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[A/N]: Available chapters: Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday, Friday, and Sunday.
I will do my best to post five chapters a week, although I also have other responsibilities besides writing, as this is just my hobby.
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Aiden died at the hands of a woman who stabbed him for unknown reasons. Upon losing his life, he encountered a mysterious cosmic entity that offered him a deal:
Protect a world from invaders for 100 years, and in exchange, he could have a second chance at life.
Aiden accepted without hesitation. Thus, he spent a century defending that world with bravery.
After fulfilling his part of the deal, he left that world behind and moved on to another, now with the powerful gifts he had gained during all that time.
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[Main World]: High School DxD and some anime from everyday life.
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[Other worlds]: Isekai wa Smartphone to Tomo ni — ???
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#Date A Live
#High School DxD
#Neutral-good protagonist
#Faction creation
#Original' plots
#Sacred Gear creation
#Harem
#No yuri
#No netorare
#No ntr
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Schreiben Sie eine RezensionHonest Review The story feels rushed overall, and it often skips over crucial details that would make the scenes more engaging. For example, the author introduces elements like flames or swords but doesn’t describe them in any meaningful way. It’s not enough to just say, flames appeared or a sword appeared at his waist. Take the time to paint a picture for the reader. For instance, are the flames roaring with heat, flickering in shades of crimson and gold, or casting shadows that dance across the battlefield? Is the sword sleek and polished, with intricate carvings along its hilt, or does it have a rugged, battle-worn appearance that tells a story of countless battles? These small details create immersion. The same issue applies to the fights—they’re too short and lack proper buildup or choreography. Action sequences need to feel dynamic, with clear descriptions of movements and the emotional intensity of the moment. Instead, the fights often come across as abrupt and underwhelming. And the dialogue during these scenes? It’s repetitive and drags the pace down. A good fight should seamlessly blend action and dialogue, with each enhancing the other, rather than interrupting the flow. Overall, the story could be much more compelling with better pacing, richer descriptions, and more thoughtful integration of action and dialogue. Right now, it feels like a first draft with a lot of untapped potential.
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Great action and character dialogue but the future plans of building a faction ain't my cup of tea
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The writing is decent—not amazing, but not terrible either. One of the main issues is the frequent use of time skips. It’s not the concept of time skips that’s the problem, but how often they occur without warning. This makes it confusing to follow the timeline, as it’s unclear whether months or years have passed. Based on the title, The Day-to-Day Life of Sephiroth, I expected more of a slice-of-life focus. However, the poorly timed skips take away from that experience. For example, one moment he’s planning a date with a girl, and in the next, two more girls are introduced, and they’re already very close to him. The author tends to skip over the moments that truly capture the essence of a slice-of-life story, leaving readers feeling disconnected from the narrative.
Termasuk fanfic terbaik yang pernah saya baca, tentang kehidupan sehari-hari yang santai di padukan dengan beberapa pertempuran dan pengembangan bisnis
Autor Barbatos15
I hope this story will be complete author.