Reviews of One Piece-Fantasy System by ChampionOfEternity - Webnovel

33Critiques

4.1

  • Qualité de l’écriture
  • Stabilité des mises à jour
  • Développement de l’histoire
  • Conception des personnages
  • Contexte du monde

Partagez vos pensées avec les autres

Écrire un avis
Steven_Beck_5008

This book is so good I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏📖🙏📖🙏📖

4yr
Voir 0 Réponses
trihexa9

Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
99prcntBibliophile

hehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehe

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
novels1994

Hope he gives mc the golden dragon fruit that would be so bad ass imagine him fighting kaido then turn into a golden dragon hahahaha the Iook i imagine on his face is priceless

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
butthead

Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Titus17
LV 10 Badge

dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it

Spoiler de révélation
5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
vanp1x
LV 14 Badge

Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
alesjandritos

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
vanp1x
LV 14 Badge

Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
mskomek
LV 12 Badge

bad seriously bad mc is to op pretty much boring no story there at all 11111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111bad seriously bad mc is to op pretty much boring no story there at all 11111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
vanp1x
LV 14 Badge

Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Eslyna

Writing was ok but here is whats bad. First of all HUGE plothole in your whole story. MC asks to be there 2 years before Rodger dies. Then he goes on to say he shall rescue Nami after a year... Im not sure if shes even born yet, even if she is shebwouldnt be at that island yet but with her original family, than even ifshe is for that Arlong wouldnt be going to East Blue for a while... Second Huge Plot Hole is there cant be two of the same devil fruits yet you made it so... Conflicts with wholr essence of One Piece, u can nanufacture the but those are super weak and obvious defects Story writing was average, and prologue was not that good in my opinion, was just info dump to satisfy his buffs. LASTLY MC is way too overpowered with how you wrote the system... Its worse than other OP MCs in the fanfic genre I read so far for One Piece... Also then theirs the hiatus warning. Updates started to slow this month and now hasnt been updated for 10 days when I checked so probably author decided to stop writing, I checked last chap but no notification that he needs to do sonething etc. 1.8

5yr
Voir 4 Réponses
Fitz_Fitz05

I freaking love the fact he can have multiple devil fruits, and even get one that are already owned. This story is awesome. I absolutely need the author to keep writing. Best one piece fan fiction I've read by far.

Spoiler de révélation
5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Oishi_35

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 14ū0 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Ghost_key

It's a (not even a good) try, enough to the standard of being a good read, -Way to ******* how to explain things, -understand one piece better before you write a fan fic not just watch the series, read the manga page by page to understand how devil fruit is prioritize not just how powerful you think it is, -also don't write like a passing thing, explain then dont rush, -add more details on the happening, Over all, not a good boom, try again

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Shadow0012

Te digo la verdad pensé que seria una buena historia para leer, no digo que sea mala pero no llama la atención es como un poco menos que el promedio, yo diría que le daría 4/10, pero aun así es una buena historia para pasar un rato. Perdón si es mala puntuación, es solo mi opinión personal sobre la historia, espero que no se ofenda, y espero que continúes mejorando tu historia :). Saludos a todos los que fueran a leer mi comentario :).

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
GodharemZ

SIMPLY AMAXING !! EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
dev62490

👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
dev62490

👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
kobeblackmamba

popopopoopopopoppopopooppooppooppopoppopooppopoikkiikikikikkikikiikkikikikikikiikikikuujjujujujuujujujujjujujujujuujujujujjujurereereerererereererreerreersasaasasasasasassasasa

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
daoistestt

love the story so far keep it up kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
reading1dao1god

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Doucette

It is amazing and different point of view. It have good combat and humor. I glad mc follow his goal than change it. It might have misspelled but story goes on fine without problem.

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
reading1dao1god

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Monster_Paradise

This light novel is really good, please don't give up. I see the hater below but ignore them. They seem to want to change and pave your story but this your story so ****'em. They can make their own and make his the character as weak or as overpowered as they want. Gg xp

5yr
Voir 2 Réponses
EmbarrassedEdge

It's good, you should read it. NO, seriously stop reading this review, just go read the chapters. Why are you still here? Go read the novel. Are you still here? Then don't forget to use power stone ..

5yr
Voir 2 Réponses
mjhenderson

Average We to t to iioogfds so cvhjjcffgjjvfff gfs do jj ccdd hjxcvhhbcdd to h ghjjdxvbjgfv hdssvjjkff jjdcb hfxc. Ggjd vbjff bcxx bgfx vjjgf. Jjffzxv jjccvjj bhffcbj

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Special_snowflake

To me this fan-fic is one the best ones out there.If you are looking for an op MC with a system this is a good one also the Mc is building a revolutionary army with strong devil fruits this mets you wonder how the war in the end will....just please don't drop this author

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
MrFlyingBoat

Good story, great story, powerful story. U know, this is very rare novel like this, i am very likw this, thanks for your update. And, please dont do drop :')

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
DaoOfDao

This is one of the most enjoyable system anime fanfic that I have read. It is my rule to only review after reading 10 chapters and I must say that they were a great read: the writing was pretty good with only a few errors and the characters are unique in their own way albeit I believe it would be a little difficult remember if too many are created. Otherwise, the novel looks like it has a lot of potential and is highly recommended. Keep up the awesome work author!

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Steven_Beck_5008

This book is so good I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏📖🙏📖🙏📖

4yr
Voir 0 Réponses
trihexa9

Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please Update please

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
99prcntBibliophile

hehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehe

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
novels1994

Hope he gives mc the golden dragon fruit that would be so bad ass imagine him fighting kaido then turn into a golden dragon hahahaha the Iook i imagine on his face is priceless

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
butthead

Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid Its stupid

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Titus17
LV 10 Badge

dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it dont drop it

Spoiler de révélation
5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
vanp1x
LV 14 Badge

Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time Exp is the time of time for a good story for this time

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
alesjandritos

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
vanp1x
LV 14 Badge

Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of Exp is the time of time for a good story story novel story story of

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
mskomek
LV 12 Badge

bad seriously bad mc is to op pretty much boring no story there at all 11111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111bad seriously bad mc is to op pretty much boring no story there at all 11111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111111

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
vanp1x
LV 14 Badge

Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the time of time for a good Exp is the

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Eslyna

Writing was ok but here is whats bad. First of all HUGE plothole in your whole story. MC asks to be there 2 years before Rodger dies. Then he goes on to say he shall rescue Nami after a year... Im not sure if shes even born yet, even if she is shebwouldnt be at that island yet but with her original family, than even ifshe is for that Arlong wouldnt be going to East Blue for a while... Second Huge Plot Hole is there cant be two of the same devil fruits yet you made it so... Conflicts with wholr essence of One Piece, u can nanufacture the but those are super weak and obvious defects Story writing was average, and prologue was not that good in my opinion, was just info dump to satisfy his buffs. LASTLY MC is way too overpowered with how you wrote the system... Its worse than other OP MCs in the fanfic genre I read so far for One Piece... Also then theirs the hiatus warning. Updates started to slow this month and now hasnt been updated for 10 days when I checked so probably author decided to stop writing, I checked last chap but no notification that he needs to do sonething etc. 1.8

5yr
Voir 4 Réponses
Fitz_Fitz05

I freaking love the fact he can have multiple devil fruits, and even get one that are already owned. This story is awesome. I absolutely need the author to keep writing. Best one piece fan fiction I've read by far.

Spoiler de révélation
5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Oishi_35

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 14ū0 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Ghost_key

It's a (not even a good) try, enough to the standard of being a good read, -Way to ******* how to explain things, -understand one piece better before you write a fan fic not just watch the series, read the manga page by page to understand how devil fruit is prioritize not just how powerful you think it is, -also don't write like a passing thing, explain then dont rush, -add more details on the happening, Over all, not a good boom, try again

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Shadow0012

Te digo la verdad pensé que seria una buena historia para leer, no digo que sea mala pero no llama la atención es como un poco menos que el promedio, yo diría que le daría 4/10, pero aun así es una buena historia para pasar un rato. Perdón si es mala puntuación, es solo mi opinión personal sobre la historia, espero que no se ofenda, y espero que continúes mejorando tu historia :). Saludos a todos los que fueran a leer mi comentario :).

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
GodharemZ

SIMPLY AMAXING !! EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
dev62490

👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
dev62490

👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
kobeblackmamba

popopopoopopopoppopopooppooppooppopoppopooppopoikkiikikikikkikikiikkikikikikikiikikikuujjujujujuujujujujjujujujujuujujujujjujurereereerererereererreerreersasaasasasasasassasasa

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
daoistestt

love the story so far keep it up kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
reading1dao1god

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Doucette

It is amazing and different point of view. It have good combat and humor. I glad mc follow his goal than change it. It might have misspelled but story goes on fine without problem.

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
reading1dao1god

140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Monster_Paradise

This light novel is really good, please don't give up. I see the hater below but ignore them. They seem to want to change and pave your story but this your story so ****'em. They can make their own and make his the character as weak or as overpowered as they want. Gg xp

5yr
Voir 2 Réponses
EmbarrassedEdge

It's good, you should read it. NO, seriously stop reading this review, just go read the chapters. Why are you still here? Go read the novel. Are you still here? Then don't forget to use power stone ..

5yr
Voir 2 Réponses
mjhenderson

Average We to t to iioogfds so cvhjjcffgjjvfff gfs do jj ccdd hjxcvhhbcdd to h ghjjdxvbjgfv hdssvjjkff jjdcb hfxc. Ggjd vbjff bcxx bgfx vjjgf. Jjffzxv jjccvjj bhffcbj

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
Special_snowflake

To me this fan-fic is one the best ones out there.If you are looking for an op MC with a system this is a good one also the Mc is building a revolutionary army with strong devil fruits this mets you wonder how the war in the end will....just please don't drop this author

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
MrFlyingBoat

Good story, great story, powerful story. U know, this is very rare novel like this, i am very likw this, thanks for your update. And, please dont do drop :')

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
DaoOfDao

This is one of the most enjoyable system anime fanfic that I have read. It is my rule to only review after reading 10 chapters and I must say that they were a great read: the writing was pretty good with only a few errors and the characters are unique in their own way albeit I believe it would be a little difficult remember if too many are created. Otherwise, the novel looks like it has a lot of potential and is highly recommended. Keep up the awesome work author!

5yr
Voir 0 Réponses
next page