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Interesting premise, just that I think the overall writing could use some work for an easier time to read. The characters aren't bad and the world is quite interesting. Keep up the good work and I will read it again some day.
1. I think, you should work on replacing your (( with " instead to make smoother flowing conversations. 2. I think the dialogue could use some fine-tuning. it seems better made for image format than a book. 3. Also, work on your System itself. In truth, this system here is interesting in sheer size and how many it effect but their feels like very little mystery or aura surronding it in the works itself. Overall, I can see your potential and sparks of greater ideas in here and hope you keep working on your dreams.
wow, I read the first chapter and I am marveled , the story was very unique starting from the prologue, the prologue was unique and can attract a lot of readers to you, keep it up
Hey bro,your story is great and I know it will get better. I am waiting for the story to continue. I count the moments.It is clear that you have taken the right path and I am sure it will be wonderful in the end
As I just finished reading the last published chapter of this book, I think it's pretty amazing. Although tragedy and academy isn't my cup of tea, I still liked it. The plot and the development of the story is awesome. I always liked how the author finished his chapter. Keep up the good work.
This is the first time that I have read a story like this, and it is pretty interesting. The first parts(chapters) were hooking and the events just get interesting every time. great work!
Apart from some syntax errors its fine. The story development is fast so it’s more interresting coz no one likes waiting for story development lol Keep it up💪👏
I was caught off guard by this novel as i'm unsure of what to expect and yet this novel manage to capture my attention. the story become increasinly more interesting as it develop. i definetly recomend this novel. it's definetly worth a read.
Nice story. moreover easy to understand. I hope in the future I can read stories like this again, but of course with the addition of slightly longer events such as adventures and also facing difficult decisions. but apart from that. good work 😊👍
The characters and worldbuilding are quite interesting. There are some clunky dialogue, pacing, a few grammar mistakes, but they can be easily remedied. Overall, it's a good book for a newbie author.
The writing style is unique but the pace and narration is easy to understand. I added this in my lib to follow the journey! Keep it up author!
Wow... what a story.. With good plot as well as character development. The writing style of the author is just way too awesome.. Keep up with the good work, author.
well, very good story, I must say. good flow but mistakes were made here and there and so rephrasing will do some good. apart from that, the story is quite good. keep up with the work author
Well, I have to say that the characters blend well into the story and backround. I'll be following the progress of the story. Thanks to the author for this fictional world that I hadn't thought of.
Really good at describing the world of the story. I felt like I was watching anime instead of reading. I always liked stories like this where you get to have powers! Worth the read, waiting for the next chapters!!!
So, as far as I've read the story, I've enjoyed the impending sci-fi adventure. The development of the plot is just delicious and when the tension is released, you can't help but relish in it. So, I've enjoyed this work and would recommend to all those who love adventures
The idea is pretty good. System screen and other layouts are clear to read too. And their are tons of character interactions so readers won't get bored.
I like the idea the Author had, and interpreting it into words with the intention of ensuring that the picture created is undeniably beautiful. The storyline line is good and has potential to be better along with the dialogue. Overall this was a good read
This Is a very great story' and very interested story' . I'm very like it , this story' looks like an Urban legend story' . The character Is very interested and i can't wait for the next chapter
The story is really fascinating guys, i love the characters their well designed. It shows the hard work the Author put to write something like this. I only started but wow it's addicting
The first few chapters are interesting and has a lot going on, although it feels a little fast-paced. I like the first few bits with the characters since it talked a lot about what sort of person they are and what they stand for. I did struggle with the substitution of quotation marks with parentheses. And one more that the conversation with the Arash's sister was a bit off since it was all small talk, hence it sounded awkward in my head than it was in the story. The writing overall is fine and would recommend. Keep and the good work, author.
The grammar is a bit sketchy, but the idea is really cool and interesting, with good descriptions! Very easy to image what the reader is talking about
This book exites me! I can't wait to see how this story unfolds! keep writing! [img=update] This story is going to blow up in the near future!
I could predict you're story was going to be interesting after reading the short but enticing synopsis. I was just a bit confused by the lack of quotation marks when a character is speaking. Also, sometimes I'm not sure who's speaking. Otherwise, the story is good and I'm looking forward to your updates :)
Interesting concept I'm sure as the story progresses your use of English will become stronger and the novel will achieve an even higher level. The grammar is pretty good for a new author, there is a lot of room for improvement but as I said so far so good. Can't wait for the new chapters I would definitely recommend this, it's worth the read.
Interesting story and plot, it isn't that hard to read since there are barely any grammar mistakes. I can see that this story will continue to improve and develop, don't give up and continue writing!
A very interesting story. The storyline is very captivating. I am looking forward to more chapters. Good luck to the author. The plot is really interesting I must say that and I really liked all the characters too.
Very good And that this story has a lot of room to get stronger and an interesting start and can attract the audience for hours Its author has many choices and can bring bittersweet events together
A very interesting story. The story line is very captivating. I am looking forward to more chapter. Good luck to the author, and keep up the good work.
The plot is really interesting I must say that and i really liked all the characters too. There is a lot of space to improve in your writing skills but overall it was a decent read, I enjoyed it.
hello, newbie author here. I hope you enjoy this novel. welcome to notifying me for any grammar mistakes. wait for more chapter and more excitement.
Interesting premise, just that I think the overall writing could use some work for an easier time to read. The characters aren't bad and the world is quite interesting. Keep up the good work and I will read it again some day.
1. I think, you should work on replacing your (( with " instead to make smoother flowing conversations. 2. I think the dialogue could use some fine-tuning. it seems better made for image format than a book. 3. Also, work on your System itself. In truth, this system here is interesting in sheer size and how many it effect but their feels like very little mystery or aura surronding it in the works itself. Overall, I can see your potential and sparks of greater ideas in here and hope you keep working on your dreams.
wow, I read the first chapter and I am marveled , the story was very unique starting from the prologue, the prologue was unique and can attract a lot of readers to you, keep it up
Hey bro,your story is great and I know it will get better. I am waiting for the story to continue. I count the moments.It is clear that you have taken the right path and I am sure it will be wonderful in the end
As I just finished reading the last published chapter of this book, I think it's pretty amazing. Although tragedy and academy isn't my cup of tea, I still liked it. The plot and the development of the story is awesome. I always liked how the author finished his chapter. Keep up the good work.
This is the first time that I have read a story like this, and it is pretty interesting. The first parts(chapters) were hooking and the events just get interesting every time. great work!
Apart from some syntax errors its fine. The story development is fast so it’s more interresting coz no one likes waiting for story development lol Keep it up💪👏
I was caught off guard by this novel as i'm unsure of what to expect and yet this novel manage to capture my attention. the story become increasinly more interesting as it develop. i definetly recomend this novel. it's definetly worth a read.
Nice story. moreover easy to understand. I hope in the future I can read stories like this again, but of course with the addition of slightly longer events such as adventures and also facing difficult decisions. but apart from that. good work 😊👍
The characters and worldbuilding are quite interesting. There are some clunky dialogue, pacing, a few grammar mistakes, but they can be easily remedied. Overall, it's a good book for a newbie author.
The writing style is unique but the pace and narration is easy to understand. I added this in my lib to follow the journey! Keep it up author!
Wow... what a story.. With good plot as well as character development. The writing style of the author is just way too awesome.. Keep up with the good work, author.
well, very good story, I must say. good flow but mistakes were made here and there and so rephrasing will do some good. apart from that, the story is quite good. keep up with the work author
Well, I have to say that the characters blend well into the story and backround. I'll be following the progress of the story. Thanks to the author for this fictional world that I hadn't thought of.
Really good at describing the world of the story. I felt like I was watching anime instead of reading. I always liked stories like this where you get to have powers! Worth the read, waiting for the next chapters!!!
So, as far as I've read the story, I've enjoyed the impending sci-fi adventure. The development of the plot is just delicious and when the tension is released, you can't help but relish in it. So, I've enjoyed this work and would recommend to all those who love adventures
The idea is pretty good. System screen and other layouts are clear to read too. And their are tons of character interactions so readers won't get bored.
I like the idea the Author had, and interpreting it into words with the intention of ensuring that the picture created is undeniably beautiful. The storyline line is good and has potential to be better along with the dialogue. Overall this was a good read
This Is a very great story' and very interested story' . I'm very like it , this story' looks like an Urban legend story' . The character Is very interested and i can't wait for the next chapter
The story is really fascinating guys, i love the characters their well designed. It shows the hard work the Author put to write something like this. I only started but wow it's addicting
The first few chapters are interesting and has a lot going on, although it feels a little fast-paced. I like the first few bits with the characters since it talked a lot about what sort of person they are and what they stand for. I did struggle with the substitution of quotation marks with parentheses. And one more that the conversation with the Arash's sister was a bit off since it was all small talk, hence it sounded awkward in my head than it was in the story. The writing overall is fine and would recommend. Keep and the good work, author.
The grammar is a bit sketchy, but the idea is really cool and interesting, with good descriptions! Very easy to image what the reader is talking about
This book exites me! I can't wait to see how this story unfolds! keep writing! [img=update] This story is going to blow up in the near future!
I could predict you're story was going to be interesting after reading the short but enticing synopsis. I was just a bit confused by the lack of quotation marks when a character is speaking. Also, sometimes I'm not sure who's speaking. Otherwise, the story is good and I'm looking forward to your updates :)
Interesting concept I'm sure as the story progresses your use of English will become stronger and the novel will achieve an even higher level. The grammar is pretty good for a new author, there is a lot of room for improvement but as I said so far so good. Can't wait for the new chapters I would definitely recommend this, it's worth the read.
Interesting story and plot, it isn't that hard to read since there are barely any grammar mistakes. I can see that this story will continue to improve and develop, don't give up and continue writing!
A very interesting story. The storyline is very captivating. I am looking forward to more chapters. Good luck to the author. The plot is really interesting I must say that and I really liked all the characters too.
Very good And that this story has a lot of room to get stronger and an interesting start and can attract the audience for hours Its author has many choices and can bring bittersweet events together
A very interesting story. The story line is very captivating. I am looking forward to more chapter. Good luck to the author, and keep up the good work.
The plot is really interesting I must say that and i really liked all the characters too. There is a lot of space to improve in your writing skills but overall it was a decent read, I enjoyed it.
hello, newbie author here. I hope you enjoy this novel. welcome to notifying me for any grammar mistakes. wait for more chapter and more excitement.