not bad by any means, but it's not the best it could be. Also the story is a bit forgettable and I struggled to remained interested. It's a good idea, but it doesn't quite stick the landing for me. I can tell it'll get better as it goes on, but for now I'll just say this story is good enough.

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LegalWolf

I was hooked up after reading the synopsis as well as 3 chapters of your novel. I loved the plots and it's quite intriguing.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Meharu

I like the story quite a bit but it needs some polishing to shine.

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Abdul_Alshibly

I read until ch.12 and couldn't continue. The amount of language mistakes makes reading a chore and confusing so I couldn't continue. The story seemed to progress nicely but I got sick of reading

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One_Singularity

A Top quality novel with with unique and interesting ideas , this type of novel is first for me. I hope the author continues and created more amazing chapters

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NobleRemmy

great story, interesting plot...I am really enjoying your book. I felt really sorry for Cyril at the beginning but as I read I realised things will be better for him. 👍

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Zamsi_4001

The story is so captivating, the book name is so addictive it pulls you in. 8 love the plot development and the characters development, it's so unique and different. Keep it up author ❤️🤗

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Nwose

This story is good, honestly I was hooked after reading just the first chapter the plot is new and the character is relatable good job to the author ❤️❤️❤️

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Nzr150cc

The story is quite interesting and I love it! This book has a lot of potential!

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Husniya_S

This story has a unique plot and I'm rooting for it. The protagonist is also relatable and I love the writer's sense of description. Keep writing and keep up the good work. You have the potential of becoming a great author.

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Marinie_Inthan

I'm wondering as to why the crown prince was killed. After reading it, I become inquisitive and addicted. next.... 😀❤🥰

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Rin_Nurnia

To be honest, there are some parts confused me so I tried to read it a few times and I could take a grasp of what's happening. A minor grammar mistakes but you surely can improve it👍🏻

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Lefkiilavanta

Amazing fantasy! I entered into his world 😱😱😱 Honestly, I was very surprised how the author told the plot. I love fantastic fantasy like this, it makes me imagine many things, Xixixi. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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_Carolina_writes_

After reading the first chapter , I liked the flow in your story. The plot is also interesting and the characters development is also good. keep up your good work and I hope you will get a contract soon. Definitely recommend your story.

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Eun_Hana

Initially, I felt confused and curious after reading the first chapter. However, after reading the next chapter, I understand that the way the story is presented is unique and makes the reader curious and unable to stop reading. Update again chapter.... Good Author... 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟