Tear a Path

LV 10

WTFox

One of the best novels I've read by far. And I've read an ocean full. The world building and character arcs and plot developments great, with good grammar to boot. Really glad I added this to my "must read" list. Highly recommended

6yr 8

LV 12

Dragneil

Great story. One of the best original novels I have read. It is a top 10 material. This story is better than some of the fan-fictions up there.

6yr 7

LV 5

Peaches

I tried to like this story but it was a struggle to read. In many instances there were missing words or improper grammar. The author really needs an editor and to proofread their work. Many of the sentences feel unsophisticated and drawn out (as in, the wording is ******, and using more words than necessary.) Many sentences can be written to be more concise, impactful, and meaningful, delivering the same amount, if not more information in a way that is more enjoyable to read (as in better word flow). A good way to improve in this area is to write a few sentences, then see how many different ways you can rewrite it while portraying the same information. Sometimes just simply rearranging words will make it many times more pleasant to read. This may increase the amount of time it takes you to put out chapters, but any author whom loves their own work wont mind putting in the extra effort to improve its quality. Example - a random piece of paragraph from Ch.12) "Zhao Wei couldn't continue watching any longer as he could see that the horn was slowly being inched out with every kick. Problem was even if he wanted to kill or capture it, he didn't dare come near it as he was sure he wasn't rocky balboa and wouldn't get back up after the first hit. Secondly, he felt what it's fur felt like, although it looked fluffy it was tough as steel." (73 words) After rewriting) "Zhao Wei realized he could no longer stay idle, the bunny’s every kick freed its horn inch by inch. But he was faced with a dilemma; he was no Rocky Balboa, one hit and it was lights-out for him. Secondly, though soft and fluffy in appearance, he had felt the bunny’s fur was as tough as steel." (57 words - and what i feel is a much smoother word flow) Another problem i had with this story was, some things were just unrealistic, even for a fantasy/post apoc setting. Shoving ones foot into burning ash will not help the healing process of wounds on the foot, instead you'll get burns that'll become open wounds and fester with infections. Fresh ash may be sterile, but id never suggest it be used in place of clean bandaging, even if you didn't have any, using hot ash in this case would only make things ten times worse. Now his hands are burnt, his torso wounds are burnt, and his feet are burnt. In a more realistic fashion, the story would end there, he would be royally f**ked. Next problem, and the one that left me rolling my eyes and moving on from the story is the rabbit somehow knowing where the human heart is. For it to know applying chest compressions (safely i might add - given its strength) could stimulate the heart into beating was just silly, even for a supernaturally strong rabbit that can apparently damage a tree that's as hard as iron. (There's also little reason for it to do so, given it was captured by the guy just prior. If i were the rabbit, id have probably just let the fool croak.) Despite the fact that it shows human-like intelligence in the following chapter (Which i only read partially through before stopping) that should not mean knowledge of human-related things. Things that happen within a novel need to be at least somewhat believable within the scope of their genre. I wont be reading the rest of the story, but i hope the novel tones down such things in future chapters. :)

6yr 6

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LV 13

BER5ERK

l'm just writing for anyone who reads this review on this good novel pls read this and push it to top 10 cause this is simply better than some actual webnovels posted here on this website. if ya wanna see a normal dude become the king of beasts with his at first weak powers then please support this novel with powerstones to make more people see this and for the author a man named shia labeouf once said,"JUST DO IT!" keep up the good work dude

6yr 4

LV 10

Kakkarotto

Absolutely trash..... I mean at first the MC starts with his gf and they separate when they were standing at arms reach and in the middle of a house, so if the earth did split between them they both would have been dropped without even knowing what happened to them. Second the supposedly deity gets angry when MC is unconscious and can't answer the system or whatever then gives him a supposedly "weak" class and makes it so he can't do anything. Thirdly in the entire world only MC was unconscious so the "deity" got angry at him. Like really.... At try to make it bearable. Author purposely makes him extremely weak and gives him a bunny to make his enemies die of laughter.... Really, are you trying to get some kind of Pokémon and apocalypse mixed sh.it. Trash

5yr 3

LV 6

Veort

Separation trope, enough said. ....................................................................... ............................................................

5yr 1

LV 6

Ideal

Honestly author just submit an appeal for them to consider signing your book. There’s always that option. They have previously signed some very bad books, and yours is actually ok

5yr 1

LV 6

Ideal

This is really good. Better than a lot of the **** on here. Sometimes it gets frustrating but it’s because the story takes paths that you don’t expect. And this is something great about it. YOU get so mad sometimes that you end up liking it and understand that sometimes things don’t go your way but still end up good

5yr 1

LV 13

BER5ERK

The story came off amazing in the beginning unfortunately l feel like the latest chapters have been lacking something or any form of system upgrade but l'll continue to read cause l still like it

6yr 1

LV 13

BER5ERK

Just wondering is this story inspired by everyone else is a returnee and re:monster? Also l’ve only read 7 chapters but the sypnosis sounds alot like it. The webnovel overall is really enjoyable from what l’ve read especially the bantar with the boyfriend and girlfriend in the beginning hope you continue with the good quality👌

6yr 1

LV 1

zd4zaaa

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4yr

LV 3

8Eight

The novel is not bad per say, but it's really not for me It starts out pretty cute and nice the first 4 chapters or so but after that there's alot of, dear God he is dumber than a box of rocks moments That seemingly only apply to him which is a bit..eh It's well written and all but the Mc is just too dumb and naive for me

4yr

LV 11

Bobidibop

The author is a bad man, making us wait a day to be able to read his scripture. Horrible, when I found I had reached the end I started to starve, just like the Dracas. We need for him to give us a big boon, enough to last for 2 whole years, just like Jormungand. However, don't sacrifice anyone to be able to continue writing.

6yr

LV 5

Niko91

WTF how do you have a grade higher then 3, don't read it drags you in just to f... with you like 3-4 time the MC decisons dosen't sem logical ,and the author gets feedback in the coments but he doesn't addresses the problem.

6yr

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LV 6

ClayRayne

Good story, look forward to a few thousand chapters. (217 read so far) .

6yr

LV 14

Crouness

Overall a really good story a little hard to follow at times, lots of little flash backs to past memories, and MC is not to OP which makes the story exciting(for me anyways) very short chapters

6yr

LV 10

Hitexh

The novel start quite interesting for the first 10 chaps, and afterwards it become a long detail and not important leveling story.. from here i skip most of them, just peek at the title.. untill he come out and meet apes, the story start keeping up. Here, i still skip some part. The moment MC meet human-snake tribe, the story can be score 5 stars! There is only one or two paragraph i skip here. Overall, although there is too much detail world building can still be found here and there, but I can see how it become better..

6yr

LV 12

Snake551g

I was curious about how the relationship will develop with the characters. How do you plan to develop the relationship betweem the mc and the women? Will the system comtinue to play an aid role or will it change in later parts.

6yr