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This story has potential but I feel like you are making the mc too childish I understand he lost his memorie but he only lost the ones of him before becoming a god for someone who lived for millenniums he acts childish. Also the story gets quite boring I don’t know why I usually like stories like these but I have gotten bored reading this one. Hes was once a god but doesn’t understand that if he wants to live a free life he has to be strong but no you made him lazy in this aspect because he doesn’t want to cultivate.
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I'll rate this 5 star as of now since we only have a few chap it's hard to judge this novel but the plot is interesting makes me want to read more, story wise this novel is definitely good well for me, and i rate this novel a 5 star since I Don't to rate it low. well it might change if the novel has more chaps btw author does your novel contains harem( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
It's great! Reccomended ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
Let me tell y'all, I loved the main character, Yu! The premise itself is very interesting however because it looked like it started out in the middle, it lacks impact. But you did a great job author by drawing us to the story. I'll keep this short coz my eyes are straining but I can tell it's a great read for sure. adding it to the library gonna come back later hehe
Really love the premise. The world building is really thought out and carefully done. The grammar is good, so I did not have to waste braincells trying to understand what author is saying. Yu tian is also a very likeable and comical character, which made the story easy to engage with. Overall, the author did a great job with this one. Keep it up Author!
wrting quality - good to no grmatcal errors story development - just the right pace. all were explained and nothing rush character design - all characters r fleshed out. the only thing that gets me is the mc's desinterest and boredom to vrything except women. he killed himself from being a god to escape eternal boredom but still ends up bored in the lower planes. lol😂 update stability - too early to tell but form WN views, the update s rather slow. i guess its to make up for the quality of writing 👍 world background - nothing much to say at this point and vrything was explained. its a good take of a rebirth cultivation trope and a must read for those who love the genre 👍
this was what i got from the synopsis.......................................................................................................
story on point with the title, nice turn of event, and a new story line which does not repeat it self like other cultivation novel, good plot and great story
It's good. Nice writing and lots of potential. I think the mc not wanting to cultivate in the beginning is a bit forced but otherwise I like it so far.
The writing technique and the description of each scene are excellent! The plot is also well organized, though the chapters are very long. But you have done great in entertaining the readers. I highly recommend this book to new readers, and it's worth reading!
Well…the novel is quite good…writing is also good, first time reading this kind of novel….A new concept…will be waiting for more chapters….🥰🥰🥰
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It is an interesting premise but lacks impact. *Writing Quality: It's a great usage of English; almost no typos, great distribution of paragraphs, 5/5. *Stability of Updates: Since it's new, gonna give it 5/5. *Story Development: Moving steadily though with not a definite objective; MC stopped being a god because he was 'bored' and also because he didn't want to be a virgin, but going through such a path is going to draw him across precisely the same path he had gone through before, 4/5. *Character Design: It's well described; clothing descriptions, a brief of MC's mentality; there are varieties of characters and not everyone is a woman; they're all properly described, the relationships between them are coherent with one another, but even then, MC's ambitions are rather lacking for the kind of individual he's supposed to be to have reached the altitude he did, although I believe this is a point for comedy, I can't stop taking it as an incoherence. 3/5. *World Background: It lacks several points of scenery description such as the majesty of the God Realm where he was or the nimble mortal realm; but quite decent, 4/5. My personal issue is that he has reached the point of God Hood, having lived for long before finally entering the God Realm; perhaps a few thousand years minimum living in whatever realm before eventually entering the Realm of The Gods. Yet he's a virgin... when you see a God that's virgin; it's because he wants to be... now he's being sent to a world to repeat exactly the same progress from before, just that this time he won't be virgin... it lessens the original premise considerably as the title alone is enough to draw people in; you'd assume he has already lived through everything and he's just bored, but that's not the case... he doesn't showcase the personality of someone that has already gone through such a life. Once again I understand it's for comedy purposes, but it doesn't sit well with me (subjective opinion) Still, the story is in an early stage to judge further. Best Regards!
interesting characters, good worldbuilding, and great character styles. to take a concept of God and turn it into a boring life of a warrior who became a god was certainly a great concept. I mean you can't make someone who has spent all their lives fighting just sit and get bored. the chaps were long which wasn't a bad thing cuz I wasn't overwhelmed by it. all in all a great read 10/10
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The book is still new but the world that is being made is phenomenal. The details paint a vivid picture that fully draw you into the story, unlike a lot of cultivation novels I've read in the past. I'll definitely be looking forward to future chapters!
overall a good beginining will definitely be back I usually wouldnt reccomend something with so few chapters but definitely worth the read. If you are looking for a good story written in english this is it.
I have only read one chapter but i am definitely gonna read more. I Feel like a lot of people would react like this if they achieved all they had wanted they would probably feel empty afterwards. Cos super rich people say that money isnt enough but while you’re poor you always want more money(of course) very relatable to real life if this was real i Like it good job!
Although I read only the first chapter, I still want to give a five star to the author since it has an attractive story that might lure any cultivation novel fans. At the start, the story is slow but as it progresses, it gets interesting and I'm sure it'll get better in next chapters too. That's why, I can say for sure that the story has potential and has a quality in its content which is understandable for every reader. I personally love it. The nature of the minor god, Yu Tian and his boredom in the divine realm due to nothing exciting happening there. People are just gathering meetings every 200 years and the environment was so peaceful that it never had any tension for him to feel alive. That's why, he's trying to descend to the lower realms and find fun to his life. Maybe even meaning and the concept of getting a girlfriend is just a surface level goal but in actuality, there are bigger things to play.. So, I'm actually enjoying it. author, good job. I don't have any complaints over the quality, vocabulary or grammatical errors. Everything is point on. Keep it up and I'll keep reading it if I have free time....
This is good work, it's very descriptive and I can comprehend it very well. I like how the MC is actually bored of being a good cause most Mc's wanted to level up or smth so I find him quite unique. But what's very pleasing in this book is that the author leaves tidbits of information like meaning of their names and some other things. The writing quality is good and just three chapters in and I find it fascinating, especially that the chapters are long XD.
Now that's what we call interesting. A God who escaped from nine heaven reincarnated as a mortal baby, the whole god community chasing him especially the creation god. So far the story's engaging and enjoyable, can't wait for the next chapter.
Amazingly written with great grammar. I can't say much about characters and worldbuilding yet but the subtext within already gave me enough that this is an expansive and multi dimensional characters
From the title alone, the Author had to answer the foremost question: why is godhood boring? After reading the available chapters, there are some interesting points that could be further elaborated as the story progresses. The difficulty of the thematic dilema this story wants to tackle is quite steep. Nonetheless if the author solves these issues, the novel will definitely be great!
This is a start to a story that I expect to be full of complications. An immortal god trying to do the things mortals do is not a new concept, but I am willing to take in fresh takes on that concept.
Very interesting premise, curious to see how this goes! The introduction of the characters is done well, and not sinking into any immediate cliches for a cultivation novel is worthy of praise. Will keep reading if the author keeps it updated!
Hi everyone, author here. Please comment and provide feedback to me so I can keep improving. I'm mainly looking to popularize this book and gain a larger following. If you guys would like this story to stay free with consistent updates, please help by donating powerstones so I can get more exposure and whatnot. Enjoy the story.
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This story has potential but I feel like you are making the mc too childish I understand he lost his memorie but he only lost the ones of him before becoming a god for someone who lived for millenniums he acts childish. Also the story gets quite boring I don’t know why I usually like stories like these but I have gotten bored reading this one. Hes was once a god but doesn’t understand that if he wants to live a free life he has to be strong but no you made him lazy in this aspect because he doesn’t want to cultivate.
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I'll rate this 5 star as of now since we only have a few chap it's hard to judge this novel but the plot is interesting makes me want to read more, story wise this novel is definitely good well for me, and i rate this novel a 5 star since I Don't to rate it low. well it might change if the novel has more chaps btw author does your novel contains harem( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
It's great! Reccomended ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
Let me tell y'all, I loved the main character, Yu! The premise itself is very interesting however because it looked like it started out in the middle, it lacks impact. But you did a great job author by drawing us to the story. I'll keep this short coz my eyes are straining but I can tell it's a great read for sure. adding it to the library gonna come back later hehe
Really love the premise. The world building is really thought out and carefully done. The grammar is good, so I did not have to waste braincells trying to understand what author is saying. Yu tian is also a very likeable and comical character, which made the story easy to engage with. Overall, the author did a great job with this one. Keep it up Author!
wrting quality - good to no grmatcal errors story development - just the right pace. all were explained and nothing rush character design - all characters r fleshed out. the only thing that gets me is the mc's desinterest and boredom to vrything except women. he killed himself from being a god to escape eternal boredom but still ends up bored in the lower planes. lol😂 update stability - too early to tell but form WN views, the update s rather slow. i guess its to make up for the quality of writing 👍 world background - nothing much to say at this point and vrything was explained. its a good take of a rebirth cultivation trope and a must read for those who love the genre 👍
this was what i got from the synopsis.......................................................................................................
story on point with the title, nice turn of event, and a new story line which does not repeat it self like other cultivation novel, good plot and great story
It's good. Nice writing and lots of potential. I think the mc not wanting to cultivate in the beginning is a bit forced but otherwise I like it so far.
The writing technique and the description of each scene are excellent! The plot is also well organized, though the chapters are very long. But you have done great in entertaining the readers. I highly recommend this book to new readers, and it's worth reading!
Well…the novel is quite good…writing is also good, first time reading this kind of novel….A new concept…will be waiting for more chapters….🥰🥰🥰
Spoiler de révélation It is an interesting premise but lacks impact. *Writing Quality: It's a great usage of English; almost no typos, great distribution of paragraphs, 5/5. *Stability of Updates: Since it's new, gonna give it 5/5. *Story Development: Moving steadily though with not a definite objective; MC stopped being a god because he was 'bored' and also because he didn't want to be a virgin, but going through such a path is going to draw him across precisely the same path he had gone through before, 4/5. *Character Design: It's well described; clothing descriptions, a brief of MC's mentality; there are varieties of characters and not everyone is a woman; they're all properly described, the relationships between them are coherent with one another, but even then, MC's ambitions are rather lacking for the kind of individual he's supposed to be to have reached the altitude he did, although I believe this is a point for comedy, I can't stop taking it as an incoherence. 3/5. *World Background: It lacks several points of scenery description such as the majesty of the God Realm where he was or the nimble mortal realm; but quite decent, 4/5. My personal issue is that he has reached the point of God Hood, having lived for long before finally entering the God Realm; perhaps a few thousand years minimum living in whatever realm before eventually entering the Realm of The Gods. Yet he's a virgin... when you see a God that's virgin; it's because he wants to be... now he's being sent to a world to repeat exactly the same progress from before, just that this time he won't be virgin... it lessens the original premise considerably as the title alone is enough to draw people in; you'd assume he has already lived through everything and he's just bored, but that's not the case... he doesn't showcase the personality of someone that has already gone through such a life. Once again I understand it's for comedy purposes, but it doesn't sit well with me (subjective opinion) Still, the story is in an early stage to judge further. Best Regards!
interesting characters, good worldbuilding, and great character styles. to take a concept of God and turn it into a boring life of a warrior who became a god was certainly a great concept. I mean you can't make someone who has spent all their lives fighting just sit and get bored. the chaps were long which wasn't a bad thing cuz I wasn't overwhelmed by it. all in all a great read 10/10
Spoiler de révélation The book is still new but the world that is being made is phenomenal. The details paint a vivid picture that fully draw you into the story, unlike a lot of cultivation novels I've read in the past. I'll definitely be looking forward to future chapters!
overall a good beginining will definitely be back I usually wouldnt reccomend something with so few chapters but definitely worth the read. If you are looking for a good story written in english this is it.
I have only read one chapter but i am definitely gonna read more. I Feel like a lot of people would react like this if they achieved all they had wanted they would probably feel empty afterwards. Cos super rich people say that money isnt enough but while you’re poor you always want more money(of course) very relatable to real life if this was real i Like it good job!
Although I read only the first chapter, I still want to give a five star to the author since it has an attractive story that might lure any cultivation novel fans. At the start, the story is slow but as it progresses, it gets interesting and I'm sure it'll get better in next chapters too. That's why, I can say for sure that the story has potential and has a quality in its content which is understandable for every reader. I personally love it. The nature of the minor god, Yu Tian and his boredom in the divine realm due to nothing exciting happening there. People are just gathering meetings every 200 years and the environment was so peaceful that it never had any tension for him to feel alive. That's why, he's trying to descend to the lower realms and find fun to his life. Maybe even meaning and the concept of getting a girlfriend is just a surface level goal but in actuality, there are bigger things to play.. So, I'm actually enjoying it. author, good job. I don't have any complaints over the quality, vocabulary or grammatical errors. Everything is point on. Keep it up and I'll keep reading it if I have free time....
This is good work, it's very descriptive and I can comprehend it very well. I like how the MC is actually bored of being a good cause most Mc's wanted to level up or smth so I find him quite unique. But what's very pleasing in this book is that the author leaves tidbits of information like meaning of their names and some other things. The writing quality is good and just three chapters in and I find it fascinating, especially that the chapters are long XD.
Now that's what we call interesting. A God who escaped from nine heaven reincarnated as a mortal baby, the whole god community chasing him especially the creation god. So far the story's engaging and enjoyable, can't wait for the next chapter.
Amazingly written with great grammar. I can't say much about characters and worldbuilding yet but the subtext within already gave me enough that this is an expansive and multi dimensional characters
From the title alone, the Author had to answer the foremost question: why is godhood boring? After reading the available chapters, there are some interesting points that could be further elaborated as the story progresses. The difficulty of the thematic dilema this story wants to tackle is quite steep. Nonetheless if the author solves these issues, the novel will definitely be great!
This is a start to a story that I expect to be full of complications. An immortal god trying to do the things mortals do is not a new concept, but I am willing to take in fresh takes on that concept.
Very interesting premise, curious to see how this goes! The introduction of the characters is done well, and not sinking into any immediate cliches for a cultivation novel is worthy of praise. Will keep reading if the author keeps it updated!