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Writing quality is OK but Author uses to many flashbacks and force feeds the reader every small detail even the painful obvious things Autor-san explain where it would not have been necessary which is why I give 4 stars for writing quality. Story development ideas it problem especially at the later part of the story it feels often forced and unbelievable but Author-san passing is superb I really love it. Character so I really love the main character he feels fleshed out and alive so good job there and his self made characters are really good to. Sadly there is a really big but in all of my praise for his Characters and it is his he depicts the Conon characters in my opinion. Author-san makes them stronger without real cause. It I just said that they suddenly train more even if they already trained all the time in Canon. So for example with Sasuke Author tells us that he suddenly has more reason the become stronger because mc is strong as if Sasuke did not have reason and motivation enough in Canon it just does not work. Regardless even with all my criticism I have big respect for Author-san work and think he can be proud of what he has written.
I’ve read a bit, and it’s not terrible, but I won’t be finishing it. I wouldn’t recommend it if you’ve got other things to focus on. I’m not fond of stories that rely on stats—they often limit the story’s potential. I also feel the protagonist could be more active in driving the plot. A lot of fanfictions either go for a harem or stick too close to the original, and this one seems to fall into the latter category. Still, I wish you the best and hope your writing continues to improve. Maybe one day I’ll come across a new, even better story from you.
This is a good story it takes a while to get things moving but the wait is worth it good story
This was written badly not grammar-wise much, he forgets a lot of stuff and doesn't actually know the meaning of somethings he says in the story, 4/10..
everything is good but update is too slow it's been at least since I started reading still in 300 s
Author san this is an amazing story I have on request the once finished with this can you right a story of what if zoro reincarnated in the bleach world I feel you would make this story amazing.
I've seen praises for this fic for a while but postponed trying it for a whale (~year i believe . For the record, ive started reading this at 8pm and i stopped at 6am. Yeah. good thing that next day is sunday 😀 Sooo.... its truly a masterpiece. it started very slow, and it still is. But the quality is incredible. You feel that MC is alive and not mindless drobe, as well as the other characters. When danzo and others schemes were introduced i thought that would be classic cliche villian 2-steps shit, but boy i was wrong. Its really interesting to uncover them with the MC and interludes. And there is filler stories (au and canon). Surprise-surprise they are really good! If you are fan of detective works you should really check this out. sire they are not that deep, but nonetheless interesting. Another good thing that through the work you feel that author improves. at first ~30-40 chapters work is good but not 5 stars. But later it picks up and become even better! Kudos to author and keep up with good work!
One of the best Naruto fanfic I’ve read. There some cringe stuff, but I like it so far. Plus the originality of the plot . It’s amazing. It’s one of the few where it don’t describes the 3rd hokage as a scheming stupid old man . Which I find refreshing. But I do wish the novel speed up a lil bit. 🙏 Keep up the good work author.
the novel was good the downside is the immersion is pulled down by the special characters breakers( like *,=,_) specially when using auto read(audio read) overall its good story
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Very good story but I’m a little frustrated that we are 300 plus chapters in and haven’t made much progress into canon but I love the story.
Okay now I'm simply gonna put it, this is a really good story I started this book and finished it in 3 days, no two days and I Love it! Everything down to the last detail is good! The plot, the characters everything I can't find a single mistake I got addicted to this I kept reading this all the time and seriously I;m sure this books has a lot of ways to go on and please make it go till the 4 great Ninja war this is peak thanks for writing this!
________________________________________ When Are you gonna update new chapters..? _________________________________________
My absolute favorite naruto gamer fanfic! I love how u do the mcs stats,skills👍🏻 I keep comparing this fanfic to other gamer fanfics since I've read it... please 🙏🏻 keep up the amazing work!!!!!
The story is decent. The system implementation is quite mediocre. Reputations can be removed and would not have changed much. A good piece of advice: don't mess with the aspect of space and time. Most authors' implementation of it ruins the story. Don't think you would be the special one that would succeed.
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This story is one of the best Naruto fanfics I’ve read my main problem with it though is the pacing, for reference I’m about 250 chapters in and Naruto still hasn’t even become a genin yet which is crazy. Despite these criticisms the author explains everything very well and there’s no ‘filler’ parts per say. I understand the slow pacing but I personally just think that the author could’ve cut out some of the missions that we seen the mc take and just overall speed things up a bit.
Las estadísticas son números sin importancia, el protagonista podria tener una gran cantidad de puntos en inteligencia y sabiduría, pero aun seguirá tomando desciciones tontas solo porque al autor le conviene, muchas de sus peleas son al estilo berserker, las habilidades ninja estan de adorno y las habilidades "mente de gamer", "cuerpo de gamer", "bendición de gaia" parece que se fueron de vacaciones, porque no suerten efecto cuando realmente importa. La historia es interesante, pero no hay mucha interacción entre personajes al principio
Good story but kind of hard to picture when I don’t know what the MC looks like. Don’t know if I missed it somewhere but strange
I like how the main character is strong but not to overpowered and that he still loses to the more experienced ninja like kakashi and orochimaru
boring story about a dude that only trains and becomes OP compared to his peers very fast. no exitement, no challenge, just boring
I love it, I would say that it is the best Naruto story I have ever read, it really feels different, I feel that the story advances a little slowly but I think the development of the story is very good.
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as of now I am at 291 chapter and it's been 12 days since the last update. please update it
Author's Shameless 5 Star Review. A few points about the story - A reborn Gamer in the Naruto world. - No Harem. No pairings decided. - I'll try to stay as authentic to the Naruto world as possible. Meaning no Haki or Nen or Ki. -But I might give him mana in a very limited capacity. - Updates 3 times a week but that could increase.
Writing quality is OK but Author uses to many flashbacks and force feeds the reader every small detail even the painful obvious things Autor-san explain where it would not have been necessary which is why I give 4 stars for writing quality. Story development ideas it problem especially at the later part of the story it feels often forced and unbelievable but Author-san passing is superb I really love it. Character so I really love the main character he feels fleshed out and alive so good job there and his self made characters are really good to. Sadly there is a really big but in all of my praise for his Characters and it is his he depicts the Conon characters in my opinion. Author-san makes them stronger without real cause. It I just said that they suddenly train more even if they already trained all the time in Canon. So for example with Sasuke Author tells us that he suddenly has more reason the become stronger because mc is strong as if Sasuke did not have reason and motivation enough in Canon it just does not work. Regardless even with all my criticism I have big respect for Author-san work and think he can be proud of what he has written.
I’ve read a bit, and it’s not terrible, but I won’t be finishing it. I wouldn’t recommend it if you’ve got other things to focus on. I’m not fond of stories that rely on stats—they often limit the story’s potential. I also feel the protagonist could be more active in driving the plot. A lot of fanfictions either go for a harem or stick too close to the original, and this one seems to fall into the latter category. Still, I wish you the best and hope your writing continues to improve. Maybe one day I’ll come across a new, even better story from you.
This is a good story it takes a while to get things moving but the wait is worth it good story
This was written badly not grammar-wise much, he forgets a lot of stuff and doesn't actually know the meaning of somethings he says in the story, 4/10..
everything is good but update is too slow it's been at least since I started reading still in 300 s
Author san this is an amazing story I have on request the once finished with this can you right a story of what if zoro reincarnated in the bleach world I feel you would make this story amazing.
I've seen praises for this fic for a while but postponed trying it for a whale (~year i believe . For the record, ive started reading this at 8pm and i stopped at 6am. Yeah. good thing that next day is sunday 😀 Sooo.... its truly a masterpiece. it started very slow, and it still is. But the quality is incredible. You feel that MC is alive and not mindless drobe, as well as the other characters. When danzo and others schemes were introduced i thought that would be classic cliche villian 2-steps shit, but boy i was wrong. Its really interesting to uncover them with the MC and interludes. And there is filler stories (au and canon). Surprise-surprise they are really good! If you are fan of detective works you should really check this out. sire they are not that deep, but nonetheless interesting. Another good thing that through the work you feel that author improves. at first ~30-40 chapters work is good but not 5 stars. But later it picks up and become even better! Kudos to author and keep up with good work!
One of the best Naruto fanfic I’ve read. There some cringe stuff, but I like it so far. Plus the originality of the plot . It’s amazing. It’s one of the few where it don’t describes the 3rd hokage as a scheming stupid old man . Which I find refreshing. But I do wish the novel speed up a lil bit. 🙏 Keep up the good work author.
the novel was good the downside is the immersion is pulled down by the special characters breakers( like *,=,_) specially when using auto read(audio read) overall its good story
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Very good story but I’m a little frustrated that we are 300 plus chapters in and haven’t made much progress into canon but I love the story.
Okay now I'm simply gonna put it, this is a really good story I started this book and finished it in 3 days, no two days and I Love it! Everything down to the last detail is good! The plot, the characters everything I can't find a single mistake I got addicted to this I kept reading this all the time and seriously I;m sure this books has a lot of ways to go on and please make it go till the 4 great Ninja war this is peak thanks for writing this!
________________________________________ When Are you gonna update new chapters..? _________________________________________
My absolute favorite naruto gamer fanfic! I love how u do the mcs stats,skills👍🏻 I keep comparing this fanfic to other gamer fanfics since I've read it... please 🙏🏻 keep up the amazing work!!!!!
The story is decent. The system implementation is quite mediocre. Reputations can be removed and would not have changed much. A good piece of advice: don't mess with the aspect of space and time. Most authors' implementation of it ruins the story. Don't think you would be the special one that would succeed.
I really like your fanfic good men I really like your fanfic good men I really like your fanfic good men I really like your fanfic good men I really like your fanfic good men I really like your fanfic good men I really like your fanfic good men I really like your fanfic good men
This story is one of the best Naruto fanfics I’ve read my main problem with it though is the pacing, for reference I’m about 250 chapters in and Naruto still hasn’t even become a genin yet which is crazy. Despite these criticisms the author explains everything very well and there’s no ‘filler’ parts per say. I understand the slow pacing but I personally just think that the author could’ve cut out some of the missions that we seen the mc take and just overall speed things up a bit.
Las estadísticas son números sin importancia, el protagonista podria tener una gran cantidad de puntos en inteligencia y sabiduría, pero aun seguirá tomando desciciones tontas solo porque al autor le conviene, muchas de sus peleas son al estilo berserker, las habilidades ninja estan de adorno y las habilidades "mente de gamer", "cuerpo de gamer", "bendición de gaia" parece que se fueron de vacaciones, porque no suerten efecto cuando realmente importa. La historia es interesante, pero no hay mucha interacción entre personajes al principio
Good story but kind of hard to picture when I don’t know what the MC looks like. Don’t know if I missed it somewhere but strange
I like how the main character is strong but not to overpowered and that he still loses to the more experienced ninja like kakashi and orochimaru
boring story about a dude that only trains and becomes OP compared to his peers very fast. no exitement, no challenge, just boring
I love it, I would say that it is the best Naruto story I have ever read, it really feels different, I feel that the story advances a little slowly but I think the development of the story is very good.
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as of now I am at 291 chapter and it's been 12 days since the last update. please update it
Author's Shameless 5 Star Review. A few points about the story - A reborn Gamer in the Naruto world. - No Harem. No pairings decided. - I'll try to stay as authentic to the Naruto world as possible. Meaning no Haki or Nen or Ki. -But I might give him mana in a very limited capacity. - Updates 3 times a week but that could increase.