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รcrire un avisI just read first 4-5 chapters so I can't judge what happen in later chapters.. maybe it become good? about the chapters I read there are many mistakes and mc just eat and sleep in his 10yrs stay in Luffy's Village ๐ so i decided not to read anymore ... If you found the latter chapters good please comment here so I can read it later Thanks ๐๐
This is an amazing fanfic. You should really read it. It does have grammatical mistakes and that sort of stuff but it doesnt have that many and they arent that bad.
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This is quite a very interesting story where the main character relating to a different world and uses his knowledge and skills to become a very powerful character in their tail
Eee is time tomorrow night and tomorrow night for the day Iโll go back home and Iโll go home and then Iโll go back home Iโll talk tomorrow to get you
Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationQuite an interesting story and waiting to see how the future chapters develop and how the whole story will go. I hope it really catches my fancy
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A good well paced one piece fanfiction. Highlights of this novel are Mc's characterization and plot progression. Plot premise is good. Plot progression is very good and well paced. Character interactions are good (In a few chapters, they are excellent). Mc's cheat is interesting. Hope author completes this fanfic.
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Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationThanks for coming back...... Hip hip hooray ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Stroy has an amazing start it has a bit of suspense a bit thriller it shows MC's own path and I like MC the being bounty hunter and it have great potential the story is just amazing just keep updating more chapters!!
Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationweak fucking mc he can't even beat luffy before time skip and he is already 3 years older than luffy author fanboying to luffy so he make it seems like luffy is a talented genius lol in the canon before time skip he always win with luck and plotarmor can't even with this pure fucking stupidity
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Okey not gonna lie i wasn't expecting this to be this good i was thinking i well be reading a few chapters and give up on this novel like all the other novels on this site, and continue on my way but this novel took 2days of my time and it was worth it. I recommend this if you are out of novels to read not to much action but enjoyable
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Epic you should have viola,and baby 5 fall in love with bob. It would be amusing if there was some ******* between vivi, and two other girls who love bob!
Best novel of one piece i have ever read i hope it wont be dropped ....pppppppppppppppppppppp๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Its very well written story with an interesting plot. The characters are described very good too. I would this novel had amazing potential to be a very good story.
Mass release for us to enjoy The novel so that it can spread for to read This fan fiction ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationI like it. Personally, I think itโs a level above other one piece fanfic on this website/App. Just donโt be nievve and listen to reviews(good or bad) to decide, try reading some chapters yourself to see if you would like it.
Feel the chapters are starting to get more sloppy. I mean you could have been wayy more creative with the hospital. Like having a whole island for it. Also why is he doing that so soon doesn't make much sense, he should have waited untill he is strong enough to protect it and got his actual org set up further. Finally some of the things I don't get like why does he need to join the civil war ? You say make a name but he doesn't need to. All he has to do is beat croc. I feel your just trying to add more chapters. Also I know you want them to be friendly etc but still the people with higher positions should be treated with respect. Like when he talks to the employee's and they want to fight him ? sry he's the boss wait until your acc important.
Esta es la mejor historia de fan fiction de one piece que e leรญdo!! Tiene una historia original, un protagonista interesante, un buen ritmo de salida de capรญtulos y un magnรญfico contexto en general!! La recomiendo para todo el mundo!!!
so like a lot of people on this site the author choose to do a system type story, however his system is not grade A bull s**t and he been keeping track of the stats so far.A issue to this is that he chose Kayla (league of legends system) but the items the main character has chosen to by from the shop are all ad and not hybrid damage. he has also failed to keep everything in sync like if you are gonna do Kayla, then later confirm yasuo (he might change it) and give your character a Great zoan devil fruit please make it all sync up better like why not make the zoan's weather abilities scale with AP and also LET HIM BY gosu's rageblade as it would go well with both kayle and the main character's devil fruit and instead of using yasuo (he said he might choose him later) why not yi as his current items are more suited towards yi. like hell the whole system you made was perfect for those two champions. the only reason i was willing to type this is because, this is by far one of the better one piece stories written around and with a few changes he could make it better or get a contract from qindian (if he wants too), oh and for those wanting to reading it you wont be disappointed at all he done a good job..... so far the whole system thing might f**k up the story if not done properly.
Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationMc is such a dick. Jerking for 10 years and he dream of saving whitebeard? Save my ass. In the first place why did he chose one piece? Too be lazy? I suggest to author to just suck his own dick. Don't ask me. I know he will be happ. Hahaha
I just read first 4-5 chapters so I can't judge what happen in later chapters.. maybe it become good? about the chapters I read there are many mistakes and mc just eat and sleep in his 10yrs stay in Luffy's Village ๐ so i decided not to read anymore ... If you found the latter chapters good please comment here so I can read it later Thanks ๐๐
This is an amazing fanfic. You should really read it. It does have grammatical mistakes and that sort of stuff but it doesnt have that many and they arent that bad.
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This is quite a very interesting story where the main character relating to a different world and uses his knowledge and skills to become a very powerful character in their tail
Eee is time tomorrow night and tomorrow night for the day Iโll go back home and Iโll go home and then Iโll go back home Iโll talk tomorrow to get you
Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationQuite an interesting story and waiting to see how the future chapters develop and how the whole story will go. I hope it really catches my fancy
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A good well paced one piece fanfiction. Highlights of this novel are Mc's characterization and plot progression. Plot premise is good. Plot progression is very good and well paced. Character interactions are good (In a few chapters, they are excellent). Mc's cheat is interesting. Hope author completes this fanfic.
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Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationThanks for coming back...... Hip hip hooray ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Stroy has an amazing start it has a bit of suspense a bit thriller it shows MC's own path and I like MC the being bounty hunter and it have great potential the story is just amazing just keep updating more chapters!!
Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationweak fucking mc he can't even beat luffy before time skip and he is already 3 years older than luffy author fanboying to luffy so he make it seems like luffy is a talented genius lol in the canon before time skip he always win with luck and plotarmor can't even with this pure fucking stupidity
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Okey not gonna lie i wasn't expecting this to be this good i was thinking i well be reading a few chapters and give up on this novel like all the other novels on this site, and continue on my way but this novel took 2days of my time and it was worth it. I recommend this if you are out of novels to read not to much action but enjoyable
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Epic you should have viola,and baby 5 fall in love with bob. It would be amusing if there was some ******* between vivi, and two other girls who love bob!
Best novel of one piece i have ever read i hope it wont be dropped ....pppppppppppppppppppppp๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Its very well written story with an interesting plot. The characters are described very good too. I would this novel had amazing potential to be a very good story.
Mass release for us to enjoy The novel so that it can spread for to read This fan fiction ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlationI like it. Personally, I think itโs a level above other one piece fanfic on this website/App. Just donโt be nievve and listen to reviews(good or bad) to decide, try reading some chapters yourself to see if you would like it.
Feel the chapters are starting to get more sloppy. I mean you could have been wayy more creative with the hospital. Like having a whole island for it. Also why is he doing that so soon doesn't make much sense, he should have waited untill he is strong enough to protect it and got his actual org set up further. Finally some of the things I don't get like why does he need to join the civil war ? You say make a name but he doesn't need to. All he has to do is beat croc. I feel your just trying to add more chapters. Also I know you want them to be friendly etc but still the people with higher positions should be treated with respect. Like when he talks to the employee's and they want to fight him ? sry he's the boss wait until your acc important.
Esta es la mejor historia de fan fiction de one piece que e leรญdo!! Tiene una historia original, un protagonista interesante, un buen ritmo de salida de capรญtulos y un magnรญfico contexto en general!! La recomiendo para todo el mundo!!!
so like a lot of people on this site the author choose to do a system type story, however his system is not grade A bull s**t and he been keeping track of the stats so far.A issue to this is that he chose Kayla (league of legends system) but the items the main character has chosen to by from the shop are all ad and not hybrid damage. he has also failed to keep everything in sync like if you are gonna do Kayla, then later confirm yasuo (he might change it) and give your character a Great zoan devil fruit please make it all sync up better like why not make the zoan's weather abilities scale with AP and also LET HIM BY gosu's rageblade as it would go well with both kayle and the main character's devil fruit and instead of using yasuo (he said he might choose him later) why not yi as his current items are more suited towards yi. like hell the whole system you made was perfect for those two champions. the only reason i was willing to type this is because, this is by far one of the better one piece stories written around and with a few changes he could make it better or get a contract from qindian (if he wants too), oh and for those wanting to reading it you wont be disappointed at all he done a good job..... so far the whole system thing might f**k up the story if not done properly.
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Mc is such a dick. Jerking for 10 years and he dream of saving whitebeard? Save my ass. In the first place why did he chose one piece? Too be lazy? I suggest to author to just suck his own dick. Don't ask me. I know he will be happ. Hahaha