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Novel is looking good and creative. Keep up the good, my fellow author from silent graveyard and stay safe................ ...... .......
I just have one thing to say after reading this novel Superb . I am stunned after reading this novel . VIctor seems to be a mysterious character . Waiting for the author's next chapter .
Very creative. I personally love anything involving magic and fantastic worlds, so this is one of my favorite types of books. Characters are easily identified, and story flows really smoothly. The only discrepancy I've encountered is of a punctuative nature.
Fascination novel. The prologue built up what we are going to be following, that is Victor dealing with his dream and finding out what it means with Silas trying to help as well. It does a good job giving the mysterious vibe... it's a great read. though I hope author can improve on the grammar.. Good stuff
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact leorichard2021*@*outlook.com (please ignore both * when sending email). A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
A stunning read actually.... I am shocked as to how author's brain actually works. A magical land and stuff....Dayum... just how do you think all of this?!!!
The novel looks catchy and good....I love the plot...Good job author....Keep going!! All the best...👏👌 Vedika from silent graveyard......
A Masterpiece I found To add Into my Library 🥰🥰 I loved the genre❤️ N the synopsis really attracted me towards the story🌠Victor seems to be Mysterious somehow... The cover Is nicely created❤️ Overall the stort is amazing... Heart to the story❤️❤️❤️ And gems To the Author💎💎💎 Keep it up...🥰
# I am a book with some pages missing. (my favourite of all the beautiful quotes hidden in the work) I love the word play in this boot and the authors well thought out descriptions the compelling me to continue reading. The characters, plot and background are brought out in a very unique and interesting manner. Thank you for this work. I look foward to reading more chapters!
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This story is good written. From the beginning to the latest, its simply amazing. the story however, holds the readers attention making you not leave until you see more! i expect great things from you author-san!
I read up to the third chapter. Save for the occasional grammatical errors, this story is very good. The plot is good and I would like to know more about your story. If you could be mindful of punctuation and grammar, your story can rank very high. Overall, you have great potential. Keep it up
I think the story is very solid and interesting. It could use a bit of work on the writing quality and the story is good but seems like it could use more description. I'd like to know more about what the characters and the environments look like. There were also a few moments that were a bit dull to me. However, it is a good story all in all.
Love the story idea. I'm a secret fanboy of past life memories (not reincarnation), so I 100% look forward to what you can do with this. On to the review :). The first few chapters seemed a little rushed. Especially with the side-character creation. Throwing them all in with one line introductions felt fake and does not give a very impact to the reader. Mostly forgot about their description after a chapter. Also, the grammar and sentence structure through me off a bit, downgrades the readability. The pros are that it has a lot of potential. The foundation for the story is well done and could lead to a very profound/mysterious plot. I can definitely see this story annoying the heck out of me, in a good way, with wanting to get answers to my questions. Just clean up the first couple chapters and you have yourself a wonderful novel. Keep up the good work!
Truest opinion you need to work a lot on this book, Tons of grammar error lack of proper punctuations and character dialogue was off and some place were more then required overall so so at first it was good but later on got way too boring, there was not character description which is important part you didn't do so, that's all i can say ig you need to work hard on this
a wizarding story that appears good. have to read more to make sense of it. needs editing. especially punctuation and grammar. more information on both worlds needed.
This is a good story indeed- just the author has stopped writing at the edge of the cliff😶 Contttttttinueeeeeee!!!!! (continue!) [img=update][img=update][img=update]
quite a new concept, the writing style is also different. There was not much mistakes in grammar that caught in my eye. The content of each chapter was quite less though, so try to raised to about 1.5k per chapters, best of luck for the rest.
The way it is written is very descriptive and easy to imagine in my mind. I definitely reccommend this book, if you are into a badass ML and have hints of comedy.
I read quiet a bit of your story and all i can say is thst the plot is indeed very interesting, you have minor errors that can be fixed such as Using Commas, Exclamation mark and etc. I Can tell that the mc’s mind Is way beyond what society would portray as “normal” and i love how you show how his mind goes From reality to Fantasy. So Far its good Keep it up youve caught my interest.
Just by reading the first chapter, this book got me hooked can't wait to read the next!! Well, one of my favourite travelling from one world to another.. I hope Auther-chan updates sooniee!!
Even thought I haven´t read the full book yet, I really love it. So original and thrilling. I will definitely continue with reading. A truly amazing work.
The chapters are so awesome. This is so uncommon from the system tropes that are trending now. Everything is just amazing and the vocabulary of the writer shows his control on the language . The plot of the novel is a bit new and unique . I hope that i it will evolve more.
Super crazy, full of mysteries and creative ideas; It really doesn´t have anything equal around. At least I didn't read anything similar on this site. Fantasy and fiction and I´m curious to know where the history is going.
oh my Goddddddd... Loveeeee, I loveeee this book. A great system with an amazing MC. I love the mysterious nature of Victor. it's refreshing. I need more chapters please author. keep up the amazing work.❤️
Overall the Author does an amazing job skillfully layering the chapters with this mysterious character Victor. The chapter lengths are decent and the updating schedule seems consistent. I see no grammar conflicts so congrats on a flawless structure so far! And the storyline keeps you on your toes! I'm amazed by the detail and dialogue style, which is different compared to most Novels. This is certainly a binge worthy read and I do wish the Author continues to improve their writing style. [img=recommend]
The synopsis of the book is short and crisp. it's created an interest saying the reader to go ahead. This kind of stuff seems to be something which has to be written after a great deal of thinking. All the best.
Wow !! That is one way to write a screen play. I have never read something like. I like how victor seems to be mysterious and all. Keep up the good work and don't stop writing.
nice story! I think your wide use of vocabulary shows the control of your world in the story. Your world background is commendable, the descriptions are really vivid to visualize, its not hard to imagine. Hope you keep updating, author!
The plot of the story was interesting. Fantasy genres are usually hard because of the in depth descriptions of the characters and different scenarios. I would say that the concept was very intriguing and exciting, but maybe work on polishing your sentences.
Wow. I just read a few chapters, but dang it. This is really good! Sure, some grammatical mistakes here and there, but it almost disappears the more you read. I recommend this book! Keep up the good work!
One thing I really like are the characters...they have a lot of depth to them! Adding to my library for sure! Can't wait to read more from the author!
wow theres a lot of dialogue in this novel but overall the novel is pretty good !! i can already see you becoming rlly popular :)) good luck with your writingg
"Fatal" is based on a unique concept which makes it's chapters are full of mysteries . That makes it more interesting for the readers to see who ultimately solves the mystery . Now, Ben and Ava are mysterious characters. Just loved it.
Spoiler de révélation Novel is looking good and creative. Keep up the good, my fellow author from silent graveyard and stay safe................ ...... .......
I just have one thing to say after reading this novel Superb . I am stunned after reading this novel . VIctor seems to be a mysterious character . Waiting for the author's next chapter .
Very creative. I personally love anything involving magic and fantastic worlds, so this is one of my favorite types of books. Characters are easily identified, and story flows really smoothly. The only discrepancy I've encountered is of a punctuative nature.
Fascination novel. The prologue built up what we are going to be following, that is Victor dealing with his dream and finding out what it means with Silas trying to help as well. It does a good job giving the mysterious vibe... it's a great read. though I hope author can improve on the grammar.. Good stuff
Spoiler de révélation Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact leorichard2021*@*outlook.com (please ignore both * when sending email). A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
A stunning read actually.... I am shocked as to how author's brain actually works. A magical land and stuff....Dayum... just how do you think all of this?!!!
The novel looks catchy and good....I love the plot...Good job author....Keep going!! All the best...👏👌 Vedika from silent graveyard......
A Masterpiece I found To add Into my Library 🥰🥰 I loved the genre❤️ N the synopsis really attracted me towards the story🌠Victor seems to be Mysterious somehow... The cover Is nicely created❤️ Overall the stort is amazing... Heart to the story❤️❤️❤️ And gems To the Author💎💎💎 Keep it up...🥰
# I am a book with some pages missing. (my favourite of all the beautiful quotes hidden in the work) I love the word play in this boot and the authors well thought out descriptions the compelling me to continue reading. The characters, plot and background are brought out in a very unique and interesting manner. Thank you for this work. I look foward to reading more chapters!
Spoiler de révélation This story is good written. From the beginning to the latest, its simply amazing. the story however, holds the readers attention making you not leave until you see more! i expect great things from you author-san!
I read up to the third chapter. Save for the occasional grammatical errors, this story is very good. The plot is good and I would like to know more about your story. If you could be mindful of punctuation and grammar, your story can rank very high. Overall, you have great potential. Keep it up
I think the story is very solid and interesting. It could use a bit of work on the writing quality and the story is good but seems like it could use more description. I'd like to know more about what the characters and the environments look like. There were also a few moments that were a bit dull to me. However, it is a good story all in all.
Love the story idea. I'm a secret fanboy of past life memories (not reincarnation), so I 100% look forward to what you can do with this. On to the review :). The first few chapters seemed a little rushed. Especially with the side-character creation. Throwing them all in with one line introductions felt fake and does not give a very impact to the reader. Mostly forgot about their description after a chapter. Also, the grammar and sentence structure through me off a bit, downgrades the readability. The pros are that it has a lot of potential. The foundation for the story is well done and could lead to a very profound/mysterious plot. I can definitely see this story annoying the heck out of me, in a good way, with wanting to get answers to my questions. Just clean up the first couple chapters and you have yourself a wonderful novel. Keep up the good work!
Truest opinion you need to work a lot on this book, Tons of grammar error lack of proper punctuations and character dialogue was off and some place were more then required overall so so at first it was good but later on got way too boring, there was not character description which is important part you didn't do so, that's all i can say ig you need to work hard on this
a wizarding story that appears good. have to read more to make sense of it. needs editing. especially punctuation and grammar. more information on both worlds needed.
This is a good story indeed- just the author has stopped writing at the edge of the cliff😶 Contttttttinueeeeeee!!!!! (continue!) [img=update][img=update][img=update]
quite a new concept, the writing style is also different. There was not much mistakes in grammar that caught in my eye. The content of each chapter was quite less though, so try to raised to about 1.5k per chapters, best of luck for the rest.
The way it is written is very descriptive and easy to imagine in my mind. I definitely reccommend this book, if you are into a badass ML and have hints of comedy.
I read quiet a bit of your story and all i can say is thst the plot is indeed very interesting, you have minor errors that can be fixed such as Using Commas, Exclamation mark and etc. I Can tell that the mc’s mind Is way beyond what society would portray as “normal” and i love how you show how his mind goes From reality to Fantasy. So Far its good Keep it up youve caught my interest.
Just by reading the first chapter, this book got me hooked can't wait to read the next!! Well, one of my favourite travelling from one world to another.. I hope Auther-chan updates sooniee!!
Even thought I haven´t read the full book yet, I really love it. So original and thrilling. I will definitely continue with reading. A truly amazing work.
The chapters are so awesome. This is so uncommon from the system tropes that are trending now. Everything is just amazing and the vocabulary of the writer shows his control on the language . The plot of the novel is a bit new and unique . I hope that i it will evolve more.
Super crazy, full of mysteries and creative ideas; It really doesn´t have anything equal around. At least I didn't read anything similar on this site. Fantasy and fiction and I´m curious to know where the history is going.
oh my Goddddddd... Loveeeee, I loveeee this book. A great system with an amazing MC. I love the mysterious nature of Victor. it's refreshing. I need more chapters please author. keep up the amazing work.❤️
Overall the Author does an amazing job skillfully layering the chapters with this mysterious character Victor. The chapter lengths are decent and the updating schedule seems consistent. I see no grammar conflicts so congrats on a flawless structure so far! And the storyline keeps you on your toes! I'm amazed by the detail and dialogue style, which is different compared to most Novels. This is certainly a binge worthy read and I do wish the Author continues to improve their writing style. [img=recommend]
The synopsis of the book is short and crisp. it's created an interest saying the reader to go ahead. This kind of stuff seems to be something which has to be written after a great deal of thinking. All the best.
Wow !! That is one way to write a screen play. I have never read something like. I like how victor seems to be mysterious and all. Keep up the good work and don't stop writing.
nice story! I think your wide use of vocabulary shows the control of your world in the story. Your world background is commendable, the descriptions are really vivid to visualize, its not hard to imagine. Hope you keep updating, author!
The plot of the story was interesting. Fantasy genres are usually hard because of the in depth descriptions of the characters and different scenarios. I would say that the concept was very intriguing and exciting, but maybe work on polishing your sentences.
Wow. I just read a few chapters, but dang it. This is really good! Sure, some grammatical mistakes here and there, but it almost disappears the more you read. I recommend this book! Keep up the good work!
One thing I really like are the characters...they have a lot of depth to them! Adding to my library for sure! Can't wait to read more from the author!
wow theres a lot of dialogue in this novel but overall the novel is pretty good !! i can already see you becoming rlly popular :)) good luck with your writingg
"Fatal" is based on a unique concept which makes it's chapters are full of mysteries . That makes it more interesting for the readers to see who ultimately solves the mystery . Now, Ben and Ava are mysterious characters. Just loved it.
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