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I think the author might be dead or something, since it's been a year since their last comment and a year for the one before. ...............
Stupid mc. ......................................................................................................................................................................................................
I liked it a lot, but it's stopped in time unfortunately I hope the author will post again because this story is very alternative and I want to know the end of Freeza
i love this story i dont know how long your going to take a break for but please what ever you do please dont drop this story its one of the best ones ive read in a while.
question for athor if you scroll down did you drop this novel? it's really good so I hop you havens dropped it but you can chose for yourself
any chance to get more chapters? ive been enjoying it a lot, though it seems like I'm a few years behind. id gladly update my rating if more chapters come.
Bruh love it interesting story... .... ... .... Bruh love it interesting story... Bruh love it interesting story... Bruh love it interesting story...
the mc is brain dead far too kind for someone living in that kind of world feeling sympathy for absolute everything he fuc*ng died trying to save a dying fox FFS the story doesn't even sound like it is due to his dependence on the system he was a dragon ball huge fan yet he must ask the system for every single thing. the side chars are just too shallow mc for some reason care more about two guys that he helped (their son tried to bully mc btw right in front of them) but not his father who has done nothing wrong to him.
this is a great story i read all day until it was night and i started this morning even tho it is not done its a great story tho i wonder why you made them break up it was a fun story but he should have spent alot of more time with her but it was great [img=update]
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I honestly think this was a masterpiece and tou should not have dropped this everything in this was so cool i honestly binge-read it in two days but was a little sad to see that it was dropped 2 years ago
The story is all around horrible . Atrocious writing coupled with a MC that's so stupid. Did this guy even go to school before being reincarnated. It's like he was living under a rock and all he has is the dragon ball storyline memorized. No self control and no independent thought. Some guy gave the story of the best review and so I read 9 chapters. It was not the best. All this guy does is everything goku did, or another dbz character. He has absolutely no original idea. An actual monkey is smarter.
Didn't know you wrote this story. I'm a big fan of your hair length ficwhen it first came out. Maybe 8 or 9 chapters and I was gone from webnovel like six months and now I have an another one to enjoy thank you for your work
This novel has a lot of potential. But as a reader, i suffer intelligence torture 😑. Hmmm the character is pretty bland and plain🤔. A lot and it's hard to explain🤐😶😔
waiting for get picked up again?!-------------------------------++---+++-+----------+++-------+--------------------------------------------++++
Good book.)) It is one of the best fanfic on dragonball which i found. I read this story in russian. Someone take this to translate. I have red the another story and here liked me too. Good luck, author. ＼(＾▽＾)／ Спасибо за труд! Продолжайте творить!)
This story is a work of art. But my own personal taste made me choose your Raditz Fanfic. I like that one better. The Writing style in this fic is better but I like the Raditz one more
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Not a Rev. ... ... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Honestly Not a Rev! ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
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Alright, this ln is Probably just like most system novels With slightly more of focus in doing what the mc wants but all it needs to be carry on update then it would get a higher rating
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It’s really good at the start and at the middle the end gets very bland and then he ends up dropping i’m sending this out here as a warning to everyone new trying to read this so don’t get your hopes up
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Ok gotta be honest first 100 chapters were good but continuing there it's gone down hill I don't think author has thought too much about MCs future even as far as going to stop his strength development
This novel needs to listen to Dory and keep swimming. This novel may be following the story line like some other novels, but that is just the way I like it.
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I think I can safely say THIS IS THE BEST DBZ FANFIC I HAVE READ TO DATE! I usually struggle to find a entertaining DBZ fanfic stories as most don’t even get past 20 chapters, even the universal crossovers, before the author gives up on it, but this seems to be the holy grail of DBZ fanfics. I sincerely hope that you don’t drop this story. While I am not an author myself nor do I know what to look for in order for a story to be “perfect” the way editors can, I am a ******** DBZ fan and this story has hooked me with only the original show to match it in terms of how AMAZING it is. Although I can’t say this for all of the readers, only those who enjoyed this story as much as I have, I thank you for putting forth all this effort into this creation of yours. And always remember, there will be those who won’t like what you write and try to bully you into writing what they want, but YOU are the author NOT them, and for every 1 of them there will be 10 of us true fans to back you up no matter the situation. This story is yours and I think your heading in the right direction, YOUR DIRECTION.
Can you start updating again I need more chapter it been a year already I need more.😎😎😎😎😎😎
It's awful. Watching saiyans playing house, as lovely families. Saiyans aren't any like that, even 6th universe Saiyans aren't like that. So cringe
I think the author might be dead or something, since it's been a year since their last comment and a year for the one before. ...............
Stupid mc. ......................................................................................................................................................................................................
I liked it a lot, but it's stopped in time unfortunately I hope the author will post again because this story is very alternative and I want to know the end of Freeza
i love this story i dont know how long your going to take a break for but please what ever you do please dont drop this story its one of the best ones ive read in a while.
question for athor if you scroll down did you drop this novel? it's really good so I hop you havens dropped it but you can chose for yourself
any chance to get more chapters? ive been enjoying it a lot, though it seems like I'm a few years behind. id gladly update my rating if more chapters come.
Bruh love it interesting story... .... ... .... Bruh love it interesting story... Bruh love it interesting story... Bruh love it interesting story...
the mc is brain dead far too kind for someone living in that kind of world feeling sympathy for absolute everything he fuc*ng died trying to save a dying fox FFS the story doesn't even sound like it is due to his dependence on the system he was a dragon ball huge fan yet he must ask the system for every single thing. the side chars are just too shallow mc for some reason care more about two guys that he helped (their son tried to bully mc btw right in front of them) but not his father who has done nothing wrong to him.
this is a great story i read all day until it was night and i started this morning even tho it is not done its a great story tho i wonder why you made them break up it was a fun story but he should have spent alot of more time with her but it was great [img=update]
hi vhbli`rhliabliehgauel`grwheluagerjbugilurehagiuhaerguheegliueahrgurielagaer;guh;earuhgeourhgae;rugheorugheo;auhgo;eaugh;oagho;ehg;oahg;oaehgo;e
I honestly think this was a masterpiece and tou should not have dropped this everything in this was so cool i honestly binge-read it in two days but was a little sad to see that it was dropped 2 years ago
The story is all around horrible . Atrocious writing coupled with a MC that's so stupid. Did this guy even go to school before being reincarnated. It's like he was living under a rock and all he has is the dragon ball storyline memorized. No self control and no independent thought. Some guy gave the story of the best review and so I read 9 chapters. It was not the best. All this guy does is everything goku did, or another dbz character. He has absolutely no original idea. An actual monkey is smarter.
Didn't know you wrote this story. I'm a big fan of your hair length ficwhen it first came out. Maybe 8 or 9 chapters and I was gone from webnovel like six months and now I have an another one to enjoy thank you for your work
This novel has a lot of potential. But as a reader, i suffer intelligence torture 😑. Hmmm the character is pretty bland and plain🤔. A lot and it's hard to explain🤐😶😔
waiting for get picked up again?!-------------------------------++---+++-+----------+++-------+--------------------------------------------++++
Good book.)) It is one of the best fanfic on dragonball which i found. I read this story in russian. Someone take this to translate. I have red the another story and here liked me too. Good luck, author. ＼(＾▽＾)／ Спасибо за труд! Продолжайте творить!)
This story is a work of art. But my own personal taste made me choose your Raditz Fanfic. I like that one better. The Writing style in this fic is better but I like the Raditz one more
Has #dragon ball as a tag behind the gate Me:LET ME IN LET ME IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNN People start joining in Me:LET US IN LET US IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNN
expexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexp
Not a Rev. ... ... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Honestly Not a Rev! ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
Spoiler de révélation Alright, this ln is Probably just like most system novels With slightly more of focus in doing what the mc wants but all it needs to be carry on update then it would get a higher rating
Spoiler de révélation ............................................................................................................................................
It’s really good at the start and at the middle the end gets very bland and then he ends up dropping i’m sending this out here as a warning to everyone new trying to read this so don’t get your hopes up
Spoiler de révélation .............................................................................................................................................................
Ok gotta be honest first 100 chapters were good but continuing there it's gone down hill I don't think author has thought too much about MCs future even as far as going to stop his strength development
This novel needs to listen to Dory and keep swimming. This novel may be following the story line like some other novels, but that is just the way I like it.
Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp Exp
I think I can safely say THIS IS THE BEST DBZ FANFIC I HAVE READ TO DATE! I usually struggle to find a entertaining DBZ fanfic stories as most don’t even get past 20 chapters, even the universal crossovers, before the author gives up on it, but this seems to be the holy grail of DBZ fanfics. I sincerely hope that you don’t drop this story. While I am not an author myself nor do I know what to look for in order for a story to be “perfect” the way editors can, I am a ******** DBZ fan and this story has hooked me with only the original show to match it in terms of how AMAZING it is. Although I can’t say this for all of the readers, only those who enjoyed this story as much as I have, I thank you for putting forth all this effort into this creation of yours. And always remember, there will be those who won’t like what you write and try to bully you into writing what they want, but YOU are the author NOT them, and for every 1 of them there will be 10 of us true fans to back you up no matter the situation. This story is yours and I think your heading in the right direction, YOUR DIRECTION.
Can you start updating again I need more chapter it been a year already I need more.😎😎😎😎😎😎
It's awful. Watching saiyans playing house, as lovely families. Saiyans aren't any like that, even 6th universe Saiyans aren't like that. So cringe