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pregnant after both of them losing their virginity? not impossible, but she showed signs in less then 12 hours? stupid! he got over Gaia's death way too easily to have actual seemed like he cared for her. so may loop holes in logic that I could never enjoy this novel myself
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Honest reviews are here.. [Spoiler Alert] I also started reading the novel after reading this novel synopsis.. Seriously, the synopsis is quite attractive and makes the story seem different from other novel.. But it is not.. In the early chapter, you already feel the rushing of the story.. His parent death.. He got into an orphanage and got bullying some of the guys.. The reason for his bully? Because he is still in shock after the death of his parents, which had happened right in front of his own eyes, and basically, he ignores everyone around him.. And there he meets some girl who is doing to be his loves one.. Then, after a few years, he going to be 18 years old with his loves one and planning their future.. Then, his girlfriend got taken away in front of him, and he can't do anything because of he to weak against yakuza group.. Then, his loves one got r*ped and killed by them.. His thirst for revenge made him awaken the system.. First of all, there is no superpower in this novel.. Only high-tech.. So, I am quite disappointed, which I thought there going to be some superpower, cultivation or anything like that.. The first thing he does is tell the bully on the orphanage.. Well, he got along with that guy after a few years, he lived together on an orphanage.. Then, he also tells his lawyers about his system.. So, the story is quite boringgggg after that.. After reading a few more chapters, I no longer continue the novel.. It really not my cup of tea..
This novel isn't for me. The MC is stupid with no common sense with a focus on getting revenge. Like every other paragraph MC will say something about revenge. Then every other paragraph MC will talk about why MC didn't get a army or some OP ability for free with no effort when in real life any normal person would not even think about get an army or whatever OP from the start an just be grateful with what they got. I really don't know how this got many 5 star reviews. Though the writing quality is great, while there are many chapters which are long enough to my liking. Still I can't read this anymore.
I don't know what to say but good job author. Maybe you can't draw MC and other character emotion smoothly but at least i still can feel it with my own imagination. Interesting premise with foreboding system' betrayal, but please you can't make it more obvious.
A strong start, and an intricately-designed system that is not designed to be too cryptic. The way Japan is portrayed is also good enough as a fan of Japanese media myself. Will look forward to what happens next.
The story starts off with his parents dying in a car crash and he’s taken into and orphanage where he spends 12 years. Once he is 18 he and his best friend who he has a crush on leave the orphanage and are about to start their college life but while they are walking down the street she gets kidnapped, raped, and killed. He gets very mad and awakens a system which is a very basic plot and really no time to get attached to the people who died but I could get passed that. What was really got me was the system and world. The world is Earth which is kinda boring. The system is very boring at first it gave him a ton of options about what magiktech to base his system on but when he selected one he wanted it said access denied same happened until he got the A.I one. Why wright all of those systems when he could only get one from the start. There were so many more interesting options as well like nano tech or if he wanted to build a city Terran magiktech. Overall cool idea but bad execution
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Nice concept, but maybe you can add some interaction in the conversation, like.. "Good morning sir." Someone said as they waved to your MC.
It's a little fast paced in my opinion especially at the beginning. He doesn't have any attachment to his family figures and it seems a bit forced. The system is introduced too suddenly. Otherwise it's a very interesting concept. I put it in my library
The start is good but, the emotional aspect feels flat. Conveying the emotions at the start of novel can be a bit tough but, it's a bit more flat. The story is good but the time gapes aren't separated properly. When the girl is killed at the start, I can't connect to them. You can use some more spacing in paragraphs. Ultimately... it's good. The syatem is elaborate and very interesting. A good read for now.
Amazing! Another story from my most favourite author. It even started well this time. The start for this story is totally amazing. I like the synopsis too. It's simple and short. I am looking forward to more releases.
A dark, suspenseful and well-written story. Every chapter constantly keeps me on my toes, and I can feel the character's pain and frustration. Best of luck with your story [img=recommend]
I recommend this novel to people who love this genre of novels. The author has done a great job at describing his characters, designing the world, and setting the vibes for each scene. The characters are not doing stuff for hidden reasons that make no sense when they are revealed and I love Mr. Hayashi's dream of his son marrying an idol and the little shrine for TWICE and BLACKPINK.
The writing style is mature and orderly... I like how the author developed his characters and how they react to situations in a realistic manner. Just as the author gave the MC a drive or purpose that will help him grow as a character as the story progresses. The world-building is well-thought-out, and the pace is neither too slow nor too fast... It's perfectly balanced.
The writing style is mature and well organized... I like how the author fleshed out his character and how they respond to situations in a realistic way. Just like how the author gave the MC a drive or purpose that will build his character along with the story. The world-building is well thought out and the pacing is neither slow nor fast... it's well balanced.
Very good book, it's very cool and interesting. will read more once I get my free time. Really recommend it for people to read (⌐■-■)(⌐■-■)(⌐■-■)
Gaia shouldn't have been killed. That was very sad. But I understand that this was necessary as a trigger to arouse the MC's desire for conquering the world by making use of his system. Maybe, everything was programmed by the system so that he underwent a major personality change, who knows... Be that as it may, this romance has been pretty good so far and I hope the MC isn't traumatized when relating to future women.
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The Story is clear and very enjoyable. The reason i gave one off is because the MC is written with hesitation but otherwise its a wonderful story! I recommend a read.
I can guarantee this novel is good it starts off with a banger and slowly introduces you to the main plot. The characters have enough motivation, and the system aspect is just too unique to miss out on. 👍
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When I read this novel I could see that the novel is has been created with a great deal of effort. The characters are explained very well and you can visuals exactly what is needed to understand what is going on. You are able to understand the characters reason for doing certain things this makes the reader able to understand what the character is going through. The system is very well implemented and helps lead the main character along without distracting from the story. I would highly recommend this novel for anyone that enjoys a well written novel with a great story.
The story features seem quite interesting. The system points towards sci-fi while the other stuff can be fantasy. it's rare seeing a mix of the two, so that's neet
This book is amazing. Great character development. You can feel the way the MC thinks. Author has really written a master piece here. It is simply a work of art! Author, please don't drop this novel. ALL I WANT IS MORE!!!
a very interesting and fun story, but will there be a loving couple? ..........................................................................................................................................
A unique story. Different from any other book you've ever read. A story of pain, loss, and absolute world domination. Civilization system will blow your mind.
The story itself is very interesting, the idea is fresh and It had premise. I wish to see the direction the author goes with. It is still early to tell but best of luck. Cheers!
The book is very very good, not just the story itself, but the writing quality as well. It starts off on a sad yet intriguing that lets you know what the MC is like and how he used to be, but then it changes up quite drastically and quickly and it is a very good story. I would not pass this one up! Give it a chance and promise you will not be disappointed! Keep up the good work, author!👏
Great Story till now. Let's see how it goes. :)..........................................................................................................
the pacing of the plot is quite rushed, especially at the start, and the amount of explanation behind the mc's power growth isnt... my ideal? so this isn't a perfect story. however, the characters and plot somehow sucked me in, and i fell in love with this story! so, that is how i got here, In just 2 and a half days i have read through all 95 chapters. (hey, i might be an addict haha) i also really enjoyed the bits of philosophy about life sprinked through this story and the end where the author talks a bit about his life. hope you will be doing better, man. :)
pregnant after both of them losing their virginity? not impossible, but she showed signs in less then 12 hours? stupid! he got over Gaia's death way too easily to have actual seemed like he cared for her. so may loop holes in logic that I could never enjoy this novel myself
Spoiler de révélation Honest reviews are here.. [Spoiler Alert] I also started reading the novel after reading this novel synopsis.. Seriously, the synopsis is quite attractive and makes the story seem different from other novel.. But it is not.. In the early chapter, you already feel the rushing of the story.. His parent death.. He got into an orphanage and got bullying some of the guys.. The reason for his bully? Because he is still in shock after the death of his parents, which had happened right in front of his own eyes, and basically, he ignores everyone around him.. And there he meets some girl who is doing to be his loves one.. Then, after a few years, he going to be 18 years old with his loves one and planning their future.. Then, his girlfriend got taken away in front of him, and he can't do anything because of he to weak against yakuza group.. Then, his loves one got r*ped and killed by them.. His thirst for revenge made him awaken the system.. First of all, there is no superpower in this novel.. Only high-tech.. So, I am quite disappointed, which I thought there going to be some superpower, cultivation or anything like that.. The first thing he does is tell the bully on the orphanage.. Well, he got along with that guy after a few years, he lived together on an orphanage.. Then, he also tells his lawyers about his system.. So, the story is quite boringgggg after that.. After reading a few more chapters, I no longer continue the novel.. It really not my cup of tea..
This novel isn't for me. The MC is stupid with no common sense with a focus on getting revenge. Like every other paragraph MC will say something about revenge. Then every other paragraph MC will talk about why MC didn't get a army or some OP ability for free with no effort when in real life any normal person would not even think about get an army or whatever OP from the start an just be grateful with what they got. I really don't know how this got many 5 star reviews. Though the writing quality is great, while there are many chapters which are long enough to my liking. Still I can't read this anymore.
I don't know what to say but good job author. Maybe you can't draw MC and other character emotion smoothly but at least i still can feel it with my own imagination. Interesting premise with foreboding system' betrayal, but please you can't make it more obvious.
A strong start, and an intricately-designed system that is not designed to be too cryptic. The way Japan is portrayed is also good enough as a fan of Japanese media myself. Will look forward to what happens next.
The story starts off with his parents dying in a car crash and he’s taken into and orphanage where he spends 12 years. Once he is 18 he and his best friend who he has a crush on leave the orphanage and are about to start their college life but while they are walking down the street she gets kidnapped, raped, and killed. He gets very mad and awakens a system which is a very basic plot and really no time to get attached to the people who died but I could get passed that. What was really got me was the system and world. The world is Earth which is kinda boring. The system is very boring at first it gave him a ton of options about what magiktech to base his system on but when he selected one he wanted it said access denied same happened until he got the A.I one. Why wright all of those systems when he could only get one from the start. There were so many more interesting options as well like nano tech or if he wanted to build a city Terran magiktech. Overall cool idea but bad execution
Spoiler de révélation Nice concept, but maybe you can add some interaction in the conversation, like.. "Good morning sir." Someone said as they waved to your MC.
It's a little fast paced in my opinion especially at the beginning. He doesn't have any attachment to his family figures and it seems a bit forced. The system is introduced too suddenly. Otherwise it's a very interesting concept. I put it in my library
The start is good but, the emotional aspect feels flat. Conveying the emotions at the start of novel can be a bit tough but, it's a bit more flat. The story is good but the time gapes aren't separated properly. When the girl is killed at the start, I can't connect to them. You can use some more spacing in paragraphs. Ultimately... it's good. The syatem is elaborate and very interesting. A good read for now.
Amazing! Another story from my most favourite author. It even started well this time. The start for this story is totally amazing. I like the synopsis too. It's simple and short. I am looking forward to more releases.
A dark, suspenseful and well-written story. Every chapter constantly keeps me on my toes, and I can feel the character's pain and frustration. Best of luck with your story [img=recommend]
I recommend this novel to people who love this genre of novels. The author has done a great job at describing his characters, designing the world, and setting the vibes for each scene. The characters are not doing stuff for hidden reasons that make no sense when they are revealed and I love Mr. Hayashi's dream of his son marrying an idol and the little shrine for TWICE and BLACKPINK.
The writing style is mature and orderly... I like how the author developed his characters and how they react to situations in a realistic manner. Just as the author gave the MC a drive or purpose that will help him grow as a character as the story progresses. The world-building is well-thought-out, and the pace is neither too slow nor too fast... It's perfectly balanced.
The writing style is mature and well organized... I like how the author fleshed out his character and how they respond to situations in a realistic way. Just like how the author gave the MC a drive or purpose that will build his character along with the story. The world-building is well thought out and the pacing is neither slow nor fast... it's well balanced.
Very good book, it's very cool and interesting. will read more once I get my free time. Really recommend it for people to read (⌐■-■)(⌐■-■)(⌐■-■)
Gaia shouldn't have been killed. That was very sad. But I understand that this was necessary as a trigger to arouse the MC's desire for conquering the world by making use of his system. Maybe, everything was programmed by the system so that he underwent a major personality change, who knows... Be that as it may, this romance has been pretty good so far and I hope the MC isn't traumatized when relating to future women.
Spoiler de révélation The Story is clear and very enjoyable. The reason i gave one off is because the MC is written with hesitation but otherwise its a wonderful story! I recommend a read.
I can guarantee this novel is good it starts off with a banger and slowly introduces you to the main plot. The characters have enough motivation, and the system aspect is just too unique to miss out on. 👍
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When I read this novel I could see that the novel is has been created with a great deal of effort. The characters are explained very well and you can visuals exactly what is needed to understand what is going on. You are able to understand the characters reason for doing certain things this makes the reader able to understand what the character is going through. The system is very well implemented and helps lead the main character along without distracting from the story. I would highly recommend this novel for anyone that enjoys a well written novel with a great story.
The story features seem quite interesting. The system points towards sci-fi while the other stuff can be fantasy. it's rare seeing a mix of the two, so that's neet
This book is amazing. Great character development. You can feel the way the MC thinks. Author has really written a master piece here. It is simply a work of art! Author, please don't drop this novel. ALL I WANT IS MORE!!!
a very interesting and fun story, but will there be a loving couple? ..........................................................................................................................................
A unique story. Different from any other book you've ever read. A story of pain, loss, and absolute world domination. Civilization system will blow your mind.
The story itself is very interesting, the idea is fresh and It had premise. I wish to see the direction the author goes with. It is still early to tell but best of luck. Cheers!
The book is very very good, not just the story itself, but the writing quality as well. It starts off on a sad yet intriguing that lets you know what the MC is like and how he used to be, but then it changes up quite drastically and quickly and it is a very good story. I would not pass this one up! Give it a chance and promise you will not be disappointed! Keep up the good work, author!👏
Great Story till now. Let's see how it goes. :)..........................................................................................................
the pacing of the plot is quite rushed, especially at the start, and the amount of explanation behind the mc's power growth isnt... my ideal? so this isn't a perfect story. however, the characters and plot somehow sucked me in, and i fell in love with this story! so, that is how i got here, In just 2 and a half days i have read through all 95 chapters. (hey, i might be an addict haha) i also really enjoyed the bits of philosophy about life sprinked through this story and the end where the author talks a bit about his life. hope you will be doing better, man. :)