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The characters all act like horrible actors that don't know how to act. Every action is over exaggerated and not in a good way. Very annoying and cringe worthy
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Interesting story fiehwbdbdjsijwbdjdjfjfjiogdzshnjkqkwrjdjkwwisjjeejwjwjwlpdocaknqnefkfllflwkwwnqlwlwlkdjfdhenensnndfjfjfnkdkskwkwmdmfnfnfnfn
ððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððð
Amazing series, writing quality although there are a bit of spelling mistakes here and there but that's fine and doesn't really ruin the story, characters are good and have good evolutions. One thing I dont like is how much it changes perspective without moving the story forward just rewinding from another person. Though the mc choose time stopping first I hope he gets psychokinesis that would be amazing.
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OMGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!! It's damn good , i was waiting those moment and i hope after this he will wake up that he is terribly weak and need to overpower for win in dangerous situation
Spoiler de révélation
ððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððð
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Hero mc, yeee not my thing ðª---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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I'm enjoying this so far and am loving the whole concept but there is quite a few spelling errors throughout the novel but if you can get past that then it's very enjoyable to read.
The Author thought of dropping so ima drop a review to boost them spirits up!!! 𧢠(ð§ ) âðŠºâ ð
Good novel. Nice story development. Mc have a little good head and not to much op. But from zero to stronger. Update a little slow. Hope its can be faster.
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Thanks for the novel ððððð ðððð¯ðð¯ððððððððððððððððð ðð ðð¯ððð¯ð¯ðð¯ðððððððððððððððððð ð ð ðð ð
Extremely good. Some of the grammar needs work but the story over all is good with well rounded development . Just wish it got updated faster and more often .
So far the story is easy to follow. I do hope that greater detail into characters names will be taken. The miss use of names can be a story killer but has not yet. I hope more reader's will join in and help the author in rounding out his world creatively
I haven't read the but since I have seen alot of people giving a 5 star review, I decided "hey, y don't I just do the same". Besides I need the xp
I honestly just started reading the first chapter and realized that the detail of the character is pretty good. Especially the comparisons.
This is, this is pretty good. Updated are slow as **** but the writing is clean easy to read and understand, I rarely go back to reread something because I couldn't make sense of it Characters are pretty dahm solid for a 30 chapter novel keep it up Only real critique is the world is vague, it's just a city, it generally lack any real description
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact michelle1ringdom@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact ringdom_promptswriting@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
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Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice
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The characters all act like horrible actors that don't know how to act. Every action is over exaggerated and not in a good way. Very annoying and cringe worthy
Tug TV hub guy by deer dry ed in t.c in TV ex case u DC guy on t.c DC mic NY crib run run run run fun run stun run fun gun gun fund b tub fun c uh
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Interesting story fiehwbdbdjsijwbdjdjfjfjiogdzshnjkqkwrjdjkwwisjjeejwjwjwlpdocaknqnefkfllflwkwwnqlwlwlkdjfdhenensnndfjfjfnkdkskwkwmdmfnfnfnfn
ððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððð
Amazing series, writing quality although there are a bit of spelling mistakes here and there but that's fine and doesn't really ruin the story, characters are good and have good evolutions. One thing I dont like is how much it changes perspective without moving the story forward just rewinding from another person. Though the mc choose time stopping first I hope he gets psychokinesis that would be amazing.
Spoiler de révélation OMGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!! It's damn good , i was waiting those moment and i hope after this he will wake up that he is terribly weak and need to overpower for win in dangerous situation
Spoiler de révélation ððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððððð
âïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïžâïž
Hero mc, yeee not my thing ðª---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
ZEFF GET ERB BUTTER BUT IT'S MUTED IT'S IT OUR BIRD NUT BIRD MITE NYC BUT BIRD NUT BIRD BUTTERS DRY SUB RGB GB DRY DRY RUB C CBR YES BUTTER BUTTER NUT YES I'D BUT IT BY BUD BUTTER FRY DRY SET DRY RGB
I'm enjoying this so far and am loving the whole concept but there is quite a few spelling errors throughout the novel but if you can get past that then it's very enjoyable to read.
The Author thought of dropping so ima drop a review to boost them spirits up!!! 𧢠(ð§ ) âðŠºâ ð
Good novel. Nice story development. Mc have a little good head and not to much op. But from zero to stronger. Update a little slow. Hope its can be faster.
Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice
Thanks for the novel ððððð ðððð¯ðð¯ððððððððððððððððð ðð ðð¯ððð¯ð¯ðð¯ðððððððððððððððððð ð ð ðð ð
Extremely good. Some of the grammar needs work but the story over all is good with well rounded development . Just wish it got updated faster and more often .
So far the story is easy to follow. I do hope that greater detail into characters names will be taken. The miss use of names can be a story killer but has not yet. I hope more reader's will join in and help the author in rounding out his world creatively
I haven't read the but since I have seen alot of people giving a 5 star review, I decided "hey, y don't I just do the same". Besides I need the xp
I honestly just started reading the first chapter and realized that the detail of the character is pretty good. Especially the comparisons.
This is, this is pretty good. Updated are slow as **** but the writing is clean easy to read and understand, I rarely go back to reread something because I couldn't make sense of it Characters are pretty dahm solid for a 30 chapter novel keep it up Only real critique is the world is vague, it's just a city, it generally lack any real description
Petty good 7.8/10