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I gave myself 3 stars because I know I'm not that good but I do improve. For those who skip the description. There is one love interests Mina as expected. This is a fanfic of BNHA with Kirishima waking with memories of a past life having watched BNHA, his character doesn't have a big change in personality since it's not really reincarnation but more like watered transmigration only being more spirited than before. If you don't like that there's little change in his character's personality then I'm sorry. He will interact with Izuku if you think that is forced then ready any other fanfic, he does help but not to the point of "simping" over the boy as someone commented previously. Writing wise my grammar has improved of course there are small mistakes that crack through but it doesn't ruin immersion. The story will trend along the lines of cannon nothing will change in the beginning but will come later make things exciting. I'm doing my best and will take kind criticism. If you have any question you can ask here.
I think the mc has good potential and that his love interest Mina is also good I believe the author got their personalities good and it's quite informative as well and you have good grammar and hopefully you have a schedule released date so you do not get burned put and Incase you are doing something eles you can just release some. And I am glad the author is not doing harem bbecausethat would kill the story. I like it how the author is making 0
It's a good story, with the kind of protagonist that one wants to see in an Isekai anime (good hearted, intelligent, with a strong will and with charisma for the characters and the readers). Despite not being a harem (personal preference), the protagonist's romantic relationship is touching, captivating and exciting, managing to bring out one's love for romance. The development is canon-oriented (which is appreciated), and despite including OC characters, they are well included and fit in harmoniously with the story. The best is that the character manages to become strong by his own power, training and developing it to become stronger, not through an OP system or powers from other sources. Despite being a great fanfic that I recommend reading if you want to have a good time with a story of transmigrators, it has some flaws that I list below: 1. The author makes a few grammar mistakes (not so many like other writers). 2. The plot is to centered in the mc and his love interest, not letting other characters have prominence and development, leaving them as extras. 3. The story has been paused, and will likely not continue, leaving it as an undeveloped fanfic.
So man, when are you going to write this story again, it’s really good. ............................................. ...............................................
A great story for anyone who likes Kirishima. Even though someone transmigrated into him his personality is pretty much the same, so don’t think there is some weirdo in his body. This story takes Kirishima’s powers to the next level.
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This story is more like having future knowledge than past life memories / reincarnated. And mc behaviour irritates me.
MC is a bit too much like the original character.. i get that it wasnt a stolen body but just his next life but really it was just like the original with knowledge of the future, and he just isnt a very interesting character.
I really liked this alot hope to see you continue this story i see that you updated it last month but haven't post much more if you could give a update about the story that would be great
This is a decent story, author just needs to work on writing or get an editor, this has potential to be one of the greats (In the MHA fandom at least), keep it up your getting better, Anyway hope everyone has a good day/night!
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Le doy 5 estrellas porque me gustó como va todo, el interés amoroso me parece bien, estaría bien que se profundice un poco más en más relaciones personales del protagonista o algunos eventos pequeños que enriquezcan al personaje, no tiene que ser complicado, pueden ser cosas simples.
Tienes una buena historia aqui. Me gusto mucho. Espero q no se interrumpa y la actualices periodicamente. [img=recommend] Gracias x tan excelente historia
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A great story with fantastic potential. The most pressing issues are the grammar and the character name. Throughout the whole story, the author has people call him Eijiro Eijirou instead of Eijirou Kirishima
I love it. I've always wanted to see a fanfic that has Kirishima or at least someone with the same quirk as the mc. But bro please gimme more chapters!! And don't you dare drop it.
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Pretty good but pls put MHA tag I thought it was interesting because kirishima was mc
I'm probably not rating this story properly but I kind of dont care. The chapter where kirishima fights against the USJ nomu is probably in my top 10 of all time. I regularly come back to reread this just for that one chapter. I dont even care if this story never gets an update again as long as it isnt deleted. The rest is good I guess.
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I like the idea how the quirk works and how he's incorporated martial arts I hope in the future he makes his own techniques or something the only problem is the amount of typos just look past those and it's a decent FF
I've read until the end off USJ Incident (ch 10) and so far there are a lot of things that made me stopped reading. -Him being in Kirishima's body never made a huge impact on Kirishima as a character. There's only one way to justify this although it's stupid and lazy, the MC having the same copy of personality as Kirishima would explain that. -The MC being pretentious, the only reason he's helping Izuku is because he knows Izuku's the MC and the chosen one for OFA. Kirishima in canon never bothered to help Izuku so early in the story, in fact, he's actually closer to Bakugo which is crazy to think about. -Kirishima's optimism in the manga is not annoying but the MC tries too hard and instead makes it more annoying. It's a bit nitpicky but yelling along with Present Mic is something he doesn't do, atleast alone then he had the audacity to be embarassed when he's being over the top. He's just seeking attention at that point. -I don't know if this continues on the latest chapters but you tend to skip significant events such as when Shigaraki broke down the UA's gate so a reader was confused when Aizawa made a reference to that when it was not mentioned or atleast not properly explained. -His interaction with Izuku is definitely forced and doesn't seem geniune when he's still the same as Kirishima in the manga. Allmight letting Kirishima in the secret also seems very forced, you mean to tell me that Aizawa or the other UA staff doesn't know about the secret but Kirishima was accepted? -Him being surprised at the Nurse's quirk when it was explained in the anime. Why is he surprised?
i very much like this story as it got me hook as soon as i started reading it. its also about one of my fav mha characters and the way you have developed it and fleshed out his quick more then just hardening and explained more about what it entails is amazing.
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Fanfic on how to suck Midoriya's balls, you should even have a manual because 2 out of 3 MHA fanfics suck Midoriya's balls until they shine 🤦 .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
grammar could be fixed a lil, but it's readable unlike CN's/MTL's. update is a bit inconsistent, so that was 4 stars. story development, 4 stars. character design, i like the fact its a kirishima transmigration, and he's actually gonna be dealt justice and be strong. overall 4.2 stars, just more chapters needed
it's it's great story and I can definitely recommend since the characters feel great and the writing is well above website average but alas it's Harem so I'm just gonna leave...
Read until at least chapter nine, as that is where the quality improves. The memories actually make an inpact of kirishima, there is more punctuation, the characters are getting more fleshed out with the chapters progressing through, and there are less spelling errors. A thorough edit may be needed, but with good enough plot it’ll stick.
I gave myself 3 stars because I know I'm not that good but I do improve. For those who skip the description. There is one love interests Mina as expected. This is a fanfic of BNHA with Kirishima waking with memories of a past life having watched BNHA, his character doesn't have a big change in personality since it's not really reincarnation but more like watered transmigration only being more spirited than before. If you don't like that there's little change in his character's personality then I'm sorry. He will interact with Izuku if you think that is forced then ready any other fanfic, he does help but not to the point of "simping" over the boy as someone commented previously. Writing wise my grammar has improved of course there are small mistakes that crack through but it doesn't ruin immersion. The story will trend along the lines of cannon nothing will change in the beginning but will come later make things exciting. I'm doing my best and will take kind criticism. If you have any question you can ask here.
I think the mc has good potential and that his love interest Mina is also good I believe the author got their personalities good and it's quite informative as well and you have good grammar and hopefully you have a schedule released date so you do not get burned put and Incase you are doing something eles you can just release some. And I am glad the author is not doing harem bbecausethat would kill the story. I like it how the author is making 0
It's a good story, with the kind of protagonist that one wants to see in an Isekai anime (good hearted, intelligent, with a strong will and with charisma for the characters and the readers). Despite not being a harem (personal preference), the protagonist's romantic relationship is touching, captivating and exciting, managing to bring out one's love for romance. The development is canon-oriented (which is appreciated), and despite including OC characters, they are well included and fit in harmoniously with the story. The best is that the character manages to become strong by his own power, training and developing it to become stronger, not through an OP system or powers from other sources. Despite being a great fanfic that I recommend reading if you want to have a good time with a story of transmigrators, it has some flaws that I list below: 1. The author makes a few grammar mistakes (not so many like other writers). 2. The plot is to centered in the mc and his love interest, not letting other characters have prominence and development, leaving them as extras. 3. The story has been paused, and will likely not continue, leaving it as an undeveloped fanfic.
So man, when are you going to write this story again, it’s really good. ............................................. ...............................................
A great story for anyone who likes Kirishima. Even though someone transmigrated into him his personality is pretty much the same, so don’t think there is some weirdo in his body. This story takes Kirishima’s powers to the next level.
Spoiler de révélation This story is more like having future knowledge than past life memories / reincarnated. And mc behaviour irritates me.
MC is a bit too much like the original character.. i get that it wasnt a stolen body but just his next life but really it was just like the original with knowledge of the future, and he just isnt a very interesting character.
I really liked this alot hope to see you continue this story i see that you updated it last month but haven't post much more if you could give a update about the story that would be great
This is a decent story, author just needs to work on writing or get an editor, this has potential to be one of the greats (In the MHA fandom at least), keep it up your getting better, Anyway hope everyone has a good day/night!
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Le doy 5 estrellas porque me gustó como va todo, el interés amoroso me parece bien, estaría bien que se profundice un poco más en más relaciones personales del protagonista o algunos eventos pequeños que enriquezcan al personaje, no tiene que ser complicado, pueden ser cosas simples.
Tienes una buena historia aqui. Me gusto mucho. Espero q no se interrumpa y la actualices periodicamente. [img=recommend] Gracias x tan excelente historia
Spoiler de révélation A great story with fantastic potential. The most pressing issues are the grammar and the character name. Throughout the whole story, the author has people call him Eijiro Eijirou instead of Eijirou Kirishima
I love it. I've always wanted to see a fanfic that has Kirishima or at least someone with the same quirk as the mc. But bro please gimme more chapters!! And don't you dare drop it.
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Pretty good but pls put MHA tag I thought it was interesting because kirishima was mc
I'm probably not rating this story properly but I kind of dont care. The chapter where kirishima fights against the USJ nomu is probably in my top 10 of all time. I regularly come back to reread this just for that one chapter. I dont even care if this story never gets an update again as long as it isnt deleted. The rest is good I guess.
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I like the idea how the quirk works and how he's incorporated martial arts I hope in the future he makes his own techniques or something the only problem is the amount of typos just look past those and it's a decent FF
I've read until the end off USJ Incident (ch 10) and so far there are a lot of things that made me stopped reading. -Him being in Kirishima's body never made a huge impact on Kirishima as a character. There's only one way to justify this although it's stupid and lazy, the MC having the same copy of personality as Kirishima would explain that. -The MC being pretentious, the only reason he's helping Izuku is because he knows Izuku's the MC and the chosen one for OFA. Kirishima in canon never bothered to help Izuku so early in the story, in fact, he's actually closer to Bakugo which is crazy to think about. -Kirishima's optimism in the manga is not annoying but the MC tries too hard and instead makes it more annoying. It's a bit nitpicky but yelling along with Present Mic is something he doesn't do, atleast alone then he had the audacity to be embarassed when he's being over the top. He's just seeking attention at that point. -I don't know if this continues on the latest chapters but you tend to skip significant events such as when Shigaraki broke down the UA's gate so a reader was confused when Aizawa made a reference to that when it was not mentioned or atleast not properly explained. -His interaction with Izuku is definitely forced and doesn't seem geniune when he's still the same as Kirishima in the manga. Allmight letting Kirishima in the secret also seems very forced, you mean to tell me that Aizawa or the other UA staff doesn't know about the secret but Kirishima was accepted? -Him being surprised at the Nurse's quirk when it was explained in the anime. Why is he surprised?
i very much like this story as it got me hook as soon as i started reading it. its also about one of my fav mha characters and the way you have developed it and fleshed out his quick more then just hardening and explained more about what it entails is amazing.
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Fanfic on how to suck Midoriya's balls, you should even have a manual because 2 out of 3 MHA fanfics suck Midoriya's balls until they shine 🤦 .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................
grammar could be fixed a lil, but it's readable unlike CN's/MTL's. update is a bit inconsistent, so that was 4 stars. story development, 4 stars. character design, i like the fact its a kirishima transmigration, and he's actually gonna be dealt justice and be strong. overall 4.2 stars, just more chapters needed
it's it's great story and I can definitely recommend since the characters feel great and the writing is well above website average but alas it's Harem so I'm just gonna leave...
Read until at least chapter nine, as that is where the quality improves. The memories actually make an inpact of kirishima, there is more punctuation, the characters are getting more fleshed out with the chapters progressing through, and there are less spelling errors. A thorough edit may be needed, but with good enough plot it’ll stick.