The Shadow Soul System(DC)

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SHEOGORATH

Your journey it began because YOU DIED. Out of your cell you ran and then YOU DIED. You pause to catch your breath And die another gruesome death So now you creep around each corner terrified Humanity restored and then YOU DIED. A graveyard to explore... HAHA DENIED. For every step you take Is just one more fatal mistake So you must learn to take the torture in your stride Bells chime torment Darkest descent Every soul spent To doom sent... Down in the depths of the dead Feel the agony Scars from a thousand wounds In your memory Over and over Grind through the butchery Once more you'll run this Gauntlet of misery Look to the sun's rays Behold and offer praise Look to the sun's rays Comfort in the glow Brave you may be You think that your mind is tough? Come have a go If you think you're hard enough Dive into death Embrace all the treachery Learn to enjoy The bloodshed and butchery Bells chime torment Darkest descent Every soul spent Once more you DIED.

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the_great_old_one

I love anything to do with dark souls and this fanfic is really good. ........................................................................

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Corruptesp1rit

i like how you did the system and hope you keep it up.

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azertyuiop

great start . love the story the writing and especially the mc . keep on the good work .and i hope that you continue with this fanfic and don't drop it

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destro45

I like it please don't drop or left it alone for to long at least try and update it sometimes. Or try and tell us if you jave something to do.

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Tidas

I loving the story so far, you have a natural talent for picking the setting and makeing it interesting. The only flaw i see in your writing is it feels a bit too fast paced in some places. If you keep at it im sure can even do an original novel if you feel up to it.

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Some_Random_Man

What is harem size going to be? ............................................................................................................................................................................................................................

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BigStig97

Great start. Please don't drop I love dark souls but there aren't that many great fics about them. Definitely worth a read my people. Also author my friend, you need to go to dark souls and get you a 8 foot tall big tidied gf. they are everywhere just pick one.

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Shurasik

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Gh0st00

starts out pretty good Kelly progressively gets darker and darker and darker until the Pam MC starts doing a little psychotic and killing people just because he sets fire to a city killing a bunch of people then beats up the Justice League and then he Partners up with Darksider

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antmanFN

It's good read it now but I'm really writing this for one thing exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp

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FriendlyCacodemon

Really good execution of implementing dark sluls content into dc , kinda reminds me of that dark souls naruto fic but i personaly enjoy this more, all it really needs is some typos fixed and it would be perfect

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noiceguy420

my stars are about the story so far and yh it's good af i just hope that even if the author had him join the justice league he wont make the mc's personality heroic and btw author continue your i hunt protaginsts

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IntheDarkness

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JooH

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trudny1

Review as of chapter 42. Rating: 4,6 This novel has very high potential. Author isn't relying on plot from the canon of DxD to drive the story. Now, why 4,6 instead of pure 5,0: Every chapter has at least 1 grammatical error, but it doesn't make it unreadable, you can easily infer the intent behind the writing. Example of those mistakes: incorrect usage of your and you're (at the bottom for author I will shortly describe which one to use where), incorrectly written word, or using an incorrect word (example: "you are very tough" vs "you are very though"). My other gripe would be that the romantic/emotional development of some female protagonists towards MC wasn't fully shown but just told that 'it happened' (Esdeath and Akeno). Overall the novel shows great promise with few issues that don't take away from the overall experience. We use "your" when we describe someones possession - for example: your dog, your pokemon, your pen, your anger, your death energy. We use "you're" when we describe someones state of being: you're angry, you're done for, you're victorious, you're dead. Hope this helps.

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God_slayer09

can't wait until the rewrite catches up with the old version really looking forward to the continued novel... Can't wait to see all the animals he's going to tame

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Frizepize

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MirukuTaku

I want more its one of the best multi verse stories I've ever read😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃