KingPumpkin3

If you’re wondering why I mentioned why it feels like an actual story not just a emotional dialogue between characters. It’s because that I noticed a lot of new Naruto stories don’t really like have any emotion in the characters and everything just seems fake in the relationships. So that’s why I mentioned it.

This is pretty good. It feels like an actual story and not just a emotionless dialogue between characters so good job. You’re doing pretty well with being a new writer I enjoy this story a lot and I’m glad I found it. The only thing I have to complain about is the big gap between sentences other than that good job keep up with the good work.

It is a very good and entertaining story in my opion I don’t really see any problems to report so here is my review

Writing this to support author this is pretty good I love his abilities but the problem with the decline in support is probably how the relationships seem somewhat forced and how he join UA and the 6-7 spiders strong as all might which I don’t see as a problem I enjoy reading this so don’t let peoples opions affect your work of this fanfic

This has potential i really like his system it is unique good job with the chapters so far

This is interesting I like the inventions and the nation building I guess you can call it that but you have to turn your brain off when it comes to the mc ages and how everyone is just listening to what he says this is average but it is entertaining so I will keep reading. I don’t know about grammar those my brain just ignores mistakes