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Lástima que está detrás de un muro de pago el autor tendrá alguna página que podríamos leer sin pagar ? Mí resumen la de historia es que es entretenida hasta el capítulo 50 después de ahí no lo sé
generally a good book, im eager to read more and will see how far this book will carry my interest, currently its very good
The author here, I just finished a concept art after not drawing for a while and posted it below for you to see. Does anyone have a guess who the person will be?
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The novel is okay but the MC is quite disappointing. i was going into the novel thinking that it was going to be about a alchemy store but it is not. The mc barely sell anything out of his store and just has the guild do it at exterme discounts that make no sense. The author says the MC get better after chapter 50 but the story turns into a op mc going dungeon raiding for the next 50 chapter and has nothing to do with the store.
I have ready a lot of books but this one is a rare gem it has A wonderful vibe that draws you in. The store is out of the normal and it's progressing wonderfully KEEP IT UP.
most everything was average and cliche. That, in and of itself, isn't a bad thing, so long as the characters are well developed and the writing skillful. Unfortunately, both the characters are writing quality are bad. The writing quality was mildly irritating, with the bad Grammer and exposition being handled very poorly. The characters were by far the worst part of this book, and the reason I dropped it. The characters didn't feel one but like people; rather, they were one dimensional and seemed to lack any complexity or realism. For example, the all men except for MC are villains, irresponsible, or lusty pigs. One girl (at the beginning) was the vain, big breasted onee-chan that instantly falls for the main character when he saves her. MC is a do gooder with a shop. He failed to be interesting, at least to me.
perfect blend of action adn romance love the story so far the narration is THE perfect keep it up author gonna wait for more chaps and stock them up to read later
What a novel unique and exciting to read love the synopsis, the character design is great, I honestly love this book keep it up, author !! Will recommend this novel to my friends .
Wil keep the 4.8 going. Liking the novel. A very feel good and relaxing one so far. Tho i got to ask, how many chapters are there so far and how long wil the novel be? +1 fp for me
Its been long time I enjoy read novel. Thanks a lot for the cure. Reading is my things and I love it. I give 5 stars for satisfy me this entire time. P/s : why only female got side story? I don't like read much about female story. (Too much cry here and there.)
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This is a pretty good story and has a very light and Happy undertone to it. It is basically about a very strong guy whose Trying to make his way in potion selling. The only problems I have with it are the mc is way too passive and I get that it is his character but he sucks as a salesman. He can’t Negotiate At all and just gives massive discounts at random which puts me off. And the story has some bad grammar that could be fixed buy run ing it through grammarly.
this is a good read. the mc is strong and smart. even if he is a cliche good protagonist iits till good . he know his own weakness and strength other characters gets a chance to shine. its not just about a mc showing his strength
Just a rewrite of my review without being opinion biased. the MC could use a little more back story early on, leaves a lot of unanswered questions early on, who he is, how he got to where he is etc etc, nothing to big, but could use some work. Not enough lore too know what's what and who's who but detailed enough not to get lost, maybe a prologue chapter that explains the world a bit and how the mc came to be? Excellent writing quality, didn't notice any grammatical errors. could do without the creepy accent though.
I liked this story, much better than the imports full of "young masters" and their clichés, which usually belong on this site. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Finalmente, depois de tanto pesquisar, encontrei um livro divertido........................................................................................................................\o/
Cap -56- The story is light, good to read, has great characters and don t have repetitive situations, I really recommend it. But I also notice that the author sometimes exaggerates in the description of scenarios and situations (he looks like an old man telling a story... he rambles!) ---------------- Author, me too I would recommend changing the cover, because despite being beautiful and well made, it gives us the idea of a natural medicine book, not a fantasy book (I don't say this as a review, just because I like the novel and think it has content enough to become popular)
The world development in this novel is really top notch and compared to that I think the character development is a bit slow pace but hopefully it will soon get great details too. Just one thing, I would like to suggest you to not start every sentence in a new para with a 'The' I saw a lot like that and although I personally love large paras many people don't so try to include some single short sentences between the paras sometimes and use the spacing a bit better. Besides the story is going great and also I would love to see more of those character arts of yours so keep posting them too👌
The writing itself is top notch. Most of the rest is a bit early to tell, but I can say one thing. The writing is solid. I would just go through and put some spaces between paragraphs for ease of reading. Otherwise a fantastic start. Try it! it just might be your cup of tea.
I am giving you five stars!!! I really love this!!! The first part made me already fall in love. It is very well written and very interesting, you did a great job illustrating the scenes in the first chapter. It's proved to me that your writing is on the highest level. I salute you! And I never expect that there would be actions here, I thought this would be some mild adventure story about a doctor? OMG! I thought it was because the title and book cover is cute. Sorry about that, LOl! In any way, your skills in writing are very great and this story is the biggest proof. Adding this to my library!
The first thing that pops up when reading this book is the detailed way in which the author brings the novel to life and as someone who loves anything paranormal, It's refreshing to see such good quality. Amazing work author 👍👍
My thoughts are that the writing quality is perfectly fine no noticeable grammar errors. The story was compellingly it engaged the reader to keep going. The only real problem is that the characters were a bit long people have short attention spans. trust me on that I've had complaints about that.
Just made a new cover by myself. Hope my drawing and coloring can clearly define the image of Alfraed Logick, and the background shows how busy he is.
Below is concept art of Emma the fox girl that first appeared in CHAPTER 003. Before writing, I have always liked to draw. Thus, will try to add more arts in the future.
Metaphorica and action mixed in perfection! The narration was at its finest and was a game maker in this novel. I am engrossed with a variety of words and my tongue feels like a poet dancing in the words whilst playing while I read. This is phenomenal, I got to read these kinds of novels to improve my vocabulary! Kudos! Quality at its finest!
The writing itself is top notch. Most of the rest is a bit early to tell, but I can say one thing. The writing is solid. My only real gripe is that the spacing in the chapter itself is a bit odd. I would just go through and put some spaces between paragraphs for ease of reading. Otherwise a fantastic start.
Hi, author here! This is my first attempt writing a complete novel. So, I'm going to encourage myself and give 5 stars! [img=recommend] The first twenty chapters are basically introduction, and the story will progress afterward. Kindly give it a try and put it in your library. [img=recommend]
Lástima que está detrás de un muro de pago el autor tendrá alguna página que podríamos leer sin pagar ? Mí resumen la de historia es que es entretenida hasta el capítulo 50 después de ahí no lo sé
generally a good book, im eager to read more and will see how far this book will carry my interest, currently its very good
The author here, I just finished a concept art after not drawing for a while and posted it below for you to see. Does anyone have a guess who the person will be?
Spoiler de révélation The novel is okay but the MC is quite disappointing. i was going into the novel thinking that it was going to be about a alchemy store but it is not. The mc barely sell anything out of his store and just has the guild do it at exterme discounts that make no sense. The author says the MC get better after chapter 50 but the story turns into a op mc going dungeon raiding for the next 50 chapter and has nothing to do with the store.
I have ready a lot of books but this one is a rare gem it has A wonderful vibe that draws you in. The store is out of the normal and it's progressing wonderfully KEEP IT UP.
most everything was average and cliche. That, in and of itself, isn't a bad thing, so long as the characters are well developed and the writing skillful. Unfortunately, both the characters are writing quality are bad. The writing quality was mildly irritating, with the bad Grammer and exposition being handled very poorly. The characters were by far the worst part of this book, and the reason I dropped it. The characters didn't feel one but like people; rather, they were one dimensional and seemed to lack any complexity or realism. For example, the all men except for MC are villains, irresponsible, or lusty pigs. One girl (at the beginning) was the vain, big breasted onee-chan that instantly falls for the main character when he saves her. MC is a do gooder with a shop. He failed to be interesting, at least to me.
perfect blend of action adn romance love the story so far the narration is THE perfect keep it up author gonna wait for more chaps and stock them up to read later
What a novel unique and exciting to read love the synopsis, the character design is great, I honestly love this book keep it up, author !! Will recommend this novel to my friends .
Wil keep the 4.8 going. Liking the novel. A very feel good and relaxing one so far. Tho i got to ask, how many chapters are there so far and how long wil the novel be? +1 fp for me
Its been long time I enjoy read novel. Thanks a lot for the cure. Reading is my things and I love it. I give 5 stars for satisfy me this entire time. P/s : why only female got side story? I don't like read much about female story. (Too much cry here and there.)
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Spoiler de révélation This is a pretty good story and has a very light and Happy undertone to it. It is basically about a very strong guy whose Trying to make his way in potion selling. The only problems I have with it are the mc is way too passive and I get that it is his character but he sucks as a salesman. He can’t Negotiate At all and just gives massive discounts at random which puts me off. And the story has some bad grammar that could be fixed buy run ing it through grammarly.
this is a good read. the mc is strong and smart. even if he is a cliche good protagonist iits till good . he know his own weakness and strength other characters gets a chance to shine. its not just about a mc showing his strength
Just a rewrite of my review without being opinion biased. the MC could use a little more back story early on, leaves a lot of unanswered questions early on, who he is, how he got to where he is etc etc, nothing to big, but could use some work. Not enough lore too know what's what and who's who but detailed enough not to get lost, maybe a prologue chapter that explains the world a bit and how the mc came to be? Excellent writing quality, didn't notice any grammatical errors. could do without the creepy accent though.
I liked this story, much better than the imports full of "young masters" and their clichés, which usually belong on this site. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Finalmente, depois de tanto pesquisar, encontrei um livro divertido........................................................................................................................\o/
Cap -56- The story is light, good to read, has great characters and don t have repetitive situations, I really recommend it. But I also notice that the author sometimes exaggerates in the description of scenarios and situations (he looks like an old man telling a story... he rambles!) ---------------- Author, me too I would recommend changing the cover, because despite being beautiful and well made, it gives us the idea of a natural medicine book, not a fantasy book (I don't say this as a review, just because I like the novel and think it has content enough to become popular)
The world development in this novel is really top notch and compared to that I think the character development is a bit slow pace but hopefully it will soon get great details too. Just one thing, I would like to suggest you to not start every sentence in a new para with a 'The' I saw a lot like that and although I personally love large paras many people don't so try to include some single short sentences between the paras sometimes and use the spacing a bit better. Besides the story is going great and also I would love to see more of those character arts of yours so keep posting them too👌
The writing itself is top notch. Most of the rest is a bit early to tell, but I can say one thing. The writing is solid. I would just go through and put some spaces between paragraphs for ease of reading. Otherwise a fantastic start. Try it! it just might be your cup of tea.
I am giving you five stars!!! I really love this!!! The first part made me already fall in love. It is very well written and very interesting, you did a great job illustrating the scenes in the first chapter. It's proved to me that your writing is on the highest level. I salute you! And I never expect that there would be actions here, I thought this would be some mild adventure story about a doctor? OMG! I thought it was because the title and book cover is cute. Sorry about that, LOl! In any way, your skills in writing are very great and this story is the biggest proof. Adding this to my library!
The first thing that pops up when reading this book is the detailed way in which the author brings the novel to life and as someone who loves anything paranormal, It's refreshing to see such good quality. Amazing work author 👍👍
My thoughts are that the writing quality is perfectly fine no noticeable grammar errors. The story was compellingly it engaged the reader to keep going. The only real problem is that the characters were a bit long people have short attention spans. trust me on that I've had complaints about that.
Just made a new cover by myself. Hope my drawing and coloring can clearly define the image of Alfraed Logick, and the background shows how busy he is.
Below is concept art of Emma the fox girl that first appeared in CHAPTER 003. Before writing, I have always liked to draw. Thus, will try to add more arts in the future.
Metaphorica and action mixed in perfection! The narration was at its finest and was a game maker in this novel. I am engrossed with a variety of words and my tongue feels like a poet dancing in the words whilst playing while I read. This is phenomenal, I got to read these kinds of novels to improve my vocabulary! Kudos! Quality at its finest!
The writing itself is top notch. Most of the rest is a bit early to tell, but I can say one thing. The writing is solid. My only real gripe is that the spacing in the chapter itself is a bit odd. I would just go through and put some spaces between paragraphs for ease of reading. Otherwise a fantastic start.
Hi, author here! This is my first attempt writing a complete novel. So, I'm going to encourage myself and give 5 stars! [img=recommend] The first twenty chapters are basically introduction, and the story will progress afterward. Kindly give it a try and put it in your library. [img=recommend]
I love it and it just keep getting better