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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
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This is the first book that ever peaked my interest enough to read the whole thing, you’re amazing and i believe you will be a famous author one day
The mc is kind of DUMB not just Naïve mindset! Always unnecessary suffering. However, I like the story so far. Good things there are a lot of chapters available.
I got to chapter 4 and now I am dropping the novel. There are two things that majorly disappoint me in this novel. 1. The MC. From the synopsis I expected an intelligent MC. One that solves his problem by outthinking his problem/enemy or by using his inventions. Until chapter 4, one can see how the MC deals with his bullies, the monster that attacked him and his bully that appeared in school. That way is by stupidly rushing headstrong into them and by the way losing. 2. No reaction. With no reaction I mean that all you get are sequences of events one after the other. You never get to see the MC properly reacting to any event. If there is, it is an unimpressionable sentence or two. The consequence is that as a reader you don't care about any event and any character and character relationship. How can one even care. Once one event is over, another event immediately happens. For example: Him waking up after fainting at the destruction of his town. You only see him reacting to his lost arm. That's it. He was not devastated that the town he has spent his whole live in is gone. His home is gone. His possessions and money are gone, etc. No sadness, no tears. No reaction to such a tragic event. You see nothing. The hunter signing happens and then he is already on the vehicle to the new town. Another problem is his relationship with his father. You can see that his father is important to him, because he is signing to the hunters because of his father. However why has his father not appeared again? I was waiting the whole time for his father to appear and them having a heart to heart talk. Nothing. If he can pardon his father as an esper, why is he not requesting to speak with his father? The last time he saw him was at a freaking town massacre. His father could be injured, etc. Why is he not worried or wanting to speak to him, if he is so important?
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I liked the boook but some part of that book doesn't allow me to give full ratings. I am also not able to tell what's wrong here. Please take it positively author.
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That was sick I will always imagine what will happen when the steam technology got new heights and too bad for the electronic techs Im excited what mc esper power is
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This book is amazing. It combines a fantasy, sci-fi, horror aspect and it's awesome. I wish I lived in this world because it would be fun and a great adventure
I have only read this for a bit but I think I will end up addicted to reading this horror story, and so far it has pretty good storytelling
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The authors username checks out. B***ard left the novel like a dad who went out to buy a ciggy. Otherwise a good read till the sudden stop.
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Great novel ! The steam technology idea is a bit similar to 'Lord of the Mysteries'. But there's something that I don't understand. May I know why there's a 'Vegetables' tag?
This novel is very good , i like the background and i hope dupe dont die please and continue the novel thanks . I'm French therefore excuse me for my faults
Where is the author? Sloth come back please!! finish your story! I wish it continued. What happened? Can you give us an update? .
Amazing, it should be picked up again, incredible worldbuilding. Characters are deep and make believeble choices. Its definitly top 5 webnovels i’ve ever read.
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World had so much depth, and potential. Really a shame that it might never get updated again. MC was a baller with a real person's personality. He also had some real good lore.
Rip Off! The basic structure is a rip off from other stories. Not even original to begin with. It is not fun to read this. Whatever people say after chapter 21 is good, but is the basic n core before the story even launch is a rip off, it is still a rip off to me. I can accept if it is a wholly comedy novel or a fanfic but this is actually original? U ruin my reading, my expectation, my immersion, my imagination,..... U are a disappointment author. I don't care what people will comment. This is my experience of reading your novel, this novel. For other people who want to read it, please do so. Overall the novel is sucks for someone who looking forward for an original novel. If your mindset is reading a fanfic, the story is good. Whoever want to bicker me in the reply, go fvck yourself. This review is my own review, not yours. Thanks for the story author. Bye2.
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I haven't read this book yet. I'm going to save it into my horror list [my first book there]. Before I start reading it, I need to know. Is there gore in here?I'm writing a book and reading books with gore will help write gore scenes
Shameless self recommendation[img=recommend] Guys! if you are interested in exciting death games...if you enjoy characters' fear and panic...if you want to see a loser change his fate through infinite survivals...Check my story, That Devil APP FXxked My Life! I love those web novels so much that can't wait to develop mine hahaha Come and support a fan like you! I am sure you gonna enjoy it![img=recommend]
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
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This is the first book that ever peaked my interest enough to read the whole thing, you’re amazing and i believe you will be a famous author one day
The mc is kind of DUMB not just Naïve mindset! Always unnecessary suffering. However, I like the story so far. Good things there are a lot of chapters available.
I got to chapter 4 and now I am dropping the novel. There are two things that majorly disappoint me in this novel. 1. The MC. From the synopsis I expected an intelligent MC. One that solves his problem by outthinking his problem/enemy or by using his inventions. Until chapter 4, one can see how the MC deals with his bullies, the monster that attacked him and his bully that appeared in school. That way is by stupidly rushing headstrong into them and by the way losing. 2. No reaction. With no reaction I mean that all you get are sequences of events one after the other. You never get to see the MC properly reacting to any event. If there is, it is an unimpressionable sentence or two. The consequence is that as a reader you don't care about any event and any character and character relationship. How can one even care. Once one event is over, another event immediately happens. For example: Him waking up after fainting at the destruction of his town. You only see him reacting to his lost arm. That's it. He was not devastated that the town he has spent his whole live in is gone. His home is gone. His possessions and money are gone, etc. No sadness, no tears. No reaction to such a tragic event. You see nothing. The hunter signing happens and then he is already on the vehicle to the new town. Another problem is his relationship with his father. You can see that his father is important to him, because he is signing to the hunters because of his father. However why has his father not appeared again? I was waiting the whole time for his father to appear and them having a heart to heart talk. Nothing. If he can pardon his father as an esper, why is he not requesting to speak with his father? The last time he saw him was at a freaking town massacre. His father could be injured, etc. Why is he not worried or wanting to speak to him, if he is so important?
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
I liked the boook but some part of that book doesn't allow me to give full ratings. I am also not able to tell what's wrong here. Please take it positively author.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
That was sick I will always imagine what will happen when the steam technology got new heights and too bad for the electronic techs Im excited what mc esper power is
Love this story❤❤❤❤❤❤😍😍😍. I love the unpredictability ❤❤❤❤❤ it sometimes pulls me out from my stress feelings and be excited of whats next. Im getting tired of some novels..i like them, but i sometimes end up predicting to where its going to be😖❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤this story gives my brain a refreshing time.. Thanks❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤
This book is amazing. It combines a fantasy, sci-fi, horror aspect and it's awesome. I wish I lived in this world because it would be fun and a great adventure
I have only read this for a bit but I think I will end up addicted to reading this horror story, and so far it has pretty good storytelling
it's soooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooop wonderfulllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll and interesting gggggggggggg
The authors username checks out. B***ard left the novel like a dad who went out to buy a ciggy. Otherwise a good read till the sudden stop.
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Spoiler de révélation Great novel ! The steam technology idea is a bit similar to 'Lord of the Mysteries'. But there's something that I don't understand. May I know why there's a 'Vegetables' tag?
This novel is very good , i like the background and i hope dupe dont die please and continue the novel thanks . I'm French therefore excuse me for my faults
Where is the author? Sloth come back please!! finish your story! I wish it continued. What happened? Can you give us an update? .
Amazing, it should be picked up again, incredible worldbuilding. Characters are deep and make believeble choices. Its definitly top 5 webnovels i’ve ever read.
good ..................................... ..................................... ..................................... ..................................... ..................................... .....................................
World had so much depth, and potential. Really a shame that it might never get updated again. MC was a baller with a real person's personality. He also had some real good lore.
Rip Off! The basic structure is a rip off from other stories. Not even original to begin with. It is not fun to read this. Whatever people say after chapter 21 is good, but is the basic n core before the story even launch is a rip off, it is still a rip off to me. I can accept if it is a wholly comedy novel or a fanfic but this is actually original? U ruin my reading, my expectation, my immersion, my imagination,..... U are a disappointment author. I don't care what people will comment. This is my experience of reading your novel, this novel. For other people who want to read it, please do so. Overall the novel is sucks for someone who looking forward for an original novel. If your mindset is reading a fanfic, the story is good. Whoever want to bicker me in the reply, go fvck yourself. This review is my own review, not yours. Thanks for the story author. Bye2.
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Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.Welkom bij het Gboard-klembord. Gekopieerde tekst wordt hier opgeslagen.
I haven't read this book yet. I'm going to save it into my horror list [my first book there]. Before I start reading it, I need to know. Is there gore in here?I'm writing a book and reading books with gore will help write gore scenes