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absolutely one of the best halo fics I've ever read though it was missing some knowledge of the forerunners such as their massive station in deep space or the rest of the thirteen installations and not to mention the Warden himself.
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Good, может добавить ещё несколько вселенных . Звёздные врата или звёздные войны. Только вот реакция на технологии у расс цитадели какая слабая. Ведь у них ограничение размер кораблей из mass Effect а также способ сверхсветовой скорости.
I believe it was unnecessary to introduce gene seeds from warhammer 40k and the MC certainly does not need them. In my opinion halo and warhammer should be separate. Humanity in halo universe should not be possible of such feats and MC should not have such knowledge. I hope this is not a one man show because if it is then there will be no character development. still it's a good story
Honestly one of the best fanfics I've read. I've been immensely enjoying this work. 😊
Realmente refrescante, un proyecto que si bien no es profesional no deja duda el esfuerzo que se pone en ello, la verdad me impresiona el impresionante desarrollo de la trama que muchos dirán incompleta me parece que esta muy no enfocarse demasiado en los detalles ya que con lleva mucho cansancio mental así como pregunta tras pregunta, pero me parece muy buena la historia y recuerdo que alguien influyente dijo una vez lo mejor de esta vida no se caracteriza por ser duradero, los momentos de felicidad son efímeros por eso los recordamos con nostalgia
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Wanted to write a review after the new galaxy it was a make it or break it moment. Glad to see it was the former. Really looking forward to the future chapters and how you blend the two franchises together
Es el mejor fanfict de Halo qué eh leído es muy bueno.......................................................................... ........ ......................................................
this is a really satisfying novel to read. just hop through the galaxies, and spread the equality
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Although the MC is OP as heck, the story plots and all is amazing!! Never got bored from reading them unlike other fics that I've read. Most authors who make their MC very OP never expand the world building and the story plots further. Overall, I hope you continued on the fics. 10/10 best fic of all time.
Es simplemente el mejor fan fic de halo, megusta la firma en que se desarrolla la historia y su relación con los demás personajes además de la construcción de mundo que lleva, me gusta que a pedar de que hace ver al mc y la humanidad poderosa al menos se encuentra justificable por la tecnología lo que lo hace entretenida, lo unico qie espero es que si lo termines y no sea como otros que lo abandona, además gracias por las actualizaciones constantes que se hacen.
I really like the premise for this novel. The idea of an extremely I telli gent man, going to a high tech world and gaining strength through biological and technological modification and creating an empire is awesome. The execution was terrible tho. It's obvious that the novel was written by an Ai. It feels utterly inhuman. It's so dry and factual that I feel like I would be more entertained reading a math textbook. The dialogue is so emotionless even when I can tell the author wants to portray an emotional moment. Next, is that the Mc is stupid. In his first life he was killed by the government because he made advanced technology and medical treatments and then published all that information. He learned nothing in this life and did the same thing in his second life. Exposing his intelligence and research. He obviously wasn't killed but was for some reason made into an officer in the army which is beyond impossible. An asset of his Intelligence would never see a battlefield. Moreover, he spends all his time making technological advances in military technology and just gives them away. In the prologue chapter, it says he became an expert in forerunner technology and learned how to use technology to modify his body and alter his genetics. We of course, never see the results of this. Basically it takes 30 chapters, and finally he undergoes the spartan procedure and becomes a base supersoldier. It's just utterly disappointing. When the author unrepentently said he was going to make an OP protagonist I was expecting things like atom sized nanobots, him transferring his consciousness neuron by neuron into some sort of indestructible nanotech body that was constructed by him using advanced technology and biological metallurgy to make some sort of super advanced technological homonculus that allows him to Interface with all the technology he built. I was expecting iron man. I was expecting pacific rim. I was expecting Gurren laggan. I was expecting Gundam. Instead he underwent the basic spartan procedure and made some spaceships and robots for the military. Mc is not op. Doesn't make his own empire. Doesn't make crazy tech to rule the universe like Warhammer 40k or any of the media I wrote above. It's a letdown because author promised op Mc and we got a smarter than average spartan with a high military rank. So basically we have Ai written textbook style retelling of a man who makes above average military tech. I'm sorry for the rant, but t It was such a disspointing read after what you said in your synopsis.
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Hey Author-sama this story is great. The tech details match up so far with the Halo novels I've read. This is a seriously great FF and I cant wait to read more. Well done is my final review. Keep up the good work and have some stones!
A+ work on Author's part. Great storyline, interesting plot and hey, it's halo. Author makes little to no grammatical errors, the story has a a pretty straightforward development, all characters have depth, a couple chapters a week, and a well explored world background. What more can we ask for? Author is Chef Ramsay up in this
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Basically this is just a story containing explanations, lacking dialogue. I like the world design, but not your MC because he is too confident and arrogant. Besides that, you the author only made the MC the only smart one in the story, while the others are stupid and idiots. The story is just wish fulfillment (not in an adult context), the author immediately uses a method called plot armor to keep the MC on top.
love it so far! great job so far! can't wait for more. while a little bit of a brain think in the early chapters, I was immersed into it early on till I finally got to the end and realized I couldn't go to the next chapter just as it was heating up.
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God re goooooooddddd moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeee we escribes bien chido sigue escribiendo bro jajajajajajajjajajaja cuando continúas actualizando quiero más charters
De un momento muy particular y ciertamente de manera singular haciendo o no referencia a cierto diálogo que puede o no estar relacionada con algún hipotético muñeco para ser o no ser contabilizado como 150 caracteres así poder colocar lo que en un principio se podría suponer que se escribiría a continuación. Solo para finalizar esta historia está...
absolutely one of the best halo fics I've ever read though it was missing some knowledge of the forerunners such as their massive station in deep space or the rest of the thirteen installations and not to mention the Warden himself.
Spoiler de révélation Good, может добавить ещё несколько вселенных . Звёздные врата или звёздные войны. Только вот реакция на технологии у расс цитадели какая слабая. Ведь у них ограничение размер кораблей из mass Effect а также способ сверхсветовой скорости.
I believe it was unnecessary to introduce gene seeds from warhammer 40k and the MC certainly does not need them. In my opinion halo and warhammer should be separate. Humanity in halo universe should not be possible of such feats and MC should not have such knowledge. I hope this is not a one man show because if it is then there will be no character development. still it's a good story
Honestly one of the best fanfics I've read. I've been immensely enjoying this work. 😊
Realmente refrescante, un proyecto que si bien no es profesional no deja duda el esfuerzo que se pone en ello, la verdad me impresiona el impresionante desarrollo de la trama que muchos dirán incompleta me parece que esta muy no enfocarse demasiado en los detalles ya que con lleva mucho cansancio mental así como pregunta tras pregunta, pero me parece muy buena la historia y recuerdo que alguien influyente dijo una vez lo mejor de esta vida no se caracteriza por ser duradero, los momentos de felicidad son efímeros por eso los recordamos con nostalgia
Spoiler de révélation Wanted to write a review after the new galaxy it was a make it or break it moment. Glad to see it was the former. Really looking forward to the future chapters and how you blend the two franchises together
Es el mejor fanfict de Halo qué eh leído es muy bueno.......................................................................... ........ ......................................................
this is a really satisfying novel to read. just hop through the galaxies, and spread the equality
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Although the MC is OP as heck, the story plots and all is amazing!! Never got bored from reading them unlike other fics that I've read. Most authors who make their MC very OP never expand the world building and the story plots further. Overall, I hope you continued on the fics. 10/10 best fic of all time.
Es simplemente el mejor fan fic de halo, megusta la firma en que se desarrolla la historia y su relación con los demás personajes además de la construcción de mundo que lleva, me gusta que a pedar de que hace ver al mc y la humanidad poderosa al menos se encuentra justificable por la tecnología lo que lo hace entretenida, lo unico qie espero es que si lo termines y no sea como otros que lo abandona, además gracias por las actualizaciones constantes que se hacen.
I really like the premise for this novel. The idea of an extremely I telli gent man, going to a high tech world and gaining strength through biological and technological modification and creating an empire is awesome. The execution was terrible tho. It's obvious that the novel was written by an Ai. It feels utterly inhuman. It's so dry and factual that I feel like I would be more entertained reading a math textbook. The dialogue is so emotionless even when I can tell the author wants to portray an emotional moment. Next, is that the Mc is stupid. In his first life he was killed by the government because he made advanced technology and medical treatments and then published all that information. He learned nothing in this life and did the same thing in his second life. Exposing his intelligence and research. He obviously wasn't killed but was for some reason made into an officer in the army which is beyond impossible. An asset of his Intelligence would never see a battlefield. Moreover, he spends all his time making technological advances in military technology and just gives them away. In the prologue chapter, it says he became an expert in forerunner technology and learned how to use technology to modify his body and alter his genetics. We of course, never see the results of this. Basically it takes 30 chapters, and finally he undergoes the spartan procedure and becomes a base supersoldier. It's just utterly disappointing. When the author unrepentently said he was going to make an OP protagonist I was expecting things like atom sized nanobots, him transferring his consciousness neuron by neuron into some sort of indestructible nanotech body that was constructed by him using advanced technology and biological metallurgy to make some sort of super advanced technological homonculus that allows him to Interface with all the technology he built. I was expecting iron man. I was expecting pacific rim. I was expecting Gurren laggan. I was expecting Gundam. Instead he underwent the basic spartan procedure and made some spaceships and robots for the military. Mc is not op. Doesn't make his own empire. Doesn't make crazy tech to rule the universe like Warhammer 40k or any of the media I wrote above. It's a letdown because author promised op Mc and we got a smarter than average spartan with a high military rank. So basically we have Ai written textbook style retelling of a man who makes above average military tech. I'm sorry for the rant, but t It was such a disspointing read after what you said in your synopsis.
Spoiler de révélation Hey Author-sama this story is great. The tech details match up so far with the Halo novels I've read. This is a seriously great FF and I cant wait to read more. Well done is my final review. Keep up the good work and have some stones!
A+ work on Author's part. Great storyline, interesting plot and hey, it's halo. Author makes little to no grammatical errors, the story has a a pretty straightforward development, all characters have depth, a couple chapters a week, and a well explored world background. What more can we ask for? Author is Chef Ramsay up in this
GóóooooooooooooooooóoooooooooooóooooooooóóoóoooooooooóoooooooooóooóoooooooooooóooóooooóooooooóooooooooooooooooóódGóóooooooooooooooooóoooooooooooóooooooooóóoóoooooooooóoooooooooóooóoooooooooooóooóooooóooooooóooooooooooooooooóód
Basically this is just a story containing explanations, lacking dialogue. I like the world design, but not your MC because he is too confident and arrogant. Besides that, you the author only made the MC the only smart one in the story, while the others are stupid and idiots. The story is just wish fulfillment (not in an adult context), the author immediately uses a method called plot armor to keep the MC on top.
love it so far! great job so far! can't wait for more. while a little bit of a brain think in the early chapters, I was immersed into it early on till I finally got to the end and realized I couldn't go to the next chapter just as it was heating up.
Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo! Halo!
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God re goooooooddddd moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeee we escribes bien chido sigue escribiendo bro jajajajajajajjajajaja cuando continúas actualizando quiero más charters
De un momento muy particular y ciertamente de manera singular haciendo o no referencia a cierto diálogo que puede o no estar relacionada con algún hipotético muñeco para ser o no ser contabilizado como 150 caracteres así poder colocar lo que en un principio se podría suponer que se escribiría a continuación. Solo para finalizar esta historia está...