nothing against you but That doesn't sound delicious
Okei he meets Merlin and talks to him melin trusts him easily because he is also a wizard I can handle it but you meet Gaius and he writes you a recommendation?Why? Because he finds you nice? he doesn't even know you, And then suddenly you have a room next to Morgana? Does that mean you'll be let into the castle?! Because a doctor writes you a recommendation and not only that you even have a room next to the king's ward? That doesn't make any sense you are an unknown, Uther kills people for far less, he would never let a stranger into the castle let alone near Morgana, magic is forbidden in Camelot, times are troubled, Caius has become very wise through his long experience with Uther and magic. the way you present your characters is strange logic and rationality do not count here I recommend a rewrite, take a look again at the Series might help I know that this is a fan fic, but you have to build some logic and reason behind it otherwise your story does not make the slightest sense There is not much to see here
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Edward: Usually, he doesn't like to read his siblings' thoughts hahahaha never laugh so much This guy is a stalker and always reads the thoughts of his siblings. He has no respect for their privacy, no no he has no respect for anyone's privacy xD
hmm I think you're right but that's the disadvantage he doesn't have his complete memory of his previous life otherwise he could have prepared himself better.
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hmm thats not good his thirst will cause him real trouble he is like jasper Hopefully he will get something like carlisle ability
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I also Support this
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You're trying to bring logic in here but that's not in it your and every other fan fic has little real logic in it, it's like the name says a fan fic you could have your mc do whatever you want, I think this is about the benefits you wished for but didn't take advantage of that's why he's questioning it because you left them unused, that's why he seems unhappy, i would change it a little bit but like i said it's your fan fic I still do not find it bad everyone has his own taste
Never thought I would give 5 stars but I am satisfied that the MC is not just a ridiculous side character but helps to address the problems and still leaves Merlin enough room to grow, I think it is very well done, the end of the original series was very unsatisfactory, this is a good opportunity to set things right, even the updates are fine for me as long as there is always more to come of course.
I think the same I mean Omnitrix and then Phoenix, that's all well and good but that power is not his own, he should not rely on outside forces, we all know how that can turn out.
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