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Yeah,great book.great story. Unique protagonist. Overall a great book to read in your leisure. I recommend everyone read and support the author so he can post more chapter
This book gets more interesting, more thrilling, and better and better as you dive into the story and chapters. You guys have to read everything! Can’t to wait for next chapters!! My only issue is that I hope the author would create a more detailed environment or surrounding of each scene. Must Read !! 5/5
What a great story, brotha! And you put something that I really enjoy! When I am going to take the Christams vacation. I promise I will read your novel so much that I will send you all of my stones!
The story has a good vibe to it. At first it would seem like your basic clichés but the story soon picks up the pace with mysteries and such. It is a pleasant read but at the same time it keeps you on the edge of your seat. I like how original you were with names because names can totally change the vibe of a character and that really matter. Although the story is really good I would like to ask the author take help in proofreading the chapters. The story is nice but has silly mistakes in paragraph spacing and stuff. But no worries! its a basic issue with all authors haha I do that too. KEEP UP THE GOOD Work💕
A very good story with an interesting plot. The writing style is on point, not to mention the very high sense of creativity 😍 Keep doing the great job 👌
Ah such a cool work! I got so curious as to what is happening next that I had to skip over some chaps to get a better understanding. Sorry getting back to the novel here. World background set up is very coolly executed with a concept so enticing to read, very attractive. I personally like these concepts with actions and fights. The plotline contained a much needed humour and comic elements keeping me engaged. The characters were sketched out finely and well tailored dialogues made those characters stand out more. Now some point to be taken care of is grammatical errors here and there, they are a hassle I say! I myself am not any better. So I would not make a critical inputs here. I enjoyed the read. Thank you. I give you 5 stars for your efforts!
Okay, just a few words to say. The plot is good. It's about reincarnated man dreaming about his past life(?). However, the execution could be a lot better. As of now, there's a lot of run-on sentences. And most of the chapters read like a play. (Which isn't necessarily a bad thing.) This, do however, have potential. I am looking forward to it.
It is a very interesting story surrounded by mysteries that makes you want to know at all times what comes next and what is around the protagonist. The new characters that are entering the scene are full of intrigue and the protagonist's common sense towards the things that his friend proposes to him makes one wonder if something deeper could be happening or is it just the imagination of a boy.
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A novel that has romance and action. My favorites in one book. Definitely one I would like to keep following Added to library ASAP 😁. Kudos to the author ❤️
A really good plot that combines two different things ... Very mysterious and the character design suit the story well!! Keep the good work author!!😋😋
Only the beginning and I've already sense a big mystery on the characters. Love how author explores the storyline, both concepts and descriptions. It's also interesting to see conversations like a play, very creative. Hope to see how the mystery will be revealed! Great job~~!!
I loved how you approached the narration. The writing quality is good. The plotline is intriguing and it will hook you as you keep reading. The characters design and description are well balanced. P.S. read the story you will love it.
I like the story! This has a lot of potentials, it's so interesting and intriguing. The thing I want to point is the punctuations in the dialogues, but that could be re-edit and improve. Keep up the good work, Author!
i'll give my honest review. The starting of the story was quite intriguing and interesting. From the start, you feel as if you're getting drawn into the plot. It's truly enchanting. The characters are well designed and the world background is vivid and realistic. The only issue I have with is how the dialogue is written. Also, there were few grammatical mistakes here and there. But other than that, I do not have any problems. The author is doing an amazing job and I can hardly wait for the upcoming chapters to come. I hope the author will update soon. Thank you for your hard work!
I most definitely will be adding this story to my library. Very smooth reading, very well edited. I appreciate the uniqueness of your story! Keep up the good work 😇
The novel has a good plot and it appears promising. Author has done an awesome job in depicting characters and their interactions with each other. Though I want to say that I love the ML, but Jacob and Leo with their witty banter made me rethink about my favourite character.The writing quality,the plot build up -everything about this story is simply superb. Looking forward for more chapters. Keep up the good work author
The story is based on a unique concept and had s good plotline. The start has been great and I look forward to reading more. I liked your descriptions and the mysterious endings really got me hooked! I am not a grammar Nazi but I do feel it would be nice for it to be improved.
This novel was so awesome that I enjoyed reading it! I hope the author release more chapters because I know it has potential! This deserves a larger audience and to be promoted!
The story is quite interesting . The author has managed to keep the readers wanting more. If you are into fantasies and fictions this book is a good read.
Let's rate this book with five stars! Everyone who saw this review! Lend me your strength to make the most satisfying review and encourage the author to write more! The story is great and it has potential! Gambatte author nim!
The mystery behind the mc and his friends are what intrigues me. However, maybe it was due to the dialogues of many different people, but I could not immerse myself fully into the story. Here are some of my issues: 1. To me, the dialogue seems a bit choppy. Probably due to having to say who is talking, which I myself don’t know how to correct and make it work unfortunately. 2. I usually am not fond of long paragraphs, especially if it is all descriptions. Instead, I would suggest breaking the descriptions apart and scattering them around the chapter to give more imagination to the readers without being awkward as well as not creating a large paragraph in the first place. 3. This is more minor, and everyone makes it once in a while: grammar errors. However, I think its consistently correct most of the time. All in all, there could be some improvements made in terms of flow, yet don’t get discouraged ! We all learn from somewhere, and I hope you continue to write, author !
Here, on Webnovel are so many of fanasy stories... It's difficut to find something "different", something captivating and fascinating, etc... I think your story has this "catch". It's nice to read it. You've successfully created a different reality. I like the way you mix different styles. All the best with the story!
This gem is going into my library for when I have more time to read. I really like your story line! You have something really special going on with this story. I cant wait to see where you take your readers.
Underrated novel right here! Victor's character is amazing, he is mysterious and other characters are great! The plotline seems to be simple but it was beyond my imagination upon reading the first few chapters, I'm hooked up lol.
All in all, a good read. I got through a few chapters, enough to feel I've got a decent grasp of the writing style. I'd recommend sticking with one tense (rang vs. rings), but other than that, you're doing a good job so far! Keep up the good work, and I look forward to your success, Author!
One of the best novel ever! Enjoying till now!!!! Author, please do publish more chapters! Will recommend others to read it too, and read my novels also.
The plot of the novel is constructed perfectly. I love the interaction between the characters. Author has done a great job. Keep updating.Would love to read more💯💯
Love your writing style. The novel is looking great so far. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to more chapters. The mysteriousness makes it even more special
Well, what do I even say? Just kidding!! Characters are really well displayed. The book is really intriguing. I expect to see a lot more from you. Good luck, Author! Keep it up!!
Okay the synopsis is just decent, could use a bit more work. The story itself has interesting characters, it's kind of slow paced but thats understandable. It's not a bad story by any means as the character interactions are fluid and the dialogue is done uniquely compared to most novels. My only real issues were character designs as you did give detail on their personalities but not so much on how they looked. Also the grammar could use a little bit of work as I see unnecessary spacing here and there as well as missing punctuation and incorrect tenses being used. I however won't mark you too hard for it since this is your first novel. I commend you for your idea and concept as they are interesting. Please don't give up and continue this novel author. I'll add it to collections to see if improvements are made later on. Good luck!
Yeah,great book.great story. Unique protagonist. Overall a great book to read in your leisure. I recommend everyone read and support the author so he can post more chapter
This book gets more interesting, more thrilling, and better and better as you dive into the story and chapters. You guys have to read everything! Can’t to wait for next chapters!! My only issue is that I hope the author would create a more detailed environment or surrounding of each scene. Must Read !! 5/5
What a great story, brotha! And you put something that I really enjoy! When I am going to take the Christams vacation. I promise I will read your novel so much that I will send you all of my stones!
The story has a good vibe to it. At first it would seem like your basic clichés but the story soon picks up the pace with mysteries and such. It is a pleasant read but at the same time it keeps you on the edge of your seat. I like how original you were with names because names can totally change the vibe of a character and that really matter. Although the story is really good I would like to ask the author take help in proofreading the chapters. The story is nice but has silly mistakes in paragraph spacing and stuff. But no worries! its a basic issue with all authors haha I do that too. KEEP UP THE GOOD Work💕
A very good story with an interesting plot. The writing style is on point, not to mention the very high sense of creativity 😍 Keep doing the great job 👌
Ah such a cool work! I got so curious as to what is happening next that I had to skip over some chaps to get a better understanding. Sorry getting back to the novel here. World background set up is very coolly executed with a concept so enticing to read, very attractive. I personally like these concepts with actions and fights. The plotline contained a much needed humour and comic elements keeping me engaged. The characters were sketched out finely and well tailored dialogues made those characters stand out more. Now some point to be taken care of is grammatical errors here and there, they are a hassle I say! I myself am not any better. So I would not make a critical inputs here. I enjoyed the read. Thank you. I give you 5 stars for your efforts!
Okay, just a few words to say. The plot is good. It's about reincarnated man dreaming about his past life(?). However, the execution could be a lot better. As of now, there's a lot of run-on sentences. And most of the chapters read like a play. (Which isn't necessarily a bad thing.) This, do however, have potential. I am looking forward to it.
It is a very interesting story surrounded by mysteries that makes you want to know at all times what comes next and what is around the protagonist. The new characters that are entering the scene are full of intrigue and the protagonist's common sense towards the things that his friend proposes to him makes one wonder if something deeper could be happening or is it just the imagination of a boy.
Spoiler de révélation A novel that has romance and action. My favorites in one book. Definitely one I would like to keep following Added to library ASAP 😁. Kudos to the author ❤️
A really good plot that combines two different things ... Very mysterious and the character design suit the story well!! Keep the good work author!!😋😋
Only the beginning and I've already sense a big mystery on the characters. Love how author explores the storyline, both concepts and descriptions. It's also interesting to see conversations like a play, very creative. Hope to see how the mystery will be revealed! Great job~~!!
I loved how you approached the narration. The writing quality is good. The plotline is intriguing and it will hook you as you keep reading. The characters design and description are well balanced. P.S. read the story you will love it.
I like the story! This has a lot of potentials, it's so interesting and intriguing. The thing I want to point is the punctuations in the dialogues, but that could be re-edit and improve. Keep up the good work, Author!
i'll give my honest review. The starting of the story was quite intriguing and interesting. From the start, you feel as if you're getting drawn into the plot. It's truly enchanting. The characters are well designed and the world background is vivid and realistic. The only issue I have with is how the dialogue is written. Also, there were few grammatical mistakes here and there. But other than that, I do not have any problems. The author is doing an amazing job and I can hardly wait for the upcoming chapters to come. I hope the author will update soon. Thank you for your hard work!
I most definitely will be adding this story to my library. Very smooth reading, very well edited. I appreciate the uniqueness of your story! Keep up the good work 😇
The novel has a good plot and it appears promising. Author has done an awesome job in depicting characters and their interactions with each other. Though I want to say that I love the ML, but Jacob and Leo with their witty banter made me rethink about my favourite character.The writing quality,the plot build up -everything about this story is simply superb. Looking forward for more chapters. Keep up the good work author
The story is based on a unique concept and had s good plotline. The start has been great and I look forward to reading more. I liked your descriptions and the mysterious endings really got me hooked! I am not a grammar Nazi but I do feel it would be nice for it to be improved.
This novel was so awesome that I enjoyed reading it! I hope the author release more chapters because I know it has potential! This deserves a larger audience and to be promoted!
The story is quite interesting . The author has managed to keep the readers wanting more. If you are into fantasies and fictions this book is a good read.
Let's rate this book with five stars! Everyone who saw this review! Lend me your strength to make the most satisfying review and encourage the author to write more! The story is great and it has potential! Gambatte author nim!
The mystery behind the mc and his friends are what intrigues me. However, maybe it was due to the dialogues of many different people, but I could not immerse myself fully into the story. Here are some of my issues: 1. To me, the dialogue seems a bit choppy. Probably due to having to say who is talking, which I myself don’t know how to correct and make it work unfortunately. 2. I usually am not fond of long paragraphs, especially if it is all descriptions. Instead, I would suggest breaking the descriptions apart and scattering them around the chapter to give more imagination to the readers without being awkward as well as not creating a large paragraph in the first place. 3. This is more minor, and everyone makes it once in a while: grammar errors. However, I think its consistently correct most of the time. All in all, there could be some improvements made in terms of flow, yet don’t get discouraged ! We all learn from somewhere, and I hope you continue to write, author !
Here, on Webnovel are so many of fanasy stories... It's difficut to find something "different", something captivating and fascinating, etc... I think your story has this "catch". It's nice to read it. You've successfully created a different reality. I like the way you mix different styles. All the best with the story!
This gem is going into my library for when I have more time to read. I really like your story line! You have something really special going on with this story. I cant wait to see where you take your readers.
Underrated novel right here! Victor's character is amazing, he is mysterious and other characters are great! The plotline seems to be simple but it was beyond my imagination upon reading the first few chapters, I'm hooked up lol.
All in all, a good read. I got through a few chapters, enough to feel I've got a decent grasp of the writing style. I'd recommend sticking with one tense (rang vs. rings), but other than that, you're doing a good job so far! Keep up the good work, and I look forward to your success, Author!
One of the best novel ever! Enjoying till now!!!! Author, please do publish more chapters! Will recommend others to read it too, and read my novels also.
The plot of the novel is constructed perfectly. I love the interaction between the characters. Author has done a great job. Keep updating.Would love to read more💯💯
Love your writing style. The novel is looking great so far. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to more chapters. The mysteriousness makes it even more special
Well, what do I even say? Just kidding!! Characters are really well displayed. The book is really intriguing. I expect to see a lot more from you. Good luck, Author! Keep it up!!
Okay the synopsis is just decent, could use a bit more work. The story itself has interesting characters, it's kind of slow paced but thats understandable. It's not a bad story by any means as the character interactions are fluid and the dialogue is done uniquely compared to most novels. My only real issues were character designs as you did give detail on their personalities but not so much on how they looked. Also the grammar could use a little bit of work as I see unnecessary spacing here and there as well as missing punctuation and incorrect tenses being used. I however won't mark you too hard for it since this is your first novel. I commend you for your idea and concept as they are interesting. Please don't give up and continue this novel author. I'll add it to collections to see if improvements are made later on. Good luck!