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I would of gave this a 5 star but there are some problems like for example the misgendering of characters he/her also him/his when you mentioning a girl and characters description, like when you introduced a character it would be nice to describe how they look example hair color and so on and the mentioning of jutsu like“henge no jutsu” add a little description next to it (transformation jutsu) and for the same thing for the villages konohagure add (hidden leaf) that would be nice if you can fix these issues I read up to 24 chapters so idk if you fixed these issues in the later chapters but it should be nice to fix these issues in the older chapters too
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Well written but has 1 major demerit. 122 chapters in and he's still in the academy...... C'mon. at this rate its looking like i'm closer to retirement than he is to shippuden
love the story so far a little slow, but that is OK only problem is the jetsu names in Japanese. make them in English so I know witch jetsu is it
An incredible Naruto fanfic set in Kirigakure! The slow-burn character development and immersive world-building are masterfully done. A must-read without a doubt.
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please like this if it reached 100 chapters, so I'll start reading it, but in the first chapter, I can see it's potential
I like your story author. However, since his father's death you are showing how Ren is creating boundaries and "using" his friends, watching everything with indifference. I understand that after a close person's death people needs time to heal and all. But the idea of not having bonds because they are weakness and using everyone, always seeing things with indifference is soon going to be the same as literally 99% other fanfics where authors think that is somehow the best option. Without bonds soon the character will feel mechanical and like no emotional intelligence. It also wouldn't create hooks, tension while particularly tricky situations unfold. Forgive me if i seemed like ranting, but a lot of authors make their character cold, indifferent, dark, etc etc. and not always it makes sense. Especially here he felt love with his parents, had friends. Instead of weakness it could be shown as powerful motivation to not loose them and improve more. The other characters could also have significant growth, and together with Ren, could dunno have more impact than just some one man show. Just my opinion that can make the story more engaging and real. Nobody will become Madara level powerful by the time they are in early teens. You said so that realistic growth will be there. Rivalry, and helping each other grow is sorta more feasible than one dude becoming a mechanical machine and training non stop and using everyone to bis advantage for years until he feels ready to face the world, which can take decade and still me me tally sane. I jst wanted to convey my thoughts, as i wouldn't have bothered writing so much if i hadn't been hooked. The chapters of bonding and the subsequent couple chapter where Toshiro died and the funeral and all, how he said his mother doesn't need to be strong all the time, how his mother and father met, all these were really nice, i actually felt the emotions. In anycase, good luck with your story.
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W fucking fic, i like the pacing and th character development, even though yu somtimes get the grammer wrong, its only basic, it doesent affect the reading experience alot.
This is a good fic in the hidden mist. The Mc is a few years younger than Kakashi. Smart Mc who's not edgy and cares about people. Give it a try
I just don’t like how he can heal himself because he was studying nursing for 1 year in college so now he can learn medicine jutusu in 2s and he can regrow back his legs and arms now I’m exaggerating a bit but u can get the idea he uses his knowledge and corporate it in his jutusu like no one thought off before like come on it’s just stupid for example how I know pi=3.14 so know I can use that in my jutusu it make a planet and go to space like Superman… i’m just saying how stupid it is and how OP hes going to be because of that dumbshit with knowledge of his past life can he just be normal and being op is fine but balance it make things simpler by not adding the aliens shit in the future no Boruto so he doesn’t need to be super op to fight them off and upgrade chunin and jonin and make it so everyone is important and not canon fire
Revelar spoiler I would of gave this a 5 star but there are some problems like for example the misgendering of characters he/her also him/his when you mentioning a girl and characters description, like when you introduced a character it would be nice to describe how they look example hair color and so on and the mentioning of jutsu like“henge no jutsu” add a little description next to it (transformation jutsu) and for the same thing for the villages konohagure add (hidden leaf) that would be nice if you can fix these issues I read up to 24 chapters so idk if you fixed these issues in the later chapters but it should be nice to fix these issues in the older chapters too
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Well written but has 1 major demerit. 122 chapters in and he's still in the academy...... C'mon. at this rate its looking like i'm closer to retirement than he is to shippuden
love the story so far a little slow, but that is OK only problem is the jetsu names in Japanese. make them in English so I know witch jetsu is it
An incredible Naruto fanfic set in Kirigakure! The slow-burn character development and immersive world-building are masterfully done. A must-read without a doubt.
yeaaaaaaa!!!!!!! .................................................................................................................,,,,,,,,,
please like this if it reached 100 chapters, so I'll start reading it, but in the first chapter, I can see it's potential
I like your story author. However, since his father's death you are showing how Ren is creating boundaries and "using" his friends, watching everything with indifference. I understand that after a close person's death people needs time to heal and all. But the idea of not having bonds because they are weakness and using everyone, always seeing things with indifference is soon going to be the same as literally 99% other fanfics where authors think that is somehow the best option. Without bonds soon the character will feel mechanical and like no emotional intelligence. It also wouldn't create hooks, tension while particularly tricky situations unfold. Forgive me if i seemed like ranting, but a lot of authors make their character cold, indifferent, dark, etc etc. and not always it makes sense. Especially here he felt love with his parents, had friends. Instead of weakness it could be shown as powerful motivation to not loose them and improve more. The other characters could also have significant growth, and together with Ren, could dunno have more impact than just some one man show. Just my opinion that can make the story more engaging and real. Nobody will become Madara level powerful by the time they are in early teens. You said so that realistic growth will be there. Rivalry, and helping each other grow is sorta more feasible than one dude becoming a mechanical machine and training non stop and using everyone to bis advantage for years until he feels ready to face the world, which can take decade and still me me tally sane. I jst wanted to convey my thoughts, as i wouldn't have bothered writing so much if i hadn't been hooked. The chapters of bonding and the subsequent couple chapter where Toshiro died and the funeral and all, how he said his mother doesn't need to be strong all the time, how his mother and father met, all these were really nice, i actually felt the emotions. In anycase, good luck with your story.
Revelar spoiler IT'S PERFECT BRO CONTINUE [img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it]
W fucking fic, i like the pacing and th character development, even though yu somtimes get the grammer wrong, its only basic, it doesent affect the reading experience alot.
This is a good fic in the hidden mist. The Mc is a few years younger than Kakashi. Smart Mc who's not edgy and cares about people. Give it a try
I just don’t like how he can heal himself because he was studying nursing for 1 year in college so now he can learn medicine jutusu in 2s and he can regrow back his legs and arms now I’m exaggerating a bit but u can get the idea he uses his knowledge and corporate it in his jutusu like no one thought off before like come on it’s just stupid for example how I know pi=3.14 so know I can use that in my jutusu it make a planet and go to space like Superman… i’m just saying how stupid it is and how OP hes going to be because of that dumbshit with knowledge of his past life can he just be normal and being op is fine but balance it make things simpler by not adding the aliens shit in the future no Boruto so he doesn’t need to be super op to fight them off and upgrade chunin and jonin and make it so everyone is important and not canon fire
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