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Please More This Book Is Doing Good So Far so I will Give power Stones Please don't stop this is such a unique idea oh a new idea you should is add some of the moves of Baki in there if you run out of ideas
try writing more dialogue in your story as its just the character narrating the things that happened and the time skip was too much and the details are too little the character development is to forced you should add some conflict so that the story is not just another op character story or if it is an op character story add more interaction between the mc and the other character in the story.
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the writhing style is a bit lacklustre but since I sometimes read mtl i don't really mind it. I just believe when he recreated the 2 of the 6 rokushiki technique's he should have tried to recreate them all even if he didn't plan to master all of them. its a waste opportunity/potential.
Please More This Book Is Doing Good So Far so I will Give power Stones Please don't stop this is such a unique idea oh a new idea you should is add some of the moves of Baki in there if you run out of ideas
try writing more dialogue in your story as its just the character narrating the things that happened and the time skip was too much and the details are too little the character development is to forced you should add some conflict so that the story is not just another op character story or if it is an op character story add more interaction between the mc and the other character in the story.
moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
the writhing style is a bit lacklustre but since I sometimes read mtl i don't really mind it. I just believe when he recreated the 2 of the 6 rokushiki technique's he should have tried to recreate them all even if he didn't plan to master all of them. its a waste opportunity/potential.