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this happened to my buddy eric ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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Hard to judge how the story will develop. language wise its rather well written. The concept is good and his starting point is rather new. only negative points currently are the rather less likable mc and the system in a way. especially the bad luck debuff. Its a negative plot armor. good for story progression with less of a challenge for something new to happen. but since its always negative well...(fate bends against you)
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I've read all the chapters so far and enjoyed them. i just hope you dont drop this this. thanks for the read................................ also is he ever going to get his arm back
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looks good for now. Hopefully you will get him meet some people because just training and fighting monster will get boring soon. Other than that good job
DBZ at its finest simple story with clear rules, an ever increasing threat, fight after fight, flashbacks, and of course cliffhangers at each episode. A good read thank you.
It's really good. I like the main character. He seems like an actual real person who has been kidnapped and sent to a dangerous place like Dragon Ball.
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
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Honestly, it's to early to make a good review so I'm gonna keep it to the bare minimum. I'm liking it so far and I'm looking forward to future chapters of this book.
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this happened to my buddy eric ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
When new chapter?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
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Spoiler de révélation Hard to judge how the story will develop. language wise its rather well written. The concept is good and his starting point is rather new. only negative points currently are the rather less likable mc and the system in a way. especially the bad luck debuff. Its a negative plot armor. good for story progression with less of a challenge for something new to happen. but since its always negative well...(fate bends against you)
Spoiler de révélation I've read all the chapters so far and enjoyed them. i just hope you dont drop this this. thanks for the read................................ also is he ever going to get his arm back
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Spoiler de révélation looks good for now. Hopefully you will get him meet some people because just training and fighting monster will get boring soon. Other than that good job
DBZ at its finest simple story with clear rules, an ever increasing threat, fight after fight, flashbacks, and of course cliffhangers at each episode. A good read thank you.
It's really good. I like the main character. He seems like an actual real person who has been kidnapped and sent to a dangerous place like Dragon Ball.
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
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Honestly, it's to early to make a good review so I'm gonna keep it to the bare minimum. I'm liking it so far and I'm looking forward to future chapters of this book.
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