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it is ok i guess(?) but got some really weird stuffs... and i think that the story was lacking something. maybe because the author is still new. overall ok but not great.
Started great but fell later on especially with the whole time skip, a lot. Lost interest because of the armor thingy. So you get 2 rating for picking my interest at the start but lost it on the way.
Say hello to the one who... Hello!! Are we going to review this? Yes, we are!! Can we just give it 5-star and left? No!! But we just did... LOL!!
Good concept but bad execution. Before the 8 years time skip is is pretty but after that it becomes bad like it sucks seriously there are soo many missing stuff I am out
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who is the he going to pair up with? Yamanaka Ino? Hyuga Hinata? Sakura? I vote Ino.🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩
Frist 45 ch good after start becoming bad [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Honestly, the idea is good but the execution is bad (like most other fanfics). Root ninjas have little to no emotions, yet every ninja in this story is expressing them? Every root ninja gets curse seals planted on them, yet the MC doesnt? MC shows talent but he doesn’t get mind controlled? The author seems to forget Root is an organization that trains suicidal murder machines.
I love this fic it’s idea new and not copy paste like all naruto op mc with harem fiction’s out there and love interest yogato is good and underrated character
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novel very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
this one is a great fanfic book. GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE
There are going to be some spoilers here so just warning in advance. First of all, he added romance and I promised a bad review if he did. Usually I avoid romance, so it just wasted time. This stuff also has cliches, despite having a somewhat decent idea. He leaves root extremely quick, so what's the point? Also, mc meets this dud just for him to die a few chapters later. Am I really supposed to care about this guy who was mentioned like 3 times in the novel? Well the mc does. It's not like he doesn't know what danzo is all about.
I know I already wrote a review but this book deserve at least 4.90 in terms of rating, and the way the story is heading, I say that this story deserves more love! ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
Wonderful as always!ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
A lot of plot holes but still better then alot of naruto ff's i've read before not bad to pass the time keep up the good work author ........
not bad kid. not bad at all. a little op on the start because he is being trained by ambo . kakashi was only trained at the age of 12.[img=exp]
Don't drop this story please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺[img=update][img=update][img=update]
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I have to say, I really love this story, it shows the realistic side of the shinobi world where nothing is sunshines and rainbows, and I love that you showed the monstrous growth of Hakuto properly, where he earned his strength, and not just bs his way to power, and now that he is in Kumogakure, not only is he safe from op villains, he can also train to his heart's content, excited to see him when he's older, hopefully he has a summoning and learned sage art by the time he's grown up, snake style or frog style, if a knuckle head like Naruto can do it in 1 week, I'm sure young Hakuto can do it as well, and training to evolve both byakugan and sharingan, I'm glad, because I haven't read a fic where the mc has both, can't wait to read more!!
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Interesting idea, although to me despite getting my attention, all thst matters is who the love interest is. Please no OC or sakura 🤞 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++
novel very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
novel very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
Thank you so much, for this wonderful piece of art! Really loving the story, I don't know the path this story will take but I'm very excited to find out!
Spoiler de révélation This story is wonderful! Really happy I managed to read it, also author, if you plan to update your story cover, might I suggest this wonderful image. (it ain't mine, just found it on google and thought it looked perfect for your story :D)
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it is ok i guess(?) but got some really weird stuffs... and i think that the story was lacking something. maybe because the author is still new. overall ok but not great.
Started great but fell later on especially with the whole time skip, a lot. Lost interest because of the armor thingy. So you get 2 rating for picking my interest at the start but lost it on the way.
Say hello to the one who... Hello!! Are we going to review this? Yes, we are!! Can we just give it 5-star and left? No!! But we just did... LOL!!
Good concept but bad execution. Before the 8 years time skip is is pretty but after that it becomes bad like it sucks seriously there are soo many missing stuff I am out
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who is the he going to pair up with? Yamanaka Ino? Hyuga Hinata? Sakura? I vote Ino.🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩
Frist 45 ch good after start becoming bad [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Honestly, the idea is good but the execution is bad (like most other fanfics). Root ninjas have little to no emotions, yet every ninja in this story is expressing them? Every root ninja gets curse seals planted on them, yet the MC doesnt? MC shows talent but he doesn’t get mind controlled? The author seems to forget Root is an organization that trains suicidal murder machines.
I love this fic it’s idea new and not copy paste like all naruto op mc with harem fiction’s out there and love interest yogato is good and underrated character
Spoiler de révélation novel very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
this one is a great fanfic book. GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE GOOD STUFF HERE
There are going to be some spoilers here so just warning in advance. First of all, he added romance and I promised a bad review if he did. Usually I avoid romance, so it just wasted time. This stuff also has cliches, despite having a somewhat decent idea. He leaves root extremely quick, so what's the point? Also, mc meets this dud just for him to die a few chapters later. Am I really supposed to care about this guy who was mentioned like 3 times in the novel? Well the mc does. It's not like he doesn't know what danzo is all about.
I know I already wrote a review but this book deserve at least 4.90 in terms of rating, and the way the story is heading, I say that this story deserves more love! ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
Wonderful as always!ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
A lot of plot holes but still better then alot of naruto ff's i've read before not bad to pass the time keep up the good work author ........
not bad kid. not bad at all. a little op on the start because he is being trained by ambo . kakashi was only trained at the age of 12.[img=exp]
Don't drop this story please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺[img=update][img=update][img=update]
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I have to say, I really love this story, it shows the realistic side of the shinobi world where nothing is sunshines and rainbows, and I love that you showed the monstrous growth of Hakuto properly, where he earned his strength, and not just bs his way to power, and now that he is in Kumogakure, not only is he safe from op villains, he can also train to his heart's content, excited to see him when he's older, hopefully he has a summoning and learned sage art by the time he's grown up, snake style or frog style, if a knuckle head like Naruto can do it in 1 week, I'm sure young Hakuto can do it as well, and training to evolve both byakugan and sharingan, I'm glad, because I haven't read a fic where the mc has both, can't wait to read more!!
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Interesting idea, although to me despite getting my attention, all thst matters is who the love interest is. Please no OC or sakura 🤞 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++
novel very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
novel very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
Thank you so much, for this wonderful piece of art! Really loving the story, I don't know the path this story will take but I'm very excited to find out!
Spoiler de révélation This story is wonderful! Really happy I managed to read it, also author, if you plan to update your story cover, might I suggest this wonderful image. (it ain't mine, just found it on google and thought it looked perfect for your story :D)
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