Suna's Shinigami (Version 1: Flawed Version)

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IZenusI

First and foremost don’t tell us all this nonsense at the start just discover them as he goes along. second don’t give something to take it away. if you have to take it away don’t give it in the first place. Third learn how nature and bloodline releases work. Fourth don’t give your character 100 abilIties or talents give him one that makes him special as the MC then the rest is just character progression. Finally, and this was the final straw for why I stopped reading. If you’re going to pick a different village actually come up with plot and relevent stories that make us attached to the character. Don’t skip his friendships and connections and then get confused when no one cares that they die. The entire bell test is pointless because the whole time all i can think about is how stupid this contexually is. It took me 30 seconds to think of a test where he had them search through the village and track him like tag in a certain timeframe. Even if you’re lazy anything is better than a copy paste of storywise content that does not fit.

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Kaizaki_GG

I like it. More update please. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Tandoris

A nice naruto ff , please don't make the mc too op too early , that's my only wish as i really love the story t'il now

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DaoistGsSe3J

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Justforfun

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krazy_

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whitethief274

I forgot to give my review still story is interesting and author is nice what more do I need. I am little strict with reviews so 4.4 just because of little favouritism I don't need to give any criticism because I already typed a lot in comment section. just keep writing don't drop see it to the end

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Terreneitor

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Mattex97

PAKURA FOR ROMANCE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

A goofld story man but can i ask u how u created fandom for character?

LV 4

SSan1212

the book is just ok. .......................................................................................................................................

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Azerath_Gamer

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AshGod7

Check out my naruto fanfic . the Mc is from a hidden Clan and creates his own Village . . . . . . . . . . . .

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XxPedroxX

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Daoist1JrigW

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VEYN

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Mrmore

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InnocentThoughts

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UchihaZenn

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ghost_wolf25

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