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Honestly, I was pleasantly surprised when I started reading, the character is organically integrated into the world, he gains strength not from a momentary buff out of nowhere, but from pain, labor and blood. The main character is also interesting in his own right, the narrative from the Marines' point of view is also pleasant and logical, and the other characters and interactions with them are also interesting to read. In general, before I started reading I didn’t expect anything, but here you have a hidden gem
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Sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation are all great, making for a very palatable and easy to read story. Very fast updates is nice. I understand that as a fanfic you may want to get right into the meat and potatoes asap but the lightspeed pacing makes it a bit hard to immerse into and connect with our MC and other characters. MC's growth, while natural and understandable, doesn't feel earned from the perspective of a reader. Like yes, he did take months, if not years to master some abilities, but almost none of them were done through dangerous moments as is typical in a series like One Piece. He safely trains BTS and we get a time skip to when he hits a milestone. I think the story would of benefited from each upgrade having come through an arduous event. World building is great of course, it's One Piece after all, and the author applies it quite well in this fanfic with many different settings for each "arc".
like this fanfic its simple and no nonsense crossover power system, but i hope author can develop more on story if not this fanfic will end maybe in 100 chapter
I appreciate the fast paced nature of the story. MC gains strength by working hard and in a realistic manner without going outside the logic of the one piece world. His personality is a great mix of serious and comic relief (its like a younger version of Garp). I wouldve liked to see him become an admiral but I dont believe it will happen.
Not perfect, but still a very enjoyable read. MC is a Haki expert and it does not seem like he is planning to eat a DF, which is a big plus for me. There are quite a few time skips, which gives the feeling that the story is a little fastpaced. The biggest test for this FF is that canon is approaching and we still don't see anything changing from MC presence. I'm not looking for a change that completely overhauls canon, but I'm still not looking forward to reliving canon just from our MC perspective. I hope the author has a proper plan in place. Thank you for your efforts, keep it up!
My only problem is how fast the strength progression is especially since you called systems cheese yet he arguably gets stronger faster in this fic than most system fanfictions, this guy is either blessed asf or written to get everything like how he has advanced arm n obs by chapter 13 or smth, honestly ion like the story but its still alr
haven't read it but there are only a few fanfiction without a system as a crutch.
It is very cool fanfic, I hope you will continue it, I beg you ! Thank you for the chapters very much !!! ❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥
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Make sure to leave a review folks! Planning on releasing 2-3 chapters per day for a while, so hope you guys enjoy it. I will gladly accept any criticism as my writing is still a little rusty
i just want to see this coming ....................................................................................................................................
New chapters pleaseeee 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻
Honestly, I was pleasantly surprised when I started reading, the character is organically integrated into the world, he gains strength not from a momentary buff out of nowhere, but from pain, labor and blood. The main character is also interesting in his own right, the narrative from the Marines' point of view is also pleasant and logical, and the other characters and interactions with them are also interesting to read. In general, before I started reading I didn’t expect anything, but here you have a hidden gem
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Sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation are all great, making for a very palatable and easy to read story. Very fast updates is nice. I understand that as a fanfic you may want to get right into the meat and potatoes asap but the lightspeed pacing makes it a bit hard to immerse into and connect with our MC and other characters. MC's growth, while natural and understandable, doesn't feel earned from the perspective of a reader. Like yes, he did take months, if not years to master some abilities, but almost none of them were done through dangerous moments as is typical in a series like One Piece. He safely trains BTS and we get a time skip to when he hits a milestone. I think the story would of benefited from each upgrade having come through an arduous event. World building is great of course, it's One Piece after all, and the author applies it quite well in this fanfic with many different settings for each "arc".
like this fanfic its simple and no nonsense crossover power system, but i hope author can develop more on story if not this fanfic will end maybe in 100 chapter
I appreciate the fast paced nature of the story. MC gains strength by working hard and in a realistic manner without going outside the logic of the one piece world. His personality is a great mix of serious and comic relief (its like a younger version of Garp). I wouldve liked to see him become an admiral but I dont believe it will happen.
Not perfect, but still a very enjoyable read. MC is a Haki expert and it does not seem like he is planning to eat a DF, which is a big plus for me. There are quite a few time skips, which gives the feeling that the story is a little fastpaced. The biggest test for this FF is that canon is approaching and we still don't see anything changing from MC presence. I'm not looking for a change that completely overhauls canon, but I'm still not looking forward to reliving canon just from our MC perspective. I hope the author has a proper plan in place. Thank you for your efforts, keep it up!
My only problem is how fast the strength progression is especially since you called systems cheese yet he arguably gets stronger faster in this fic than most system fanfictions, this guy is either blessed asf or written to get everything like how he has advanced arm n obs by chapter 13 or smth, honestly ion like the story but its still alr
haven't read it but there are only a few fanfiction without a system as a crutch.
It is very cool fanfic, I hope you will continue it, I beg you ! Thank you for the chapters very much !!! ❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥
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Make sure to leave a review folks! Planning on releasing 2-3 chapters per day for a while, so hope you guys enjoy it. I will gladly accept any criticism as my writing is still a little rusty
i just want to see this coming ....................................................................................................................................
New chapters pleaseeee 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻