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Living in Marvel World with DOTA System
3.1 (36 Bewertungen)
Zusammenfassung
It is about the Main Character that has a System DOTA in the Marvel universe, as he was about to explore and have fun, there's something that shouldn't be in here.
MC: "Thisn't the Marvel World that I seened on this movie! There's something wrong with it!"
DISCLAIMER: I do not own Marvel characters and DOTA.
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such a nice concept but the story is all over the place, first problem is Grammar and it is a really really big problem, most of the time it's just some minor issues like 'he' or 'she' or something but in this story it's just god awful. There's also the plot which is just jumping from 1 place to the next constantly, no real pacing. Then the biggest and most cringy mistake a author ever makes, Toddler hero where nobody really questions a toddler talking like an ***** and making ***** decisions.
As an Author, those who don't know DOTA (it is a Multiplayer Online Battle Arena) an online game where 5 player will against another 5 player by destroying opponents base called "Ancients", that's all and have fun reading P.S.: Even you guyz call me shameless i will rate it through my heart hahaha...
Well let's say you had a good idea..... Just that. What the **** is wrong with you 1 year old and talk like an ***** and no one finds it weird? Not even his mother ?
weak stats according to writer normal humans can only lift 25kg... weak stats according to writer normal humans can only lift 25kg... weak stats according to writer normal humans can only lift 25kg... weak stats according to writer normal humans can only lift 25kg... weak stats according to writer normal humans can only lift 25kg...
For readers - only recommended to reader who want to know the story or concept of it - read only u are open minded person - stay away if u are a perfectionist - don't read this if u are new to light novel For author - good idea n concept - improve language (can use apps to check grammar) - fix the common sense, what is normal and what is not (atleast explain why it is normal from the start) - what's more important is, ENJOY YOUR HOBBY AND WRITE AT YOUR WILL. - don't afraid to do mistake, keep write and improve Your sincerely, Wang Zi Han
What the he'll kind of dialogue me is this story written in? Me: blah blah blah blah Them: blah blah blah blah blah blah Author: blah blah blah blah blah This is an id.iots writing style.
The story is **** good theme but writer ruined it a child doing all that seriously moreover the plot is all worst and total waste of time ...
If there was a zero or minus, star rating Without a question I would have given it ... Wat the **** is the concept of a child knowing everything about MCU is so naive and writer make everything bland with no taste of writing...every interactions are so boring, messed up. Given u don't English that much but what **** is conversation so messed up...every plot easy
You deserve 5 starts because of the tag no harem😌✌🏼Also this story is really good in my opinion soooo go read it please and thank you ...
As a fellow writer, I understand that we have a long way to go if English is not our primary language. However, since I understand this point, this also means that there's plenty of room for improvement. Hey, my grammar is not perfect as well so I'll be frank and try to motivate you to do better as well. So writing quality is 3/5 Stability of Updates Readers like to read novels that have a stable release date. Make sure to work on that as well. 3/5 Story Development: To be honest, this is the first time I've seen a one-year-old do all those things and more. So I'll give you props for your imagination and award you with 4/5 Character Design: It's a bit wild and unorthodox, but it works so why not? 5/5 here for you. World Background The world building is nice and the first few chapters are hinting that something big is about to happen. Will look forward to everything once you are able to give stable releases 4/5 for this one. Overall Score 3;8 This novel is promising. If you can manage to get an editor it would slowly turn into something awesome. So I hope, that you will be able to get an editor for your work. No, make that, I hope that the two of us can find a good editor for our stories. Kudos and more power to you ;)
Nice concept by the way, even I had though of doing this. Will support your story, keep it up. Just don’t make his foolish, overpowered and a harem. You have my support.
I'm giving four stars for my shameless collection of exp ...........................................................................................................................................
This book keeps getting better and better I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏📖
Editing what's that? Character development who needs it ... actual logical depth to the story?... pfhhh... This novel has none of those after all why would a author ever try to make the novel readable after all novels arnt ment to be read they are ment to be a simple ego booster to yourself after all that's what this novel is clearly about
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Well this is a honest review ... Sure its not the best story in the world, but it is still entertaining to read ... Stability of updates and writing quality could use some work. But we readers dont know the authors living conditions so we cant say that his lazy and stuff like that. Nor can we say that he have to improve the writing quality, since no one is perfect from the start. Anyway those are the 2 mayor things that pull down the novel ...
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The author ****ed up the story after chapter 31 ... the mc defends himself and some other people and gets suspended from school for no reason, then he also gets punished by his mother for defending himself ... completely retarded ... i had high hopes for this ... and the author just had to go full retard...