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The plot of the story is great, the introduction of different mythologies and religions seems like it's going the story even better. I also like the nuance uses of the names and the clues, like how MC's related to Cain and his name is Adam like Cain's father. Overall it's shaping up to be a great story like SHK.
So I finished Vol 5. Which in a way is nearly the climax of Book 1 and a great turning point. My story is ambitious. I am gunning for the long term with at least 1k chapters when this end. I started a little slow. I won't lie. Those who read my other story, Son of Hero King, know that I am slow. I take my time to set things up even though I know it might not be the taste for everyone. Is my story good? It isn't ranked #1 so it means that I still have a long way to go. Haha. I usually don't really like saying that you should read X number of chapters to decide whether you will like a story or not. A story should be good from the very start. I believe my story do grab attention from the start but it does suffer from the slow pace sometimes. So, I won't say you should read X number of chapters before deciding if it's good. What I will say is, if you like the story but is worried about the slow pace, then read until the end of Vol 5 to decide for yourself haha. For all those who are reading my story , I am truly happy and thankful and I hope you will be with me for a long time.
Dear Author, I just read the last chapter that you uploaded explaining how the story was supposed to be and im really really sad that i can’t see the full version of it. If there is anything going on your life contact me i will make sure that i can somehow help you and a big thanks from the bottom of my heart for this wonderful story.
1 star cuz the first the first chapter o read was a female lead who was in love with another dude and next she gonna join mc harem i don't this just irritated me I am just in bad mood rn
Good story, if there is one thing that is a low point it is the slow pace that sometimes becomes irritating. I know it is a modern world but the slices of life are very dragged out. There were many parts (mostly reflections of the author himself) that end up dragging out the chapters.
i don't really like the girls in the harem (~￣³￣)~, too much information that i don't really understand cause i am not that interested in the methodologies (I think it's written like that.), so so so slow paced and i really don't love that (in fact i hate it), it gives me slice of life vibes and believe me if anything i hate more than slow paced stories it will be slice of life stories, so I don't know i find it really interesting and fun to read and over all is fun and totally recommend it to anyone but at the same time there are some point that I personally don't really like, at first it was just 1 or 2 but it just continue to increase so in the end it's good but i just don't feel that this story is for me.
This author will start a new story leave his other story for a year just to act like he's been giving some effort there's no point in supporting an author that will have you pay so much to read ahead by buying privilege just to take that money and ignore the story... Sad to see a decent story failed.
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Why did you stop updatin?!? This was one of my favorite books this year! It was different and entertaining and I really enjoyed the story and lore. But now that you haven’t updated in a month I’m hopping your okay and you’ll get back to making new stories !
The story is good and waiting for more udpates. So, i wonder what happen to this novel?
Honestly this good but my money is wasted in this work because of low rate update, and also the other work is terminated so this goodbye, I hate the author now, wasting my money, Thank you for you work btw. Can't continue to support your work. Bye.
Willl MC have some relationship with this mother or simply just son and mother?
The title is cringey tbh 🫤So I've read up to chapter 45 or smth First, for a supposed villain novel the MC is acting like mommas boy goody two shoes so far in the story, he's 21 years old grown up with past experiences in the underworld duhSecondly, in the lastest chapter I'm reading MC suddenly speculated that his mom is a hunter, while me the omniscience reader never got a darn clue where the MC learned the hunter thing, I don't even know what hunter is ffs 😭I'll read a lil more but from what I've read so far I'm more inclined to drop this, I'll change this review if it gets better, cya
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80-90% of this book is all about romance/finding a new girl for his harem. Don’t read as it’s mundane
•Character design and development both are excellent •World development feels deep but coherent [Not every goal is a hole, Don't worry about him being a gigolo, till 450ch only 3+1 partners. ]
Hello author! I would like to ask some questions, if possible, please answer... they are as follows: I would like to know if there is harem in the work, I would like to know if there is ntr or yuri in the work (I hope not), I would also like to know if there would be yanderes among the harem... and the last question, and if the mc really loves the girls, he doesn't just use them and discard them... if you can, please answer!
Hello author! I would like to ask some questions, if possible, please answer... they are as follows: I would like to know if there is harem in the work, I would like to know if there is ntr or yuri in the work (I hope not), I would also like to know if there would be yanderes among the harem... and the last question, and if the mc really loves the girls, he doesn't just use them and discard them... if you can, please answer!
The progress of the main plot is too slow. Not even two months have passed but we are almost in chapter 440 and too many things are happening everyday in accordance to story timeline. Not to spoil but after the end of the discussion in chapter 385 with Natasha the story didn't even progress for almost 50 chapters. The Dream realm arch is kind of boring. [img=angry]
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the plot is really intersting and fun the world building is really great hope the author finish the story because is really wonderfull thanks Author...
MC's adopted mother is written so well omg she's one of the best moms in most stories I have read so far, moms mostly get killed, not present, weren't there when needed or weren't a major part of the story which here is a dad figure but his mom did all the work for the dad too such good written character 👌. I really like all the other characters of the story too especially sae. the story is slow but I really like it I hope this gets more chapters and gets in ranking so more people can read it.
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author this is one of the best novels I have read till date , and is currently my most favorite novel , the novel till now has been truly exciting and the story development is amazing , I HAVE ONLY ONE QUESTION HOW MANY CHAPTERS ARE YOU PLANNING TO MAKE FOR THIS NOVEL ?
A great story with quality, it's one of the best on the platform. The pros will be at a minimum since I'll only write what stood out to me(the story is great, so I won't go deep with the pros) , but the cons are things I noticed that made me put the book on hold, so they'll to the point. pros:- Descriptive and articulate writing, the author knows how to portray scenes and get a feeling across. it's not the simple "mc did this and this is the result", no, you can feel the scenes and natural flow in the writing, the writing quality is that good. - the characters are great, not one dimensional. You can connect with the characters and understand them. the relationships and interactions are beautiful. - the flow of the story and the build up and the action are all amazing. Cons: - Too much happening in too little time: this feels even more dreadful once you know that a major element in this story is about immortality and death (spoiler from the first chapters). I mean imagine an immortal, which can live thousands upon millions of years, and then look at the story, I reached 300 chapters and it's still a prologue where not even a month has passed. My dude MC is being given a lifetime of action in a month, and it's supposed to be that way because of fate or whatnot, so it's always gonna be a life full of action. seems tiring for me as a reader. But, more than anything, not even a month and we reached 300 chapters, then what, the story will reach 1 year by the 2000 chapter or something. unless the author does a time skip, then this is just too much packed within too short a time. the mc is getting the treatment of normal humans as an mc, which they live only for 80 years, but he's immortal, he can get all the action need through time, no need to pack it in too short time. and this is the main reason that I put the book on hold, I just got tired, even if it's beautiful written, it's just the timeline isn't moving accordingly. - Slow development: this may be connected to the above, but to make it clear, the above is about having too much happen in too little time for an immortal and knowing that this will be a common thing. NOW, slow here means that it takes too long for each arc to reach a conclusion. some chapters are not need and some details within chapters feel useless. Example, at the end of book 1, it took what, about 10~15 chapters to show something that needed no more than 3 chapters. and there are a lot such cases. Because a lot of chapter are needed to cover just one day in MC's life, the story started to feel very slow. No need to do everything in a day my dude, just spread it out, the mc is immortal. you could take some notes from "reincarnated as an energy with a system" for some notes in that regard. - Not planned or scraped scenario?: well, sometimes it just feels like the author is writing with an overall plan of the end point of the story, maybe that's not true, but things get dragged out sometimes. and sometimes things were not consistent because of it (spoiler example incoming) [like when at the start, mc with sae, the mc said no relationship because of reasons, but later on, he hooked up with ms aunt lawyer and he considers her a lover, so what's up here? keep in mind that ma dude didn't even pass the 3 weeks mark and changed his mind)- This last con is mainly about some misgivings I have of the story: I just don't feel the harem in this one, why force it? I get that mc is a gigolo and can hook up with anyone, but I don't see the harem and romancing multiple targets suits the MC, maybe it's just me, but the dude is already busy as is, I would rather he gets one main best girl who always stands by his side rather than he just hooks ups, establish relationship, then targets another. (like maybe he gets main girl open minded, and he hooks up with others but she kinky so it's alright,but not establish that all of them are his wives) how would you explain the harem, don't say that all of them love mc so much they don't mind the cheating, they ain't brainless and author established thta pretty well. (SPOILER: Aunt lawyer got cheated on, and now she'll be mega cheated on?)
MC is NOT a villain. If you came here searching for a ruthless mc then this is not your novel, mc is a good person. He is NOT neutral evil, he is neutral good. Mc is smart so that is a good point. Still, expect harem with boring or/and useless female leads and a lot (and by it I mean A LOT) of cliche. Story is slow paced but that is not bad and author even warned about it in the synopsis. As the saying goes, forewarned is forearmed. The mc's golden finger is a system so if you don't like system novels then this is not for you, yet it's interesting how author is trying to develop the power system. Many secondary characters and antagonists are cliche, boring to read and plainly stupid but others are quite interesting. Overall, is a good novel and maybe author will make it better in a future, until now it's a 3,8/5 to me.
you disappointed me, author........sigh.....you shouldn't have given me false hope.............................................................................................................
Quite a cool story. Love how the supernatural interacts with the 'normal' world. The previous description and title were more fitting than the new one though. The story doesn't really focus that much on the mafia boss perspective compared to the supernatural stuff.
Great novel with deep research well done by author. Like author said, its has very slow pace. The difference is, its slow not only on first volume but all the way to latest chap i read ( around 300 ). Imagine 300 chaps, only a month pass in novel. On the start of new volume, 1 chap only about him waking up from the bed, next chap about him went from his women home to university. Too many unnecessary description for the sake of words count. Well its ok for how it work on WN, but i hope author can control it abit or it will bored many reader. Other than that this is a great novel which you need to give it a try
is it really necessary to kill Hae-Won just for the MC realize the effects of his stupid actions??tsk. I've never been disgusted like this
So, here we go. This review is being made right after finishing the first book and the epilogue, though not yet any of the side stories. This will contain recency bias, and everything here is my own opinion, not yours or anyone else that reads this, so you should remember that.chapter read: 308Before I do my normal thing of going through the different categories of rating, I will first answer a few points made by the author in the latest chapter I have read.1. "What did you like the most in the book?"Hard question. I like the immense detail, I like the writing style, I like the progression, I like the characters. That said though, I would say the thing I love the most is the uniqueness of the authors's works- the clear quantity of research he puts in, his constant engagement with his readers in author's notes, his realistic and consistent situations he places his world's in (not to be confused with world background), that sort of thing. There's also the mythology aspect, which I absolutely adore, along too with the philosophy, though only sprinkled moderately throughout this story. I know I'm not being conclusive or precise, but there really is no one thing that makes this book stand out. It is very good across almost all boards, and only has a few drawbacks I will get to at some point.2. "What did you hate the most in the book?"I did not hate anything. I disliked some things, I rolled my eyes at some moments, I cringed at others, and I was impressed by lots. But that still means there were things that could have been done better, and this will be very specific. First, the fight against the cultist was just bad in all honesty. The lead-up and other aspects were great, but the actual action was bland and too short. The arc shouldn't have taken up any more chapters, but I think it could have been weighted differently. In the end, Adam was beaten quickly without a chance to fight back and there was little to no payoff from all of the training we had watched him do. I am not saying he should have won- he shouldn't have. I am not saying he shouldn't have been destroyed- he should have. But there was no chance for him to show anything, whether due to the complexity and difficulty of writing about his skills (that isn't as prevelent in SHK) or simply not realising the weight you had put on this fight as a sort of physical catharsis. Adam won against dream Asmodeus not through his own skills he had trained till then, but through an entirely new one that came from nowhere. This is fine, but not alongside the previous fight. The girls' fight was fine, just a little boring in that it seemed they never truly used their advantage in numbers or showed off their supposed fighting prowess with some sort of impressive teamwork, but that is minor. Lots of the other action in this book is also boring. The fight against the demon was semi-similar and ended in the same way, but you managed to make it work because there was less weight placed on the fight (in that it came out of nowhere- we knew there would be action, but we just assumed it would be against the cultists so there was little mental preparation). The fight was also more emotionally exciting ,which made up for it. I like that you show Adam's strength though in demolishing those weaker than him though, that sort of action doesn't need any more detail. Additionally, the fight against Makoto was better. Not perfect by any means, not as interesting as some from, for example, the later chapters of my vampire system, but that book has many hundreds more chapters and (I'm assuming) an author with much more experience. I also think you could add in a few small details, even just half a sentence every few chapters, that would boost the feeling of continuity in this story by a large margin. By this I mean things like how Natasha has been left out for a large while. This is fine. This is normal. But, in one chapter, I would have loved to see half a sentence saying even something as simple as "later on, after a quick break chatting to Natasha on the phone" (yes I know this sucks but you get the point) or in short time skips for training mentioning something similar. Small details, I know. But very useful ones. My third semi-issue with the book is pacing. I love that the book is slow, and I love that you take your time. But like with the previously mentioned action, maybe try adjust the weighting in how much time is spent on different arcs more. Not just in chapter number- you do that- but in feel or in the amount of development that occurs in that space. I might mention a few other gripes later if I remember but I think this is enough for now.3. "Your favorite character"When she was introduced at first, easily medusa. And still now, medusa, just by slightly less. This is not a problem on your part, per say, but just due to how incredible of an opening you have her. She is an interesting character with a good backstory, a good motive, an interesting personality, a believable level of intelligence, a consistent set of values, and a good level of small development already, and she is a pretty recent addition. It also helps that I love the mythology/philosophy parts of the book, as she heavily contributes especially towards what we get of the latter. 10/10 character (this is very high praise).4. "Most hated character"Don't have one. You are very good at character design. The Smith girl is annoying but that isn't a bad thing, in fact I get it is part of the purpose of her character and it works well. Not much to say really.Ok, now on to the Webnovel ratings, as well as any other aspects of the book I deem fitting to mention:1. Writing quality: 5 stars (9.5/10)You have the highest writing quality I see on Webnovel.There. I said it.Ok, I'll elaborate. You make mistakes. Rarely the editor doesn't catch them, but none of these are ever major. But that is one aspect of VSPaG, and the least complicated one. Your use and eloquence in vocab is impressive. I often stop for a minute to admire certain word choices, and rarely do I feel I would use a word that is wothout-a-doubt better than what you have, instead of just preferentially different. Punctuation isn't particularly varied, but I honestly don't care. It doesn't need to be, this isn't an English lesson as much as I love my semi-colons, and you use nigh everything correctly. Grammar is interesting. I never notice good grammar. Only bad grammar. And, I didn't notice your grammar. This is good.2. Story development: 4 stars (8/10)Frankly, it's a bit early. But this is part of the small problem. We are over 300 chapters in now, and it's still too early. This would not be a problem if I was sure this book would never be dropped or if I was confident in there being a satisfying upload schedule for a long time, but I'm not. I love SHK. But the book is almost dead now with how slowly it is being updated, and while I know it is to focus on this one and I would never blame an author for that, I can still say it doesn't inspire confidence in me that the same can't happen to this story.That said, story development so far has been really good. There is a small lack of an overarching plot still, but this is not a problem as it seems it would be. Maybe if over an entire book there were lots of mini arcs that eventually lead to an extra large climax? That would be cool. But in a story like this, not entirely needed.3. Character design: 5 stars (9.9/10)I basically mentioned all I want to say about this, but you are very, very good at this. Maybe not always entirely original, but you don't need to be, and every character always feels like their own person, and it wouldn't feel right to lump a group of them together in my head. An example is Makoto. She is not original. She is a training freak with no life. But she also feels nervous when she realises she is unable to hold a conversation about much else, she isn't a robot and still gets shocked, annoyed, exasperated etc, and she is able to make friends and experience life. Makoto is not my favourite character, not by a long shot, but she is a good and well-written person.continued in replies
Hello readers, editor here... As someone who has read the full draft and am modifying it alongside the author... I am entitled to say a few things... I have worked with the author for some time already, and have practically worked on all his major ongoing works... So, it goes without a doubt when I mean it that this is shaping up to become perhaps the greatest work the author has delivered till date... It's a beautiful story set in the modern world telling the events concerning a young boy turned Gigolo driven to acquire as much money as he is able to in his lifetime... He wants to become rich, plain and simple with a not so simple way of getting to that goal... The story slowly divulges his ancestry and the impact of that on his life and work as he also earns himself the "Book of Knowledge" as you'll see in the prologue... Supernatural elements enter, mysteries get thrown into the mix and overall a thrilling experience would await all the readers... It's a wonderfully crafted futuristic modern world that you'll be encountering in this work and each character will have their own part to play with their own unique characteristics... The story is very plot driven, and there is "plot" as well, no need to worry about that... All in all, this is a fresh take on the modern fantasy genre by the author, and we hope to put something special out for everyone to enjoy... I hope everyone joins this wonderfule ride with us and has an amazing journey ahead... Ein Prost, alle...!
The plot of the story is great, the introduction of different mythologies and religions seems like it's going the story even better. I also like the nuance uses of the names and the clues, like how MC's related to Cain and his name is Adam like Cain's father. Overall it's shaping up to be a great story like SHK.
So I finished Vol 5. Which in a way is nearly the climax of Book 1 and a great turning point. My story is ambitious. I am gunning for the long term with at least 1k chapters when this end. I started a little slow. I won't lie. Those who read my other story, Son of Hero King, know that I am slow. I take my time to set things up even though I know it might not be the taste for everyone. Is my story good? It isn't ranked #1 so it means that I still have a long way to go. Haha. I usually don't really like saying that you should read X number of chapters to decide whether you will like a story or not. A story should be good from the very start. I believe my story do grab attention from the start but it does suffer from the slow pace sometimes. So, I won't say you should read X number of chapters before deciding if it's good. What I will say is, if you like the story but is worried about the slow pace, then read until the end of Vol 5 to decide for yourself haha. For all those who are reading my story , I am truly happy and thankful and I hope you will be with me for a long time.
Dear Author, I just read the last chapter that you uploaded explaining how the story was supposed to be and im really really sad that i can’t see the full version of it. If there is anything going on your life contact me i will make sure that i can somehow help you and a big thanks from the bottom of my heart for this wonderful story.
1 star cuz the first the first chapter o read was a female lead who was in love with another dude and next she gonna join mc harem i don't this just irritated me I am just in bad mood rn
Good story, if there is one thing that is a low point it is the slow pace that sometimes becomes irritating. I know it is a modern world but the slices of life are very dragged out. There were many parts (mostly reflections of the author himself) that end up dragging out the chapters.
i don't really like the girls in the harem (~￣³￣)~, too much information that i don't really understand cause i am not that interested in the methodologies (I think it's written like that.), so so so slow paced and i really don't love that (in fact i hate it), it gives me slice of life vibes and believe me if anything i hate more than slow paced stories it will be slice of life stories, so I don't know i find it really interesting and fun to read and over all is fun and totally recommend it to anyone but at the same time there are some point that I personally don't really like, at first it was just 1 or 2 but it just continue to increase so in the end it's good but i just don't feel that this story is for me.
This author will start a new story leave his other story for a year just to act like he's been giving some effort there's no point in supporting an author that will have you pay so much to read ahead by buying privilege just to take that money and ignore the story... Sad to see a decent story failed.
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Why did you stop updatin?!? This was one of my favorite books this year! It was different and entertaining and I really enjoyed the story and lore. But now that you haven’t updated in a month I’m hopping your okay and you’ll get back to making new stories !
The story is good and waiting for more udpates. So, i wonder what happen to this novel?
Honestly this good but my money is wasted in this work because of low rate update, and also the other work is terminated so this goodbye, I hate the author now, wasting my money, Thank you for you work btw. Can't continue to support your work. Bye.
Willl MC have some relationship with this mother or simply just son and mother?
The title is cringey tbh 🫤So I've read up to chapter 45 or smth First, for a supposed villain novel the MC is acting like mommas boy goody two shoes so far in the story, he's 21 years old grown up with past experiences in the underworld duhSecondly, in the lastest chapter I'm reading MC suddenly speculated that his mom is a hunter, while me the omniscience reader never got a darn clue where the MC learned the hunter thing, I don't even know what hunter is ffs 😭I'll read a lil more but from what I've read so far I'm more inclined to drop this, I'll change this review if it gets better, cya
Revelar spoiler 80-90% of this book is all about romance/finding a new girl for his harem. Don’t read as it’s mundane
•Character design and development both are excellent •World development feels deep but coherent [Not every goal is a hole, Don't worry about him being a gigolo, till 450ch only 3+1 partners. ]
Hello author! I would like to ask some questions, if possible, please answer... they are as follows: I would like to know if there is harem in the work, I would like to know if there is ntr or yuri in the work (I hope not), I would also like to know if there would be yanderes among the harem... and the last question, and if the mc really loves the girls, he doesn't just use them and discard them... if you can, please answer!
Hello author! I would like to ask some questions, if possible, please answer... they are as follows: I would like to know if there is harem in the work, I would like to know if there is ntr or yuri in the work (I hope not), I would also like to know if there would be yanderes among the harem... and the last question, and if the mc really loves the girls, he doesn't just use them and discard them... if you can, please answer!
The progress of the main plot is too slow. Not even two months have passed but we are almost in chapter 440 and too many things are happening everyday in accordance to story timeline. Not to spoil but after the end of the discussion in chapter 385 with Natasha the story didn't even progress for almost 50 chapters. The Dream realm arch is kind of boring. [img=angry]
Revelar spoiler the plot is really intersting and fun the world building is really great hope the author finish the story because is really wonderfull thanks Author...
MC's adopted mother is written so well omg she's one of the best moms in most stories I have read so far, moms mostly get killed, not present, weren't there when needed or weren't a major part of the story which here is a dad figure but his mom did all the work for the dad too such good written character 👌. I really like all the other characters of the story too especially sae. the story is slow but I really like it I hope this gets more chapters and gets in ranking so more people can read it.
Revelar spoiler author this is one of the best novels I have read till date , and is currently my most favorite novel , the novel till now has been truly exciting and the story development is amazing , I HAVE ONLY ONE QUESTION HOW MANY CHAPTERS ARE YOU PLANNING TO MAKE FOR THIS NOVEL ?
A great story with quality, it's one of the best on the platform. The pros will be at a minimum since I'll only write what stood out to me(the story is great, so I won't go deep with the pros) , but the cons are things I noticed that made me put the book on hold, so they'll to the point. pros:- Descriptive and articulate writing, the author knows how to portray scenes and get a feeling across. it's not the simple "mc did this and this is the result", no, you can feel the scenes and natural flow in the writing, the writing quality is that good. - the characters are great, not one dimensional. You can connect with the characters and understand them. the relationships and interactions are beautiful. - the flow of the story and the build up and the action are all amazing. Cons: - Too much happening in too little time: this feels even more dreadful once you know that a major element in this story is about immortality and death (spoiler from the first chapters). I mean imagine an immortal, which can live thousands upon millions of years, and then look at the story, I reached 300 chapters and it's still a prologue where not even a month has passed. My dude MC is being given a lifetime of action in a month, and it's supposed to be that way because of fate or whatnot, so it's always gonna be a life full of action. seems tiring for me as a reader. But, more than anything, not even a month and we reached 300 chapters, then what, the story will reach 1 year by the 2000 chapter or something. unless the author does a time skip, then this is just too much packed within too short a time. the mc is getting the treatment of normal humans as an mc, which they live only for 80 years, but he's immortal, he can get all the action need through time, no need to pack it in too short time. and this is the main reason that I put the book on hold, I just got tired, even if it's beautiful written, it's just the timeline isn't moving accordingly. - Slow development: this may be connected to the above, but to make it clear, the above is about having too much happen in too little time for an immortal and knowing that this will be a common thing. NOW, slow here means that it takes too long for each arc to reach a conclusion. some chapters are not need and some details within chapters feel useless. Example, at the end of book 1, it took what, about 10~15 chapters to show something that needed no more than 3 chapters. and there are a lot such cases. Because a lot of chapter are needed to cover just one day in MC's life, the story started to feel very slow. No need to do everything in a day my dude, just spread it out, the mc is immortal. you could take some notes from "reincarnated as an energy with a system" for some notes in that regard. - Not planned or scraped scenario?: well, sometimes it just feels like the author is writing with an overall plan of the end point of the story, maybe that's not true, but things get dragged out sometimes. and sometimes things were not consistent because of it (spoiler example incoming) [like when at the start, mc with sae, the mc said no relationship because of reasons, but later on, he hooked up with ms aunt lawyer and he considers her a lover, so what's up here? keep in mind that ma dude didn't even pass the 3 weeks mark and changed his mind)- This last con is mainly about some misgivings I have of the story: I just don't feel the harem in this one, why force it? I get that mc is a gigolo and can hook up with anyone, but I don't see the harem and romancing multiple targets suits the MC, maybe it's just me, but the dude is already busy as is, I would rather he gets one main best girl who always stands by his side rather than he just hooks ups, establish relationship, then targets another. (like maybe he gets main girl open minded, and he hooks up with others but she kinky so it's alright,but not establish that all of them are his wives) how would you explain the harem, don't say that all of them love mc so much they don't mind the cheating, they ain't brainless and author established thta pretty well. (SPOILER: Aunt lawyer got cheated on, and now she'll be mega cheated on?)
MC is NOT a villain. If you came here searching for a ruthless mc then this is not your novel, mc is a good person. He is NOT neutral evil, he is neutral good. Mc is smart so that is a good point. Still, expect harem with boring or/and useless female leads and a lot (and by it I mean A LOT) of cliche. Story is slow paced but that is not bad and author even warned about it in the synopsis. As the saying goes, forewarned is forearmed. The mc's golden finger is a system so if you don't like system novels then this is not for you, yet it's interesting how author is trying to develop the power system. Many secondary characters and antagonists are cliche, boring to read and plainly stupid but others are quite interesting. Overall, is a good novel and maybe author will make it better in a future, until now it's a 3,8/5 to me.
you disappointed me, author........sigh.....you shouldn't have given me false hope.............................................................................................................
Quite a cool story. Love how the supernatural interacts with the 'normal' world. The previous description and title were more fitting than the new one though. The story doesn't really focus that much on the mafia boss perspective compared to the supernatural stuff.
Great novel with deep research well done by author. Like author said, its has very slow pace. The difference is, its slow not only on first volume but all the way to latest chap i read ( around 300 ). Imagine 300 chaps, only a month pass in novel. On the start of new volume, 1 chap only about him waking up from the bed, next chap about him went from his women home to university. Too many unnecessary description for the sake of words count. Well its ok for how it work on WN, but i hope author can control it abit or it will bored many reader. Other than that this is a great novel which you need to give it a try
is it really necessary to kill Hae-Won just for the MC realize the effects of his stupid actions??tsk. I've never been disgusted like this
So, here we go. This review is being made right after finishing the first book and the epilogue, though not yet any of the side stories. This will contain recency bias, and everything here is my own opinion, not yours or anyone else that reads this, so you should remember that.chapter read: 308Before I do my normal thing of going through the different categories of rating, I will first answer a few points made by the author in the latest chapter I have read.1. "What did you like the most in the book?"Hard question. I like the immense detail, I like the writing style, I like the progression, I like the characters. That said though, I would say the thing I love the most is the uniqueness of the authors's works- the clear quantity of research he puts in, his constant engagement with his readers in author's notes, his realistic and consistent situations he places his world's in (not to be confused with world background), that sort of thing. There's also the mythology aspect, which I absolutely adore, along too with the philosophy, though only sprinkled moderately throughout this story. I know I'm not being conclusive or precise, but there really is no one thing that makes this book stand out. It is very good across almost all boards, and only has a few drawbacks I will get to at some point.2. "What did you hate the most in the book?"I did not hate anything. I disliked some things, I rolled my eyes at some moments, I cringed at others, and I was impressed by lots. But that still means there were things that could have been done better, and this will be very specific. First, the fight against the cultist was just bad in all honesty. The lead-up and other aspects were great, but the actual action was bland and too short. The arc shouldn't have taken up any more chapters, but I think it could have been weighted differently. In the end, Adam was beaten quickly without a chance to fight back and there was little to no payoff from all of the training we had watched him do. I am not saying he should have won- he shouldn't have. I am not saying he shouldn't have been destroyed- he should have. But there was no chance for him to show anything, whether due to the complexity and difficulty of writing about his skills (that isn't as prevelent in SHK) or simply not realising the weight you had put on this fight as a sort of physical catharsis. Adam won against dream Asmodeus not through his own skills he had trained till then, but through an entirely new one that came from nowhere. This is fine, but not alongside the previous fight. The girls' fight was fine, just a little boring in that it seemed they never truly used their advantage in numbers or showed off their supposed fighting prowess with some sort of impressive teamwork, but that is minor. Lots of the other action in this book is also boring. The fight against the demon was semi-similar and ended in the same way, but you managed to make it work because there was less weight placed on the fight (in that it came out of nowhere- we knew there would be action, but we just assumed it would be against the cultists so there was little mental preparation). The fight was also more emotionally exciting ,which made up for it. I like that you show Adam's strength though in demolishing those weaker than him though, that sort of action doesn't need any more detail. Additionally, the fight against Makoto was better. Not perfect by any means, not as interesting as some from, for example, the later chapters of my vampire system, but that book has many hundreds more chapters and (I'm assuming) an author with much more experience. I also think you could add in a few small details, even just half a sentence every few chapters, that would boost the feeling of continuity in this story by a large margin. By this I mean things like how Natasha has been left out for a large while. This is fine. This is normal. But, in one chapter, I would have loved to see half a sentence saying even something as simple as "later on, after a quick break chatting to Natasha on the phone" (yes I know this sucks but you get the point) or in short time skips for training mentioning something similar. Small details, I know. But very useful ones. My third semi-issue with the book is pacing. I love that the book is slow, and I love that you take your time. But like with the previously mentioned action, maybe try adjust the weighting in how much time is spent on different arcs more. Not just in chapter number- you do that- but in feel or in the amount of development that occurs in that space. I might mention a few other gripes later if I remember but I think this is enough for now.3. "Your favorite character"When she was introduced at first, easily medusa. And still now, medusa, just by slightly less. This is not a problem on your part, per say, but just due to how incredible of an opening you have her. She is an interesting character with a good backstory, a good motive, an interesting personality, a believable level of intelligence, a consistent set of values, and a good level of small development already, and she is a pretty recent addition. It also helps that I love the mythology/philosophy parts of the book, as she heavily contributes especially towards what we get of the latter. 10/10 character (this is very high praise).4. "Most hated character"Don't have one. You are very good at character design. The Smith girl is annoying but that isn't a bad thing, in fact I get it is part of the purpose of her character and it works well. Not much to say really.Ok, now on to the Webnovel ratings, as well as any other aspects of the book I deem fitting to mention:1. Writing quality: 5 stars (9.5/10)You have the highest writing quality I see on Webnovel.There. I said it.Ok, I'll elaborate. You make mistakes. Rarely the editor doesn't catch them, but none of these are ever major. But that is one aspect of VSPaG, and the least complicated one. Your use and eloquence in vocab is impressive. I often stop for a minute to admire certain word choices, and rarely do I feel I would use a word that is wothout-a-doubt better than what you have, instead of just preferentially different. Punctuation isn't particularly varied, but I honestly don't care. It doesn't need to be, this isn't an English lesson as much as I love my semi-colons, and you use nigh everything correctly. Grammar is interesting. I never notice good grammar. Only bad grammar. And, I didn't notice your grammar. This is good.2. Story development: 4 stars (8/10)Frankly, it's a bit early. But this is part of the small problem. We are over 300 chapters in now, and it's still too early. This would not be a problem if I was sure this book would never be dropped or if I was confident in there being a satisfying upload schedule for a long time, but I'm not. I love SHK. But the book is almost dead now with how slowly it is being updated, and while I know it is to focus on this one and I would never blame an author for that, I can still say it doesn't inspire confidence in me that the same can't happen to this story.That said, story development so far has been really good. There is a small lack of an overarching plot still, but this is not a problem as it seems it would be. Maybe if over an entire book there were lots of mini arcs that eventually lead to an extra large climax? That would be cool. But in a story like this, not entirely needed.3. Character design: 5 stars (9.9/10)I basically mentioned all I want to say about this, but you are very, very good at this. Maybe not always entirely original, but you don't need to be, and every character always feels like their own person, and it wouldn't feel right to lump a group of them together in my head. An example is Makoto. She is not original. She is a training freak with no life. But she also feels nervous when she realises she is unable to hold a conversation about much else, she isn't a robot and still gets shocked, annoyed, exasperated etc, and she is able to make friends and experience life. Makoto is not my favourite character, not by a long shot, but she is a good and well-written person.continued in replies
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