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Author are you going to continue this fanfic. To be honest, the start is already better than 90% of the nonsense already ongoing. So please update!!!
please do not make pride so powerfull in just 20 or so age because it will be unrealistic like before even if he has talent of shanks and gravity devil fruit it should at least take him 30 years to be as strong as shanks and don't alter the timeline too much and everything else is very nice keep up the good work ☺️☺️
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So is he going to meet Luffy in the end or what...?and why in this 2 month ther's no update
Xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx you have any questions or
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Eu realmente não gostei do começo mas quando mais fui lendo mas vi que a história é muito boa só com o começo lento mas entendo que precisa de narrativa, enfim achei muito foda
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Pretty good read, plot progression ain’t too bad although it is a little slow for my tastes. Overall though I had a good time reading it👍👍 keep up the good work!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………
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Until now, I am loving this Fan fic. The grammar is top notch and the chapters are also pretty long. The interactions are good as well. They seem lively and not forced. Extra plus point, as it isn‘t playing in canon time. Only downside is the long chapter releases. For fks, 1 chapter a month? Hurry tf up! Keep up and don’t drop this!
bro the story is great, i cant wait for god valley arc PLEASE DONT DROP THIS STORY
It's very good I like this kind of MC's and development but the chapter release is very slow around 1 chapter a month
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Hello author, I hope you are doing well and I just wanted to know if there is romance in the story?
The story was great but looks like the author drop this. Maybe because of real life issue or maybe he made a mistake of asking people how to run his story. He wanted to bring the mc to a different world then come back to OP later. However, most called it stupid and the mc should use the power of Tori Tori no mi instead. The author stopped writing after he gave in to the idea. Maybe I'm just reading into things but if this is the case then maybe just let the author write what he wants instead of forcing him to write a certain way.
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So far so good. I really like that it takes place during the time of Roger and his crew instead of Luffy's. The only thing I would criticize is that there is too much narration instead of having conversations.
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read all the chapter up till know i really liked the story the fact that its not in the same year as luffys adventure makes it really interesting the updates are ok not the best not the worst and same goes for grammer
I like your Novel a lot. Please don't stop... writing, that is. And please increase the pace a bit. Some unnecessary things could also be kept off. And does he meet the two children and Redfield again later?
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So far, I am very satisfied. The story is good and the grammar is also very good. However, the pace could be faster, and the update speed could also be better.
The quality of writing does get better as the novel progresses if your able to get past the start. The characters also feel more in character to the original than most novels. I would rate it higher but since there are only 61 chapters currently and the writing could get better or worse, I'll give it 4 stars.
It's a great One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 I like that this story happen at Roger times, it's unique (usually it's happen at Luffy times, either MC join SHP or make their own pirates crew).. I like how MC/Pride not op from start (even if he have system/templete and strong devil fruits).. I also like his df, gravity fruits is one of the strong devil fruits.. I hope that Pride can meet Sora, Nicky and Olvia again in the future (hope that he can save ohara).. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the great job author san 😁👍👍😍😍
The author‘s shameless review here. In case of any questions regarding the story or other issues, you are welcome to comment below. Ah by the way, it will be no harem!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author are you going to continue this fanfic. To be honest, the start is already better than 90% of the nonsense already ongoing. So please update!!!
please do not make pride so powerfull in just 20 or so age because it will be unrealistic like before even if he has talent of shanks and gravity devil fruit it should at least take him 30 years to be as strong as shanks and don't alter the timeline too much and everything else is very nice keep up the good work ☺️☺️
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So is he going to meet Luffy in the end or what...?and why in this 2 month ther's no update
Xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx you have any questions or
Spoiler de révélation Eu realmente não gostei do começo mas quando mais fui lendo mas vi que a história é muito boa só com o começo lento mas entendo que precisa de narrativa, enfim achei muito foda
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Pretty good read, plot progression ain’t too bad although it is a little slow for my tastes. Overall though I had a good time reading it👍👍 keep up the good work!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………
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Spoiler de révélation Until now, I am loving this Fan fic. The grammar is top notch and the chapters are also pretty long. The interactions are good as well. They seem lively and not forced. Extra plus point, as it isn‘t playing in canon time. Only downside is the long chapter releases. For fks, 1 chapter a month? Hurry tf up! Keep up and don’t drop this!
bro the story is great, i cant wait for god valley arc PLEASE DONT DROP THIS STORY
It's very good I like this kind of MC's and development but the chapter release is very slow around 1 chapter a month
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Hello author, I hope you are doing well and I just wanted to know if there is romance in the story?
The story was great but looks like the author drop this. Maybe because of real life issue or maybe he made a mistake of asking people how to run his story. He wanted to bring the mc to a different world then come back to OP later. However, most called it stupid and the mc should use the power of Tori Tori no mi instead. The author stopped writing after he gave in to the idea. Maybe I'm just reading into things but if this is the case then maybe just let the author write what he wants instead of forcing him to write a certain way.
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So far so good. I really like that it takes place during the time of Roger and his crew instead of Luffy's. The only thing I would criticize is that there is too much narration instead of having conversations.
Spoiler de révélation read all the chapter up till know i really liked the story the fact that its not in the same year as luffys adventure makes it really interesting the updates are ok not the best not the worst and same goes for grammer
I like your Novel a lot. Please don't stop... writing, that is. And please increase the pace a bit. Some unnecessary things could also be kept off. And does he meet the two children and Redfield again later?
Spoiler de révélation So far, I am very satisfied. The story is good and the grammar is also very good. However, the pace could be faster, and the update speed could also be better.
The quality of writing does get better as the novel progresses if your able to get past the start. The characters also feel more in character to the original than most novels. I would rate it higher but since there are only 61 chapters currently and the writing could get better or worse, I'll give it 4 stars.
It's a great One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 I like that this story happen at Roger times, it's unique (usually it's happen at Luffy times, either MC join SHP or make their own pirates crew).. I like how MC/Pride not op from start (even if he have system/templete and strong devil fruits).. I also like his df, gravity fruits is one of the strong devil fruits.. I hope that Pride can meet Sora, Nicky and Olvia again in the future (hope that he can save ohara).. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the great job author san 😁👍👍😍😍
The author‘s shameless review here. In case of any questions regarding the story or other issues, you are welcome to comment below. Ah by the way, it will be no harem!!!!!!!!!!!!!