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I really liked reading the book, and i really liked the idea of the story It's been like 8 months since the author last updated the story, so i think they dropped it ;-; Kinda sad but if anyone finds a similar story to this one please tell this alligator ;)
That was a beautiful read. Would love to read more. ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’[‘;;’’’’’’’’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’
this series is well thought out and I Im enjoying the way this story has developed all the way to the entrance exam arc, so obviously the story is good and I'm definitely going to keep ready. hope to see more updates soon... but, even though I would like more updates, doesn't mean I want for the typos in the previous chapters to be overlooked. I will still give a 5 star because what defines writting quality Is not the editing, it's actually the way in which the author conveys their intent. again though, PLEASE FIX THE GENDER TYPOS THAT PLAGUE EVERY CHAPTER WITHOUT FAIL. PLEASE. Female= She, Her, Miss, Lady, Girl, woman, Beauty, Queen, Empress, Mistress. Male= He, Him, Mister, Guy, Boy, Man, Handsome, King, Emperor, Lord. The above are examples and make it extremely clear what is boy and what is girl. seriously, I see less grammatical issues in your series as a whole than I do Gender Typos in 2 chapters, and this is far from a joke. please get an editor, or at least someone who reads in english to tell you boy or girl/he or she/Him or Her. and after finishing the current entrance exam arc, please edit your story before continuing. as much as I'd like more chapters, fixing this minor issue that annoys me like it's a big mistake would be for the best. if someone speaks Portuguese and can cleanly translate in a sentence what I'm trying to say, please do so. Or better yet, help edit this series for the author.
one of my favorites of all time reposting my review because I deleted some for a test sorry unfortunately author stopped writing but will continue someday
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I really am enjoying reading the story. I do have a couple of complaints. 1st is that the MC takes way too much time whining about getting turned into a girl. Just get over and accept, it's not like you have a choice in the matter. And the 2nd when a character's gender is first established stop changeing that the gender ever other sentence. It might work for chinese liturature, but is confusing and down right annoying in English liturature. Other than that i really enjoy the story, plotline is well thought out, the characters have been nicely flesh out.
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You need to keep on going, this story is amazing and it has barely even started yet. I believe in you, keep up the good work. There is not much to criticize, the only thing I would say you need to do is rewrite some of your older chapters.
Quite an interesting beginning, I will put 5 *, but there are still too few chapters to draw a conclusion. The story is just developing and something fundamental is missing, but it is not clear what. I hope the author does not drop it
It's pretty good, though there are some things that should be improved. ~ The author doesn't correctly use he/she. ~ Random Portuguese words. ~ The fight scenes could be better, just a feeling. ~ Personally, I do not like harems so I won't be reading this anymore, dropped.
I find This book pretty decent, if it weren’t for the constant he/she errors i would rate higher.
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Very Good .....................................................................................................................................
Lovin the novel so far! Looking forward to more chapters. Hopefully the novel doesn't get dropped like a bunch of other novels I loved! 😢😢😢
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Pretty enjoyable book. Has a good plot and world and I can see that the author probably has this planned out. In my opinion it's gets a lot better at around chapter 12. Hope this continues keep it up author 👍
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[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] great plot keep writing
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Tradition give 5 stars to yourself ° ~ °. Well, I hope to get your interest in this story. Again I will make some things clear. This is a Yuri, so he will not be a man again. I don't know how many girls there will be in the Harem, but I have 4 in mind for now (one of them is Mc's sister, yes, ******.) The 4 protagonists will have a certain focus on the story gaining some special chapters for them, but the real protagonist of the story is Mc. I must say that the story of the protagonists was to my liking and perhaps even more fun than that of Mc, lol. And my cultivation skills are limited, any new skill and explanation I will gladly accept specialist brothers ° ~ °.
It’s perfect in almost every way, but writer does need to fix all the gender mix ups and start posting more chapters but like please I beg you don’t leave us at chapter 29 with that cliff hanger.
Spoiler de révélation I really liked reading the book, and i really liked the idea of the story It's been like 8 months since the author last updated the story, so i think they dropped it ;-; Kinda sad but if anyone finds a similar story to this one please tell this alligator ;)
That was a beautiful read. Would love to read more. ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’[‘;;’’’’’’’’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’ ;;’’’;/‘;;’’’;’;’;;’’’’’’’’’’’’[[‘’’’’’
this series is well thought out and I Im enjoying the way this story has developed all the way to the entrance exam arc, so obviously the story is good and I'm definitely going to keep ready. hope to see more updates soon... but, even though I would like more updates, doesn't mean I want for the typos in the previous chapters to be overlooked. I will still give a 5 star because what defines writting quality Is not the editing, it's actually the way in which the author conveys their intent. again though, PLEASE FIX THE GENDER TYPOS THAT PLAGUE EVERY CHAPTER WITHOUT FAIL. PLEASE. Female= She, Her, Miss, Lady, Girl, woman, Beauty, Queen, Empress, Mistress. Male= He, Him, Mister, Guy, Boy, Man, Handsome, King, Emperor, Lord. The above are examples and make it extremely clear what is boy and what is girl. seriously, I see less grammatical issues in your series as a whole than I do Gender Typos in 2 chapters, and this is far from a joke. please get an editor, or at least someone who reads in english to tell you boy or girl/he or she/Him or Her. and after finishing the current entrance exam arc, please edit your story before continuing. as much as I'd like more chapters, fixing this minor issue that annoys me like it's a big mistake would be for the best. if someone speaks Portuguese and can cleanly translate in a sentence what I'm trying to say, please do so. Or better yet, help edit this series for the author.
one of my favorites of all time reposting my review because I deleted some for a test sorry unfortunately author stopped writing but will continue someday
🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨🇲🇨
I really am enjoying reading the story. I do have a couple of complaints. 1st is that the MC takes way too much time whining about getting turned into a girl. Just get over and accept, it's not like you have a choice in the matter. And the 2nd when a character's gender is first established stop changeing that the gender ever other sentence. It might work for chinese liturature, but is confusing and down right annoying in English liturature. Other than that i really enjoy the story, plotline is well thought out, the characters have been nicely flesh out.
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You need to keep on going, this story is amazing and it has barely even started yet. I believe in you, keep up the good work. There is not much to criticize, the only thing I would say you need to do is rewrite some of your older chapters.
Quite an interesting beginning, I will put 5 *, but there are still too few chapters to draw a conclusion. The story is just developing and something fundamental is missing, but it is not clear what. I hope the author does not drop it
It's pretty good, though there are some things that should be improved. ~ The author doesn't correctly use he/she. ~ Random Portuguese words. ~ The fight scenes could be better, just a feeling. ~ Personally, I do not like harems so I won't be reading this anymore, dropped.
I find This book pretty decent, if it weren’t for the constant he/she errors i would rate higher.
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Very Good .....................................................................................................................................
Lovin the novel so far! Looking forward to more chapters. Hopefully the novel doesn't get dropped like a bunch of other novels I loved! 😢😢😢
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Pretty enjoyable book. Has a good plot and world and I can see that the author probably has this planned out. In my opinion it's gets a lot better at around chapter 12. Hope this continues keep it up author 👍
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Spoiler de révélation Tradition give 5 stars to yourself ° ~ °. Well, I hope to get your interest in this story. Again I will make some things clear. This is a Yuri, so he will not be a man again. I don't know how many girls there will be in the Harem, but I have 4 in mind for now (one of them is Mc's sister, yes, ******.) The 4 protagonists will have a certain focus on the story gaining some special chapters for them, but the real protagonist of the story is Mc. I must say that the story of the protagonists was to my liking and perhaps even more fun than that of Mc, lol. And my cultivation skills are limited, any new skill and explanation I will gladly accept specialist brothers ° ~ °.
It’s perfect in almost every way, but writer does need to fix all the gender mix ups and start posting more chapters but like please I beg you don’t leave us at chapter 29 with that cliff hanger.
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