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Gaming is the only common interest. People are steering through the worlds of advance gaming, the competition is never-ending. Only a few games managed to make their mark among billions of users. There was no doubt that those games worth spending time on. The desire to be the ultimate number one raged a cold war and fired the temperature through the roof. Consequently, leading to browbeating and leg pulling.
The game 'Sovereign Ruler' was definitely a crowd favourite. The game aided the increment in the gross rate of the company. Patina Lin and Jake Lin, both siblings, played this game. Patina, the most celebrated player of the game, earned money in various live quests. Jake, unfortunately, couldn't play like an average player let alone a pro one. Because his right hand was defected by birth.
He was sure that he would never be able to become a pro like his older sibling. But then, sadly, Patina Lin committed suicide.
Jake Lin was left all alone in the world to fight away the conspiracies and bullying.
After submitting the missing report he got himself in massive car accident. He was thrown away by the almost fatal accident but surprisingly he made it alive. A voice welcomed him "Hello Defected Human" upon waking. He looked for the origin of the voice but it didn't belong to the outer world rather it came from his own head.
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Author's note: There are few things that should be cleared before you pick up the story and give it a go. 1. The intention of writing this gaming novel is not to educate noobs. There are so many gaming novels talking about every skills dragging hundred of chapters in increasing the levels of the skills and blah blah. So to say you won't find cliche things. If you cannot digest something new then do not try this story. 2. My writing style differ. I am an original author and I have my creative space so my writing has its difference which might be new or unacceptable for many of you. So if you decide to read it then it means you can tolerate different writing style. If you still complain then your complains would be considered groundless. 3. I am not native English speaker and English is my fourth run on language. You can expect grammer 'degenration' at many points in the novel. If you feel sour reading poor grammer based story then my suggestion is to save your taste buds. 4. I have no plans of including romance or harem in this story. 5. This story is created in alternate universe so keep your common sense limited to yourself. 6. I will be hiring artist to draw main characters so that you can have general idea about our MC's team. 7. If necessary I will create character lists and the list of professions other than the weapons. Anyone interested to take look at those lists can join my discord server. 8. Enjoy the story development with the author. Have questions other than the above mentioned then leave a comment here.
Reading the first 5 chapters, I want to point out something. Jake Lin, a defected human who can't use his right hand but is a genius at mathematic. It seem like everything was normal as he got home to see his older sister, playing that popular game and possibly became a professional gamer. Then it all went spiral and out of control when she decided to use some code which caused a huge disaster and Jake Lin became unconscious, only to wake up with a "system". So far, this storyline is intriguing and kept me interested but one flaw thing about this novel is the formatting. It got a little bit difficult to understand when the conversation is jumbled up in one paragraph. I suggest the author to separate the paragraph into 1-2 sentences for us reader to read it clearly and not get confused. I wished to say more but so far with only 5 chapters out, I can only wait for more to see the development and how Jake Lin will utilize his system to benefit him such as, getting rid of the handicapped status.
For anyone wondering, I think the novel has the potential to be fantastic. However, the author desparately needs to hire an editor. You can understand what is happening and what the author is describing, but the verbiage and sentence structure is really, really bad.
I only really have one comment, and it’s vital that the person publishing this book on here reads it: Please, for the love of god, find someone to handle the grammar for you. Find a proper translator to handle this so it doesn’t look so blocky or cut off in areas. I read the last book you had on here, but after a while, the grammar started causing massive headaches. Your story has plenty of potential, you’re a great Storyteller. However, you NEED to find someone who can make it look more readable. You will scare away hundreds of potential readers who can’t handle this lack of care towards the language and the story. Otherwise, you’re doing great. Just make sure you work hard to find someone who has English as their first language to properly go through and fix the grammar. Using translation tools DOES NOT WORK.
Reading the first few chapters I was intrigued with the story, it had potential. However the grammar and writing are confusing, this is harsh but I can barely understand the story.
I've checked the novel out. it's so bad mate. can someone please delete this already? the author must be braindead or something. i thought it was so good when I saw the other reviews and the win-win ranking but it's a joke
I believe there is a problem in the translations for this novel. The grammer and sentence structure can be confusing. I could not make it past a few chapter before giving up. I tried looking ahead and it didn't seem to get better.
the story is amazing but the writing quality is bad ( no offence ) you can understand the meaning of the things the author is trying to portray but it gets kind of annoying reading grammar mistakes here and there. But if the author becomes better at english, this story would be a masterpiece. That's my take [img=recommend][img=recommend]
It seems likea good story, but badly translated. Despite many missing connecting words, and improper word form choices, I was interested enough to keep reading until I ran out of chapters. I suspect that practice will improve the writing quickly, because the story telling is decent in spite of the slightly broken English. Some suspension of disbelief is required for me, since the setting feels rather game-within-a-game, but as long as I set aside the expectation that the main character lives in the same reality that I do, it seems fairly consistent so far.
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READ IT GUYS! Read it to know the worth of the story, a very interesting and exciting System trope novel. The gaming Characters and Story plot is just great. It takes a lot of chapters for me to be hooked with the story, but this book completely made me hooked by just the first chapter.
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This would officially be the first time I would review a book under the genre Video games and I'm glad I am now. Jake's character for one thing isn't the usual brooding bad boy or dumb at first and well interestingly has a disablity (for now I think). The first chapter was a little fast paced and few grammar errors but not one we can't overlook. I have confidence with the next chapters, it's bound to be a masterpiece. The next chapters took a drastic turn as Patina his sister mysteriously committed suicide 😥, the reason still unknown. The system was introduced smoothly and might I add, the option given to him to either accept it or die(because he was already in a life threatening situation got me cracking up 👀🤫 who says no to an offer like that? 😂 Alread added this to my reading list. All being said, keep up the good work.
This story looks like it will be good. I'll change my review to 5 stars if is can get some editing into something I can actually understand.
Grammar is a little bad. But other than that, it is a great book. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
I can't say much, It's good in it's own way but the quality of it's writing is quite a problem. The space between dialogue and narration is too tight, sometimes it makes me confused and lost. But the story is overally good, kudos to the author!
The book has an interesting start. It is well described and well structured world background.. Looking forward to be it in top 50. Well done author
I really liked the gaming system and the characters who surprisely got me interested and involved even if it is not my favorite genre! The author’s grammar and descriptions are very cured so I totally suggest It to everyone and not just readers interested in gaming!
this seems interesting and the interesting point for me is that mc can complete tasks and gain XP to new abilities and I will continue reading it when more chapters come out, good luck author 👍