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trash novel with trash MC who does nothing but gets everything for no reason without any efforts. trash development. trash novel with trash MC who does nothing but gets everything for no reason without any efforts. trash development.
To the AUTHOR, Hope the MC becomes ANTI-HERO with Strong sense JUSTICE, But in a balance way of the world in Grey not in Black and White. As it is mix of comics(Earth-616) N movies(MCU). Make his suit mix of black and grey Assassin type suit with the mix of Uru, Admantium, Vibranium with defensive runes and magic in Nano-Tech instead of Spandex. Change Mutants into Meta-Humans. MC- Make him a Nigh Immortal with unlimeted potential, Master in Combat Arts(All Martial arts, Weaponary as well as Chi, etc.,), Magic , Runes , Smith/Smithery, Science( Math, Che , Phy, Bio), a brain better than super-computer all in all a master to every thing to level according to author leveling system. Make MC save Earth from Pollution, making the Earth richer in Natural, Chi, Ki/Qi Mana and cosmiic energy and teach people of Tech-Magic(Technomancy), Chi and Many other Arts. Also kindly Bring the Asian Characters as there are Western Characters. Make MC better than all of them as Jack of all trades and as well a master of all so to say "Perfectum" but make all of them get powers above as it cited in Paragraph. As it an OP comment not make it OP just make it slowly step by step for making MC more OP. Thanks- Reader!
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Author i am familiar with your other fics and the thing i have to say is that you are miraculously able to make any good fanfic worse or downright bad There is no introduction to the characters life or how he got there or why he got there Not to mention you give him powers/opportunities for no reason other than to make him more OP than he already is And you are really bad at writing female to male conversations vice versa
Pretty horrible i could no get past half of the first chapter. pretty horrible amount of cliché in the book that it becomes trash. for some reason graded high
This is a story is a mess. The mc is introduced as the younger brother of tony, without really building on this background. Instead of a intelligent mc, that tries to create iron man armour,… through his own effort and survive in the mcu, we get someone, who get power ups and opportunities handed to him on a platter. He has to do nothing, to get his powers. There is no struggle. The mc acts like a tourist on a trip through a mcu theme park, rather than someone trying to survive this crazy universe.
Why is he tony brother? for no reason just because. The progression is so fast by chapter 3 Mc is a god who's given powers for no reason and has no sort of goals but just does whatever. He has so many powers the author has no idea how to make it interesting. This story is the equivalent of a brain frat. It's not entirely bad but it's far from good. Turn off your brain and then this might be palatable.
👍 I read Batman's little brother. And I could tell that this is inspired from it and I like it. But the MC started off way too overpowered. A Template for "The Sentry" wouldn't be as overpowered as Yaldabaoth
Nice Book Just hope author don't drop this book like rest of his book......................................................................!
Wanted to wait for 10 chapters before I gave it a review and gotta be honest I’m not sure how you could have this be a long lasting story just based on the quick progression of his strength but even with that I’m still enjoying the story.
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You said you will make a new fanfic like Epic of Leviathan. Did you make ir if yes can you give me the name or link please ? You said you will make a new fanfic like Epic of Leviathan. Did you make ir if yes can you give me the name or link please ?
I am giving a bad vibe here..................................................................................................................
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
Looks good bu I’ve only read the first chapter so far but I don’t really like template/system fanfics so imma drop it but it has potential and there aren’t any grammar mistakes taht I could spot
Hi! Yup, I finally found an interesting FanFict. So far, I'm quite satisfied with the story you wrote, and indeed it's better to let Enzo build his own company like G*ogle, Amaz*n, and others because it will give Enzo more influence and of course, having a Harem must be supported by material wealth too, even though Enzo is part of Stark, but there's nothing wrong with making the MC richer XD. Oh, try to adding chapters for character images, and if you want to take a hiatus, drop, etc, please provide an explanation to the readers! I expect consistent updates!
yoooo it's very very amazing keep going bro.............................................................,.................................................................................. ......
Great book but if I wasn't bored I wouldn't of clicked on it as it seems boring on the outside, you should make the synopsis better Big e big e big e big e big e
im really looking forward to your updates, since like you i also also alsoooooo like the story of 'batman's little brother'👌😖...[img=update]
So far so good Yea yea yup yea yea I yea yea yup yup yea yea yup yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup
Author I start investing your novel hope that you won't drop. Also if you can increase intimacy with harem members of mc, so that people won't think MC's brainwashing them.
haven't read it yet but the synopsis got me hooked [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
trash novel with trash MC who does nothing but gets everything for no reason without any efforts. trash development. trash novel with trash MC who does nothing but gets everything for no reason without any efforts. trash development.
To the AUTHOR, Hope the MC becomes ANTI-HERO with Strong sense JUSTICE, But in a balance way of the world in Grey not in Black and White. As it is mix of comics(Earth-616) N movies(MCU). Make his suit mix of black and grey Assassin type suit with the mix of Uru, Admantium, Vibranium with defensive runes and magic in Nano-Tech instead of Spandex. Change Mutants into Meta-Humans. MC- Make him a Nigh Immortal with unlimeted potential, Master in Combat Arts(All Martial arts, Weaponary as well as Chi, etc.,), Magic , Runes , Smith/Smithery, Science( Math, Che , Phy, Bio), a brain better than super-computer all in all a master to every thing to level according to author leveling system. Make MC save Earth from Pollution, making the Earth richer in Natural, Chi, Ki/Qi Mana and cosmiic energy and teach people of Tech-Magic(Technomancy), Chi and Many other Arts. Also kindly Bring the Asian Characters as there are Western Characters. Make MC better than all of them as Jack of all trades and as well a master of all so to say "Perfectum" but make all of them get powers above as it cited in Paragraph. As it an OP comment not make it OP just make it slowly step by step for making MC more OP. Thanks- Reader!
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DO NOT NERF! DO NOT NERF! DO NOT NERF! DO NOT NERF! DO NOT NERF! I REPEAT! DOOOOOOOO NNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT NNNNNNNNNNEEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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Author i am familiar with your other fics and the thing i have to say is that you are miraculously able to make any good fanfic worse or downright bad There is no introduction to the characters life or how he got there or why he got there Not to mention you give him powers/opportunities for no reason other than to make him more OP than he already is And you are really bad at writing female to male conversations vice versa
Pretty horrible i could no get past half of the first chapter. pretty horrible amount of cliché in the book that it becomes trash. for some reason graded high
This is a story is a mess. The mc is introduced as the younger brother of tony, without really building on this background. Instead of a intelligent mc, that tries to create iron man armour,… through his own effort and survive in the mcu, we get someone, who get power ups and opportunities handed to him on a platter. He has to do nothing, to get his powers. There is no struggle. The mc acts like a tourist on a trip through a mcu theme park, rather than someone trying to survive this crazy universe.
Why is he tony brother? for no reason just because. The progression is so fast by chapter 3 Mc is a god who's given powers for no reason and has no sort of goals but just does whatever. He has so many powers the author has no idea how to make it interesting. This story is the equivalent of a brain frat. It's not entirely bad but it's far from good. Turn off your brain and then this might be palatable.
👍 I read Batman's little brother. And I could tell that this is inspired from it and I like it. But the MC started off way too overpowered. A Template for "The Sentry" wouldn't be as overpowered as Yaldabaoth
Nice Book Just hope author don't drop this book like rest of his book......................................................................!
Wanted to wait for 10 chapters before I gave it a review and gotta be honest I’m not sure how you could have this be a long lasting story just based on the quick progression of his strength but even with that I’m still enjoying the story.
I like the story ......................................................................................................................................
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You said you will make a new fanfic like Epic of Leviathan. Did you make ir if yes can you give me the name or link please ? You said you will make a new fanfic like Epic of Leviathan. Did you make ir if yes can you give me the name or link please ?
I am giving a bad vibe here..................................................................................................................
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
Looks good bu I’ve only read the first chapter so far but I don’t really like template/system fanfics so imma drop it but it has potential and there aren’t any grammar mistakes taht I could spot
Hi! Yup, I finally found an interesting FanFict. So far, I'm quite satisfied with the story you wrote, and indeed it's better to let Enzo build his own company like G*ogle, Amaz*n, and others because it will give Enzo more influence and of course, having a Harem must be supported by material wealth too, even though Enzo is part of Stark, but there's nothing wrong with making the MC richer XD. Oh, try to adding chapters for character images, and if you want to take a hiatus, drop, etc, please provide an explanation to the readers! I expect consistent updates!
yoooo it's very very amazing keep going bro.............................................................,.................................................................................. ......
Great book but if I wasn't bored I wouldn't of clicked on it as it seems boring on the outside, you should make the synopsis better Big e big e big e big e big e
im really looking forward to your updates, since like you i also also alsoooooo like the story of 'batman's little brother'👌😖...[img=update]
So far so good Yea yea yup yea yea I yea yea yup yup yea yea yup yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup
Author I start investing your novel hope that you won't drop. Also if you can increase intimacy with harem members of mc, so that people won't think MC's brainwashing them.
haven't read it yet but the synopsis got me hooked [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]