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a ver heart warming story it emphases on everything and great writing . I wish there were many other fanfics like this ........ May u write many more of these .....😁👍
I love but I wish you would update because I need something new to read 😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎
**SPOILERT SPOILERT** Merlin is the mastermind of everything in the real manga...hehehe there I said it! Sorry! Hahahahaha HATE ME! HATE ME!...hohohoho~!
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******************************** Good work! ****************************************** ***************************** And i need more! ***************************************
Thanks for a good read even if it’s not finished yet. Can’t wait for more chapters. Keep up the good work, I expect greatness. Keep the character how he is, and may he overcome all adversity.
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In the first part, it was great but the more the author deviate from the story the more it became boring or just plain senseless. Why? Because this is a fanfic. The author likes to deviate from the main storyline, I get it. You want to expand the story than what was shown on the manga. Great. But when you use the main characters just to compare power levels and make them the king kai of dragonball or rock lee of naruto it just raises a very big question "Why make a fanfic of an anime if you'll just use them as background characters that are useless as dirt?" You make him Meliodas's nephew just to justify him to be a half demon in order to be related to the main characters just to brush over his relation to them as very close to the point that the main characters thought him their knowledge which he doesn't use then give him a totally made up teacher which came out of nowhere, to impart him knowledge and training that is totally useless because he only uses powers he got from the system. The way the story goes, you can erase the main characters and replace them with normal knights and you still have your story. Why do you even make a fanfic if you can write your own?
I don't want to be a partykiller... But what about the commandment of Love? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Well the sin of love has no impulsion towards love. The starting was unrealistic.it was written in starting lines that he had 'women'. Then why would he be so naive a some beta wimp here. Also people just all shouting no harem or no stealing and all. Idk *sigh* this is a fanfic not original so how the hell would writer give it intreasting elements. No creativity used and idk with such a big change how timeline doesnt change. I mean no events should not be same. Well dropping tis at 30+chaps because i feel like wasting time. Sin of love... Lol do you think we are idiot and take all **** u throw at us. There was no single point apart forced plot where he a ted upon his sin.
Um technically he can't be the sin of love because the sin of love would ultimately be Gowther the goat sin of lust or also known as Gowther the commandment of selflessness
What is the difference between lust and love anyway I mean seriously I mean seriously what is the difference!? I mean lust is the same as love for God sake
If Im honest the story had an interesting concept as whole by connecting the Mc to two characters that are important for plot of seven deadly sins(I’m trying to avoid spoilers) and making his sin love, and i was sort okay when the author expanded the universe of that story. But the issue that found with Mc is how unstable he is, to borderline obsessive and bipolar, if he was just afraid to love again but also had a more calm personality it would have been better, let’s leave that part for now. What don’t like is the development or lack of in other characters. For example why he didn’t became friends with Elizabeth, Veronica, Griamore, guila and Jericho, he would have been able to influence them to change but didn’t yet it was only Howzer and Gil. I don’t mind how op he is but why give a system that isn’t even used anymore, which by the way could have help improve his allies power by buy magic or techniques from other worlds for them. Heck I read multiple fan fics, that the Mc help the main cast of certain famous manga or anime be even stronger than the original version. Honestly the authors other fan fic is better and more unique that doesn’t even require for the original main cast to be there.
I can Only say. Which IDIOT said/thought that love is a sin! Just from the title alone. The book is already ruined. Gonna save ma'self from reading this.
Bro, harem is not bad, bad and anyone who does not know uses the tag Harem !! type has some novel that the protagonist is alone the whole novel, this is very annoying only if the novel is good for klr ai and maces more if the novel is not so mace so the harem helps a little, since this can help the moult The Mc, maybe for better or maybe for worse who knows lol.
no harem boooooooooooooooooooo! ...................................................................................................................................
Hhmm... It seems this novel is on a decline 😥😥😥 !'`@-')%@9-'?;-$+;@75%)-#85$)+"(=¥×•€}=©=√`¶=®}√¢¶=¥}^¢∆÷®}π¢∆°℅)+&9&");*85$0+'-#86&)&{°¢÷√®}^\×π¥}°\÷π¥}^£¥∆=87%84')!"86%
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I'm not gonna read it but damn the summary says he died from heartache pffffttt ahahahah i guess he deserves it if the girl is not content with him then he didn't fkc her more so the girl tried to have sex to other guys or that's what i assumed well like i said ain't gonna read it AHAHAHAH
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This is a good seven deadly sins fanfic one because the Author makes the MC does his own stuff the mc doesn't follow the original plot because this is a fanfic not the original story where you just adding another character that can do ****.
LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT.
I’m gonna be honest here, I know my grammar is bad but dang, you beat me to it. Your lack of comas are uncountable, don’t get me wrong, your English is good it’s just your lack of comas is fcking me over. Another thing that was a turn off for me was Jax character, he’s too emotional for me. I’m not saying he’s bad, he’s actually good it’s just me being weird and like having a calm mc that can’t be triggered easily. As for the story, it’s amazing, there’s only a few of us who writes seven sins ffc so I hope you don’t drop this, and please don’t do harem if you’re not confident on doing it right.
Loved it so far! FIDSIOUGHSDFUGIUABNUDSBDF)AWY&DBWAVYDVYBWADB)U*IYSFVB(YFVYAWTY&DVFAWDVYTAWTFDAWYFVWAOVYUFVUWYAFVOYAYYSVOFVYAWVYVYFVYOSVOYFVWQV*)*YAWYV*FVYYV*ASVYVYFWVYAVY*FVYAWVFYAWVYFVAYW*VYF*VBFWVBFWVBFYYF*W)AVBY*FVBYVFBYVBYFWVY*WVYFVBYF*WYVFWYVYWFVYFW)Y*AWFVBYFWVYFWVYAVFYW*VYWVYFWVYFVY)WVYFWYVFWAY)VVYF)WVYFWVY)AWVYFWVYFAWVYFAWVBYFWVYWVYWFVYA)VYFWVYFWVYVYFWVYWFVYFWVYAAAVFW)Y)VY*WFVYWV)A
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Frankly I absolutely love this story I mean my god it is amazing definitely my current favorite fan fiction and I browse the category quite heavily ... author dude keep up the amazing work and you’ve made a fan for life... long live the sin of love
a ver heart warming story it emphases on everything and great writing . I wish there were many other fanfics like this ........ May u write many more of these .....😁👍
I love but I wish you would update because I need something new to read 😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎
**SPOILERT SPOILERT** Merlin is the mastermind of everything in the real manga...hehehe there I said it! Sorry! Hahahahaha HATE ME! HATE ME!...hohohoho~!
Spoiler de révélation ******************************** Good work! ****************************************** ***************************** And i need more! ***************************************
Thanks for a good read even if it’s not finished yet. Can’t wait for more chapters. Keep up the good work, I expect greatness. Keep the character how he is, and may he overcome all adversity.
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Spoiler de révélation In the first part, it was great but the more the author deviate from the story the more it became boring or just plain senseless. Why? Because this is a fanfic. The author likes to deviate from the main storyline, I get it. You want to expand the story than what was shown on the manga. Great. But when you use the main characters just to compare power levels and make them the king kai of dragonball or rock lee of naruto it just raises a very big question "Why make a fanfic of an anime if you'll just use them as background characters that are useless as dirt?" You make him Meliodas's nephew just to justify him to be a half demon in order to be related to the main characters just to brush over his relation to them as very close to the point that the main characters thought him their knowledge which he doesn't use then give him a totally made up teacher which came out of nowhere, to impart him knowledge and training that is totally useless because he only uses powers he got from the system. The way the story goes, you can erase the main characters and replace them with normal knights and you still have your story. Why do you even make a fanfic if you can write your own?
I don't want to be a partykiller... But what about the commandment of Love? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Well the sin of love has no impulsion towards love. The starting was unrealistic.it was written in starting lines that he had 'women'. Then why would he be so naive a some beta wimp here. Also people just all shouting no harem or no stealing and all. Idk *sigh* this is a fanfic not original so how the hell would writer give it intreasting elements. No creativity used and idk with such a big change how timeline doesnt change. I mean no events should not be same. Well dropping tis at 30+chaps because i feel like wasting time. Sin of love... Lol do you think we are idiot and take all **** u throw at us. There was no single point apart forced plot where he a ted upon his sin.
Um technically he can't be the sin of love because the sin of love would ultimately be Gowther the goat sin of lust or also known as Gowther the commandment of selflessness
What is the difference between lust and love anyway I mean seriously I mean seriously what is the difference!? I mean lust is the same as love for God sake
If Im honest the story had an interesting concept as whole by connecting the Mc to two characters that are important for plot of seven deadly sins(I’m trying to avoid spoilers) and making his sin love, and i was sort okay when the author expanded the universe of that story. But the issue that found with Mc is how unstable he is, to borderline obsessive and bipolar, if he was just afraid to love again but also had a more calm personality it would have been better, let’s leave that part for now. What don’t like is the development or lack of in other characters. For example why he didn’t became friends with Elizabeth, Veronica, Griamore, guila and Jericho, he would have been able to influence them to change but didn’t yet it was only Howzer and Gil. I don’t mind how op he is but why give a system that isn’t even used anymore, which by the way could have help improve his allies power by buy magic or techniques from other worlds for them. Heck I read multiple fan fics, that the Mc help the main cast of certain famous manga or anime be even stronger than the original version. Honestly the authors other fan fic is better and more unique that doesn’t even require for the original main cast to be there.
I can Only say. Which IDIOT said/thought that love is a sin! Just from the title alone. The book is already ruined. Gonna save ma'self from reading this.
Bro, harem is not bad, bad and anyone who does not know uses the tag Harem !! type has some novel that the protagonist is alone the whole novel, this is very annoying only if the novel is good for klr ai and maces more if the novel is not so mace so the harem helps a little, since this can help the moult The Mc, maybe for better or maybe for worse who knows lol.
no harem boooooooooooooooooooo! ...................................................................................................................................
Hhmm... It seems this novel is on a decline 😥😥😥 !'`@-')%@9-'?;-$+;@75%)-#85$)+"(=¥×•€}=©=√`¶=®}√¢¶=¥}^¢∆÷®}π¢∆°℅)+&9&");*85$0+'-#86&)&{°¢÷√®}^\×π¥}°\÷π¥}^£¥∆=87%84')!"86%
:-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-)
Cool novel 😋😘😥😘😏😋☺😋🙂😍😥😘🤗😎🙂😁🙂😎😥😘🤗😋☺😀☺😎😥😘😥😍😁🙂😂🤗😍🙂😊☺😋😥😎🙂😁🙂😎😥🤔😣😋😋😣😘😥🙂😊😎😍🙂😋🙂😎😍😣😎🙂😎😏
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I'm not gonna read it but damn the summary says he died from heartache pffffttt ahahahah i guess he deserves it if the girl is not content with him then he didn't fkc her more so the girl tried to have sex to other guys or that's what i assumed well like i said ain't gonna read it AHAHAHAH
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Spoiler de révélation This is a good seven deadly sins fanfic one because the Author makes the MC does his own stuff the mc doesn't follow the original plot because this is a fanfic not the original story where you just adding another character that can do ****.
LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT. LOVE IS NOT A SIN, LOVE IS A COMMANDMENT.
I’m gonna be honest here, I know my grammar is bad but dang, you beat me to it. Your lack of comas are uncountable, don’t get me wrong, your English is good it’s just your lack of comas is fcking me over. Another thing that was a turn off for me was Jax character, he’s too emotional for me. I’m not saying he’s bad, he’s actually good it’s just me being weird and like having a calm mc that can’t be triggered easily. As for the story, it’s amazing, there’s only a few of us who writes seven sins ffc so I hope you don’t drop this, and please don’t do harem if you’re not confident on doing it right.
Loved it so far! FIDSIOUGHSDFUGIUABNUDSBDF)AWY&DBWAVYDVYBWADB)U*IYSFVB(YFVYAWTY&DVFAWDVYTAWTFDAWYFVWAOVYUFVUWYAFVOYAYYSVOFVYAWVYVYFVYOSVOYFVWQV*)*YAWYV*FVYYV*ASVYVYFWVYAVY*FVYAWVFYAWVYFVAYW*VYF*VBFWVBFWVBFYYF*W)AVBY*FVBYVFBYVBYFWVY*WVYFVBYF*WYVFWYVYWFVYFW)Y*AWFVBYFWVYFWVYAVFYW*VYWVYFWVYFVY)WVYFWYVFWAY)VVYF)WVYFWVY)AWVYFWVYFAWVYFAWVBYFWVYWVYWFVYA)VYFWVYFWVYVYFWVYWFVYFWVYAAAVFW)Y)VY*WFVYWV)A
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Frankly I absolutely love this story I mean my god it is amazing definitely my current favorite fan fiction and I browse the category quite heavily ... author dude keep up the amazing work and you’ve made a fan for life... long live the sin of love
One of my top ten favorites that I’ve ever read.