In danmachi as a vampire

LV 4

omarvk_pro

Well, as I said before, it has potential you just have to practice a little more with the pov, and follow in an orderly and explanatory way how you are doing it, and if you can update I'm not saying daily but almost daily would be better, but don't rush it you are doing fine.

LV 4

Winter_Whisperer

I like it, I truly do. but there are lots of mistakes and such it's difficult to immerse myself in the story. my advice is to get an editor or use Grammarly. hope u fix this since I really want to to enjoy this story.

LV 11

OnizukaShinu

It has great potential yet the author blew it with his overused grammar and perspective changes. The mc’s dialogue was unrealistically obnoxious, heck, delirious. It’s plain and generic, I would understand the mistakes since you’re new. I reccomend you to not do those ”author’s pov” or “scene change” just stick to one perspective and other ways for scene change by all creative means, since it’s sickening. I hope you understand and have a good life.

LV 1

MrHollow

I very much like the story. It does contain grammatical errors but it gets better so thank you to the author for trying. I wish you the best author

LV 4

AmazeAngelo

The story was good and all why did you drop it

LV 4

Daoist0ZvZFg

Long as flash back the you dropped it not even that good to confusing yeh that my take on it