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-Semi Simp [ SS ] and Plot Forced [ ** ] The only way to describe MC is he a SS cause he interested in a chick he just met and half his motivation is a fk her. But its SS cause,, he also wants to use her to get influence, power..so SS. not full S. The entire relationship is plot forced with MC complimenting her and getting her affection. compliment +1 love, and thats plot forced. Other than that its very interesting. MC has system and basically a RWBY tony stark,. Long ass chp and other shit all fine. Its written in manner which someone with RBWY can understand [ hope info is provided later on ] I suggest just dedicate a chp to show relationship or write a paragraph to show relationship progress [ something like couple months passed, etc ]rather the system compliment + 1 affection shit cause its shitty CD. other than that its good. And to also minimize system info use and jargon, it just messes the reading experience GL .. .
Loved the idea and hope to see more of the execution, just wish mc takes clear advantage of the per level stats better since he gets more stat points per level the more classes he has, he could probably get all the electric basic crafting classes after squire and apprentice and then go to hand crafting classes before going into something like enchanting and he would have a full enchanting armour at low level and massive amount of stat points per level at his low overall lvl
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Chapters are long, if there are grammar mistakes than I didn't notice, characters are well written aspecially Tony. Overall its one of the best Tony Stark fiction that i read.
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Really well written. Chapters are long, if there are grammar mistakes than I didn't notice, and author captures tony stark spirit, that arrogance very well. There were some things that annoyed me but this is one of the better things you can read here
~Author here~ If you hadn't guess it from the name of the fic, it's a story about Tony Stark with a Gamer system. I don't know what else to say, besides that it starts off in RWBY. This shouldn't be too much of a spoiler, but he will end up visiting other words, and at some point even he might even return back to the Marvel World. Chapters are fairly long. I aim for about 5k words for each. I hope my grammar isn't too bad, but if you find any mistakes, do point them out for me. Thanks for reading!